The Fairy Cried and Begged, Master, Please Don't Leave Me

The writing is quite good, but the length is too long. If I write the following stories at this pace, four or five stories may require 5.6 Hundred chapters. The outline may be able to handle it, but each story chapter is so long that readers may not be able to handle it. The update speed will slow down the rhythm and cause readers to lose. If you keep the current quality, you can keep reading it. One chapter a day may be less than 1/4 of a story in a month. Some people will abandon it if they no longer want to keep it. My personal opinion is that around 50 chapters is actually enough. If I want to write it more carefully, 70 chapters would be enough. For example, the protagonist is still "consuming" after it has been delayed until Chapter 92. Not to mention that it may be because of the regret of revealing the truth to arouse emotions. Before that, the readers' emotions will be exhausted first, and when everything is revealed, they will only feel "good energy consumption". I have lost the "expectation" evoked by the previous chapters. And now I feel that the rhythm is dragging on. The most powerful knife for revealing the truth in the "Sacrifice" genre is "the light will be extinguished after death, and there is no way to make up for it. There is no way to make up for it." It is not about seeing each other for the last time, revealing all regrets, and regretting it too late. Although it also guides emotions, it is not as strong as the previous one. Personally, I feel that firstly, the length can be refined and optimized, and it starts to drag a bit starting from chapter 90. Secondly, the daily progress and update speed drag down the rhythm of the story, which has already made some emotions disconnected. Finally, I would like to say that the author's writing style is quite good. It is considered to be very good among the many books I have read. The descriptions are also very delicate, but the processing of certain things is a bit slow, but it can also be said that it is because the novel's story line needs to be displayed to advance. Personal suggestions only represent individuals and are for reference only. Come on.

Overall, it's very good. The length of your simulation is more conducive to telling the world view setting of each simulation's storyline and the impact of supporting characters on the growth of the protagonist. It is also more conducive to portraying the personalities of the heroine and the protagonist. But to be honest, most people read this kind of simulation at a fast pace, looking at the Shura field with many female protagonists and the harem life of the male protagonist. Although I personally like this kind of delicate portrayal, for the sake of the author's future, I suggest that the author try to keep the length of the simulation as short as possible [face covering]

The author writes very well, but some people say the pace is too slow. But in this way, the plot and emotions can be displayed in a more delicate and thought-provoking way. This is also the author's preference and the characteristic of this book. If it has to be as fast-paced as other simulations, it will be ordinary and boring. There are so many fast-paced games, why bother chasing one more? On the contrary, it is the unique feature of this book that is really hard to find.

The writing and character creation are good, but some of the plots that should be mentioned in one sentence are a bit lengthy. If you can save on the plots that do not serve the main line, this book will be quite good if you hone it again [Like]

The first world is so classic, most people should have seen similar ones. Replacing humans and animals with immortals and demons is another traditional fairy tale [face covering], which results in no exciting points at the beginning, and the author's writing is a bit long, which delays the exciting points. Therefore, I suggest that the author should either make it shorter to make it more enjoyable, or add some funny and other elements.

The plot and characterization are both good. The main problem is that the plot is too long for an infinite stream. In fact, it can be offline immediately after running away or after the death of the Elephant King. Anyway, the introduction says that we will come back to it in the end. The content is not important and we can just come back and summarize it later.

Overall, it is a very good novel among simulation-themed novels. The first story is the best. It is about the end of the world between man and beast, but also to guard against other tribes. The male protagonist goes out of his way to save his sister. When he came, he saw his son under the peach tree, and when he returned, he was also under the peach tree. He used the peach blossom petals buried under the peach tree as a guide to give his son the soul of survival. The second story is a little longer, but the Thirteenth Princess's infatuation is indeed desperate. Even though it was concealed too much before, she still loves the hero without forgetting her original intention. Finally, she is happy and moved to know the whole story, and her efforts are worthy of it. The third story is also interesting, but the author is in a hurry to finish it, otherwise it shouldn't be too bad. The eldest lady who comes to break off the engagement is finally limited by her own limitations. In order to escape the fate of ordinary people, she is willing to become the servant of the male protagonist. Even after she dies, she is only willing to continue to take care of the male protagonist as a puppet. After many years of accompanying him day and night, she finally moved the male protagonist, created a core for him, and helped him achieve supreme status. The author's writing style is great, and the plot is delicately drawn. It is on par with My Sacrificial Life. I look forward to the next masterpiece. [Eat melon] [eat melon] [eat melon]

It feels good, the slow-paced immersion is good, the emotional portrayal is also unique, and the characters are very well drawn. As long as you control your own rhythm [love]...

The name is a bit crude, but the content is very interesting. Although the overall plot of this novel, many novels with this type of theme follow a similar trend and feel a bit like a template, but there are also many innovative places. This book is very detailed, especially in terms of emotions. The author is very attentive. Don't listen too much to other people's ideas, just follow your own ideas. It would be better if it is updated faster. Don't care about many people's criticisms. Come on, author.

Pros: The content is substantial, the characters are fleshed out, the story is good, I like it very much. Disadvantages: As a simulation article, the content is too long and the pace is a bit slow. It might be better if the label is changed. All in all, it's a masterpiece!

The writing is very good, not to mention that everyone is perfectly rendered, at least the ones related to the protagonist are written very well, and the plot is no problem, but I hope some things that can be abbreviated can be abbreviated, otherwise it will seem too delayed. There is no problem with the main body. Come on and update it. The author writes very well.

It's not that the pace is slow, but that every time it is the author's sincere thinking, sincere feelings, and serious attitude that does not want to be perfunctory and speed up the pace. The author should not be discouraged and stressed, just do what you think is right. [Like] [Blow kiss]

It's pretty good, but I don't know why the author wrote so little. It stands to reason that this is at least the beginning of 500,000 words, and the ending is a bit rushed. It feels like he has only written half of it. However, if I were to review it, this book could still be rated a 9.5. It is very similar to a book I read before. At least he should be pretty good at writing simulations. Each simulation is written very carefully, the rhythm is moderate, and it is very easy to grasp, at least in my opinion.

The writing is not bad, I would like to give it five stars for encouragement. In fact, it is good to write slower and have more details and daily descriptions. However, if the imitation article is written like this, many people who are used to eating fast food will find it objectionable. The simulation of One Hundred Chapter One is indeed a little too long on tomatoes, which will cause many people to keep it, and then keep it for a long time, causing them to forget to keep this novel. If I remember it, the sense of fragmentation will be more serious. I hope the author can adjust the rhythm again, or four updates a day is okay [shy].

It's a great work, but each simulation is a bit too long. The minimum limit is 100 chapters. Unless the writing can attract readers every time, it will be really torture. But if it is written well, it is also an advantage. Come on, author. The above is good. The second volume has 100+ chapters, but the author has not written anything new. It is still the same as the first volume. The protagonist does not explain when things happen, and makes the heroine go black and massacre everyone in the world. The male protagonist has to hold it in until he is about to die. He confesses and directly explodes to the black heroine. The anger can also kill you. If the third and fourth volumes still have this plot concept, then the lifespan of this book will not be long.

It's very interesting. It's rare to see a mock-up story. It can depict a detailed plot. Queshi is good-looking. I rarely comment on it. This is my first comment on Tomato because Queshi is so good-looking [Blow kiss] Needless to say, it looks good, but it's too slow. Even the donkeys in the production team don't dare to rest like this [smile] One star is missing and the update is too slow. Prepare to support the book.

It's really good to read. It's different from some mock articles I've seen before. I like the author's writing style very much. It's really not the same kind of article. I hope the author won't be swayed and will continue to write like this. It's really beautiful. I think a story with 100 chapters is a bit too little. It can be further refined and the details optimized. The look and feel is very important, don't do it for the sake of it. In line with public taste. Simplifying and deleting details is something that some people who really like to read like, instead of omitting the key moments and only writing the key points. I think this is the novel written to make up the word count, but the author should not break the hearts of the readers just to make up the word count. I suggest that if you keep it like this, it will definitely become popular. Time will tell everything. Also, I don't think the protagonist should be a stallion. You portrayed it so well in Chapter 1 that you may not be able to catch it next.

The simulation time is relatively long, I like this kind of thing very much, and the character description is also quite detailed, but the data in this book is not very good, I hope it will not fail.

The writing is really good. Although the pace may be a little slower, there is no big difference in the plot. Maybe the plot may be more relaxed and self-healing. I won't read this much, but I recommend you write it faster after all, it's really tiring to wait😫

Can the author hurry up? It's not enough. It's so boring. I want you to finish the next plot before watching it [smile][smile][smile][smile][smile][smile][smile][smile][smile][smile][smile][smile][smile][smile][smile][smile][smile][smile] But let's not say it's pretty, it's really pretty, I also like to eat knives [shy]

Overall, he's pretty good, the characters are more delicately drawn, and the plot is okay. , The writing is delicate and the writing is slow is not a problem. It wouldn't be a problem if there were more authors. The characters are still very delicate [laughing]

The process is very good, the logic is clear, and the emotional description is very accurate. What impressed me most is that after her brother left him and met again to say harsh words, she saw her brother crying and hurriedly explained that she just wanted his brother to accompany her. It touched my feelings very much. It has been a long time since I read an article in which the emotions are neither fast nor slow.

The full text is almost innocuous, but the plot is indeed relatively slow. 1. It may be that the author has too little information. 2. The suggested process can be written in detail, but the beginning and end of a simulation can be relatively concise and can be told in the form of a story.

I just finished reading the first story. Your first story is very good. I have read the simulation before, but I feel that the story is too short. Your first story is really good. I support it with five-star praise [like][like][like] Come on buddy, the second story is also very well written.

Okay, don't hang up. I think the author's written performance is not good, but I like this rhythm and style very much. It's flesh-and-blood. I hope the author can stick to it and finish it. Don't give up.

It can be said that the ancient civilization is well written, but it is too long. You can write less in the next simulation. It is enough to control it to 5 or 60 chapters. The details can be written and it is not very long. The details and foreshadowing in chapters 7, 8, 2, and 30 cannot be written well, so work hard, author [working on draft] [working on draft] [working on draft]

Big brother, big sister, I really beg you. It's rare to see a well-written simulation essay. Don't make it too long! More than 80 pictures are enough [face covering]

The emotional description is very delicate, but the pace is slow, but this is also the reason why I like this book. The slow pace means that each character will be more three-dimensional and vivid, I like it!

It's not bad, but the author didn't realize when he first started writing that the main plot was about feelings rather than the protagonist's family history in the simulated world. Of course, the author also realized it later, and I believe the author will get better and better as he writes [full]

It is completely different from other simulation time travel books. The author is willing to use pen and ink to describe the relationship between the simulated heroine and the hero in detail. Unlike other simulation books, it is very short and has a lot of heroines in one go. It's just the title that puts such a good work down. I've read it 9 times, and it was only the 10th time I clicked in to take a closer look that I realized something was different.