Warhammer: The Old World: Beginning as a Dragonborn of Grand Cathay

Tomato is also good, especially when writing about medieval Warhammer. But the author can't expect to make money. The audience for Warhammer is already small, plus Tomato The narrative of the plot is very Warhammer style, very similar to the prologue of Hammer 3. However, the protagonist is still too weak as the son of the Jade Dragon and does not have his own troops. Will Shen Zhu come back? What will happen after I come back? Will there be a heroine in the end?

After reading the chapter I have written so far, let me tell you your thoughts after reading it. Advantages: 1. The degree of racial restoration is very high, and the character, tone, and work style are very immersive. 2. The background of the medieval Warhammer story is explained in detail. I am Yunzui, but I think it is quite interesting. 3. There is nothing to say about the writing style, it looks very smooth. Disadvantage: [I am giving my opinion very seriously, I am not a black guy🤦] 1. There are too many characters, and sometimes it is not easy to remember. The author can use the method of apocryphal to mention it several times. Add some apocryphal before the first person's name in each chapter. If you don't read it for a long time, you will not remember it at all. 2. The protagonist is a Cathay Dragonborn, and his development in the empire is somewhat inappropriate. Of course, these are things for later and cannot be changed. In fact, Aurora has its own internal problems. I think that when writing about Aurora, it should be done in Aurora. Once you have a family, it would be better to go out and show off. If you continue to develop in the empire, it will always give me the feeling of being a native of the empire. 3. The identity of the time traveler has not been determined. Since you are a time traveler, you must have a lot of predictability. It will be better to be prepared in advance to prevent some things. Rather than blending in with the crowd and following the crowd. 4. The character development of the protagonist needs to be strengthened, this is the most important thing. The style of doing things, force is actually part of it, wisdom, how to behave and so on. There are too many supporting characters portrayed in the book, resulting in too few scenes for the protagonist in each chapter. Generally speaking, after fifty chapters, the reader can see the general character traits of the protagonist, and it is best to make the reader fall in love with the protagonist.

Name: Rouyun Gender: Female Race: Suzaku Weapon: Yin Yang Sword Magic weapon: Wish you as you wish, a treasure trove of tips (Calabash version) Stunt: Transform into Suzaku, Magma Storm Skills: Fire, Wind, Yin, Three Elements of Magic Human form: A beautiful girl wearing a red sun crown with phoenix flying feathers and a red sun flying skirt. Body: A red phoenix bird surrounded by flames and radiant glow. Introduction: The male protagonist's childhood friend likes the female protagonist Suzaku, the sacred beast of Cathay, and wants to follow him forever and marry him @ Kiss

The author's writing is good, and the plot design is reasonable and smooth. The author has an understanding of the Warhammer Middle Ages, and the battle plot is well designed. People in the Warhammer world do not have independent consciousness like NPCs. The author writes a lot of practical information, but it is not watery. However, the protagonist's behavior is not like a time traveler, but more like an aboriginal. It is recommended that the author arrange for the protagonist to have only a rough outline of the memory of the previous life after time travel.

There are still not many people watching, I hope there are no eunuchs

Come on, author, your writing is very good. If you write it according to this feeling, it will not be inferior to The Evidence of the Sun King.

Although the status of Suzaku within Cathay should not reach the level of a holy beast. The sky lanterns in Cathay's arms rely on Suzaku for magical flight. The author can refer to CA's abandoned design of Suzaku.

It is very, very beautiful. First of all, the writing style is very good, and secondly, it also grasps the core of the article, not that kind of thing. This article only covers the shell of a medieval war hammer, but you are already being watched by the four gods.

Not bad, although I like Shushu But Dragonborn also smells good

Come on, there are indeed fewer Warhammer novels now.