Qingmei Is Still so Cute After Meeting Again After a Long Separation

Judging from the titles of each chapter, the author's cultural level seems to be quite high, but when I read the text, something is wrong. I was really tired after reading it. There are only a few thousand words in one chapter, and the whole article is full of modifiers, such as what kind of sun, what kind of smile, what kind of taste, etc. After reading too many descriptions of the male protagonist, I thought he was Lockhart from "Harry Potter". He always smiles and has a charming smile. I know that your protagonist is a gentle person, but can you stop describing him too often? I kept repeating those few sentences over and over again, what "Memories of the past flooded into my heart, revealing a warm smile." "The moment our eyes met, time seemed to have frozen." "Lin Yu'an murmured to himself, the corners of his mouth raised unconsciously." "His voice was gentle and kind, like a spring breeze blowing through Lin Xiaoxia's heart." "When Lin Yu'an saw this, a warm smile appeared at the corner of his mouth, which made people feel extremely comfortable and at ease like the warm sun in winter." "Lin Yu'an's clear and magnetic voice suddenly came from behind, as if a warm spring breeze was gently blowing by my ears." "The tone is full of doting and kindness" "Lin Xiaoxia was stunned for a moment, and then a faint blush appeared on her face." The whole article is full of this kind of description, and the main text is not much modified. The three most important chapters at the beginning that attract readers are all full of this kind of description. What kind of person is the protagonist? What kind of person is the heroine? Apart from being gentle and introverted, I can't see anything else. The protagonist is a person who seems gentle but actually has no sense of boundaries. He doesn't ask whether the heroine has a new crush or whether she would mind physical contact. After a while, she pats her shoulders and touches her head. The next few times are fine after she didn't reject him the first time. But to be so familiar with each other after not seeing each other for ten years, doesn't it feel unreasonable and stiff? You can write like this when you have a special plot, such as when you look at each other affectionately, or when you meet again for the first time, but it would be too boring to describe it like this in daily life, it is very watery and boring. The characters are poorly constructed, the plot is blunt, and most importantly, the look and feel is poor.

I have revised the content of Chapters 1-15 and fixed some plots and details. The author has tried his best. If there are any problems, please comment. [Send heart][Send heart][Send heart]