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As a fast-travel novel, the plot of this book is very much in line with my taste. I would like to make some suggestions here. It's the various descriptions that go on for a long time. Better to refine it. I love the other ones very much, and I hope you can take my suggestions. [Send heart][Send heart][Send heart]

The plot is pretty good and the writing is also good. The shortcoming is that it always writes long paragraphs of descriptions of characters and environments, which are very similar to AI, and it is not very attractive when written. I hope the author can streamline it [Blowing Kiss] It is not easy to find two female protagonists who are very suitable for me.

I read the latest chapter in one breath. If I have any feelings about this book, it is that the author is growing up with the heroines in her works. Many times, we find that we need an opportunity to find ourselves, and the appearance of Shu Shu is to give these heroines an opportunity to find themselves. But before that, we have to make sure whether we have given up. From Ye Beginning with Li Xuan, then Gu Lianying, Shen Zhaoyu, and now Lin Shuyue, I have seen four different lives. Just like I like Ye Lixuan's brilliance and restraint, and her work "Eternal Love" after confirming her love, the eternity of being supportive and evenly matched for each other; I like Gu Lianying's unyielding in adversity, and her own self-confidence that Xiaohui talked about. , Just like she has never lost herself; she likes Shen Zhaoyu's staunchness, and her focus and persistence on love, and it is very gratifying to watch a flower grow; she likes Lin Shuyue's dedicated and pure love, maybe she is not perfect, but she has been working hard; and Shu Shu's forbearing and lasting love gives every heroine full tolerance and freedom. Now many people like the big heroine novel , I am the same, watching women become self-reliant and not becoming vases, I have my own thoughts, but there are not so many things that go well in life, you always have to live on the line, so I like sweet stories, and this book is a sweet story, although many male characters in it make me hate it, but you always have to face it in life, right? So, the most important thing is to work hard to strengthen yourself. Just like the author described a thing too complicatedly at the beginning, resulting in a lot of unexplored places. Now he has control over his work. Isn't this a kind of heroine? Maybe the story will be more exciting in the future, but life is short, why not give it a try? I hope this book sells well and I hope it can be released smoothly. I will review it when the time comes.

It's nice to watch. I like the ones with different heroines in each world [Blow kiss] Those 1v1 scenes with the same person in each world are too cliche and too idealistic. Talking about all types of beauties is the right answer [OK]

The plot is ok, I personally think the environment scenes and character descriptions are a bit long (don't 🙅🏻‍♀️ scold me)

Author, please reflect on yourself, why do you have the nerve to update every day? Beautiful! Big cheers for the author

All I can say is don't suppress cheats, the description of the environment and characters is less, and the emotional aspect is still a bit fast. You can get rid of the male protagonist as soon as possible (I really don't like a guy jumping up and down like crazy, so use some strategy and don't let the male protagonist stick to his face). Use this part to develop the emotional line, give it five stars to encourage it

There is still a little bit of environment description and clothing description in the first few pictures, which adds to the taste, but it is still okay in the later stages. There is a lot less environment description and clothing description. The author will continue to work hard [currently working on the manuscript]

It's really beautifully written! The author worked very hard too!

The writing is pretty good, and every world is quite sweet. It would be nice if there weren't so many scene descriptions, but then there won't be so many scene descriptions.

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There are too many descriptions of the environment and appearance. I think it could be shortened a bit and the plot should be written more. It would still be very interesting!

It's beautiful. It's very beautiful. It would be better if the author could publish more than ten chapters one day without saying a word.

In the first dozen chapters, most of it is just water, but in the following worlds, it can be seen that the plot and writing are improving, it can be maintained, and it is worth pursuing.

Except for the description of the lobby environment which is too detailed, everything else is pretty good\^O^/. The heroine removes the targets step by step, without the awkward feeling.

The plot is not procrastinating, the plot is relatively enjoyable, and the protagonist is crisp and clear

It's so sweet, please give me more sugar [Adoration] But there are too many descriptions of characters and situations, and it feels a bit like reading a composition.

Nice! Worth recommending!

Looks good, come on Looks great, cheers!

It feels good, but if it is a quick wear, one unit could be shorter

In other words, there are too many descriptions of appearance and environment, so we can shorten them appropriately.

It's okay, but there are too many descriptions of the environment.

It looks good, but there is a lot of nonsense, [smile]

The first world I watched was overall pretty good, but there were too few posts [smile]

Delicious, so delicious, I jumped up to eat it

Not bad, at least I know how to avoid lightning, but I hope there will be less description of appearance, it can be there, but not too much. The main thing is to know how to avoid lightning, otherwise it would be unbearable for those with mysophobia. It's too little, so I'll keep it up first. I haven't finished the first story yet.

Love to watch, love to watch, love to watch, like, like, come on!

It's really not enough

Really good-looking, highly recommended

The writing is okay, but the description of appearance and the scenery are too many [face covering]