Uma Musume, Just an Ordinary Me

My opinion is the same as the one who gave it 4 stars in the comment area. There is not much problem with your writing style and conception, but the most important thing about the novels about horse racing girls is that just like their nature, running and emotion are the main themes of the novels about horse racing girls. Although everyone's idea is different, you don't need to write too many other things to add it. If you write it yourself, it's fine, but in the eyes of readers, many people won't like what you add. Of course, there are exceptions. If you really want to write seriously, I recommend reading other novels about horse racing girls. Seeing that you have persisted in writing so much, I will give you five stars to encourage you. This book has already been written so much that it is difficult to change it. If you still want to write it in the future, you can try my suggestions.

Four stars for encouragement, tell the truth (only personal opinion), for readers who only read the Saimao Musume fanfic, some of the extras and custom settings in the first 30 chapters are considered a poisonous point (currently I have only seen the first 30 chapters). The protagonist's dream time travel is a clever design, but at present, there are many plots that are far-fetched due to insufficient writing power, and the author has something to say, do not put it in the plot, it is best to put it at the end, and list it separately. The core points of the Saimao Musume fanfiction, especially For the trainer type, you can focus on the training of the horse girl and the trainer's control over the game. At present, the protagonist's golden finger seems to be a bit omnipotent. The awakening of the horse girl in the field should come from her own accumulation and emotional breakthrough (re). It could have been a breaking point, but at present, the protagonist's system has the ability to provide his horse girl with opportunities in the field, which may make the plot dull. I hope the author can handle it well.

Although it was confusing to read, the author found it to be the most interesting thing he had ever seen.

If you like Ma Niang's book, I'll give it five stars.

How to say it? I was confused when I read it, and I didn't know what the main plot was, but the author is a novice and it's already great. 👍

I like the setting very much, and it's not yandere-y. Good reviews [note]

My writing skills are okay. I suggest you focus on writing and don't bring in any personal stuff.