My Fortune System Is Acting Really Strange

The protagonist and heroine are well set up, and the background is well set up. The only bad thing is that one of them is recruited to hunt down the son of luck, his body turns into a divine body, and his soul is tortured into a ghost. In the end, his salvation has merit and he is tortured into a ghost. There is no karma to punish him, but his salvation has merit 😢😢😢😢

Let me tell you my opinion. The daily writing is good and relatively relaxed. The plots of the protagonist getting into trouble, Taoism awakening, and the master taking action are also okay. However, the writing is a bit messy, mainly because there are many foreshadowings and arrangements. To put it simply, it is a bit long, which makes the plot a bit messy. Then, for some people (including me), the only poisonous point is to become a tomboy. Maybe I don't like this kind of thing because I think everything is compatible with it. Women are more elf-like, which is no problem. After all, many people are like this, but shouldn't men be more handsome? Then she turned into a boy and a girl. Well, maybe I just couldn't accept it. Generally speaking, the author is good at daily life, but he doesn't write much about it. The adventure and battle plots can be as concise as possible. The main thing is to extend the lines, and they can be embellished with foreshadowing, but don't make the points longer. (In fact, I feel that the plot can be more abstract, or the characters). In terms of characters, the protagonist should be as strong as possible, the heroine can have more emotional drama (giving birth to a litter [sneaky smile]), and the supporting characters can embellish daily life and characters. Characters and villains need to be deeply impressed and portrayed, especially if you want to highlight who is the stronger protagonist, deepen the impression of the villain, and then solve it in one move. Finally, if the author wants to write about a boy and a girl, he should add it in the introduction. If it will change back later, emmm, I think we can create a multi-form. For example, Golden Crow is the first one, All Things Affinity is the second one, and the rest are other characters. Finally, author, come on!

The plot is good, but at the beginning the names of the protagonist and the heroine are always wrong.

😢 😢 Encourage yourself. Is anyone watching? Can you comment?

Boy, this kind of opportunity is not something you can touch. Leave it to me, the Great Sage Huangsha, to enjoy it.

Well, all I can say is that the future is promising and the plot can be better.

It looks good, but don't cut it. It's also on the recommendation list, and I found it on the recommendation list. @

I want Xi to regain his memory quickly 😏

The author jumped on it as soon as he came here

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