One day, Lin Yu'an got a call from his father. His childhood sweetheart, whom he hadn't seen in ten years, was coming to teach at Modu University. His father told him to tidy up his room so she could move right in when she arrived.
Many years later, Lin Yu'an stood holding his daughter's hand and pointed to an old apartment building. He said softly, “That's where your mom and I used to live.”
“The rooms inside are so tiny,” his daughter, Lin Xiaoqiu, remarked.
Lin Xiaxia looked at her and said softly, “They really are small, but back then, that was the only place where I could find comfort.”
(The hero and heroine's personalities might change a little in the later chapters. They haven't seen each other for ten years, after all, so of course they'll be reserved around each other at first. Later, they'll show their true colors.)
(I’m not good at writing blurbs.)
Judging from the titles of each chapter, the author's cultural level seems to be quite high, but something is wrong when I read the text. It is really tiring to read. One chapter is only a few thousand words, and the whole article is full of modifiers, such as what kind of sun, what kind of smile, what kind of taste, etc. After reading too many descriptions of the male protagonist, I thought the protagonist was Lockhart from "Harry Potter". He smiles at every turn and has a charming smile. I know that your protagonist is a gentle person, but can you stop describing it too much? I kept going over and over those few sentences, "Memories of the past came to my heart like a flood, revealing a warm smile." "The moment our eyes met, time seemed to have frozen." "Lin Yu'an murmured to himself, the corners of his mouth rising unconsciously." "His voice was gentle and kind, as if a spring breeze was blowing through Lin Xiaoxia's heart." "When Lin Yu'an saw this, a warm smile appeared at the corner of his mouth, which made people feel extremely comfortable and at ease like the warm sun in winter." "Lin Yu'an's clear and magnetic voice suddenly came from behind, like a warm spring breeze blowing gently by his ears." "The tone was full of doting and kindness" "Lin Xiaoxia was stunned for a moment, and then a faint blush appeared on her face." The whole article is full of this kind of description, and the main text is not much modified. The three most important chapters at the beginning that attract readers are all full of this kind of description. What kind of person is the protagonist? What kind of person is the heroine? Nothing can be seen except that he is gentle and introverted. The protagonist is a person who seems to be gentle but actually has no sense of boundaries. He does not ask whether the heroine has a new crush or whether she would mind physical contact. After a while, he pats the shoulder and touches the head. The next few times are fine after the first time he did not refuse, but they are so familiar after they have not seen each other for ten years. Don't you think it is unreasonable and very stiff? You can write like this when you have a special plot, such as when you look at each other affectionately, or when you meet again for the first time, but it would be too boring to describe it in daily life. It is very watery and boring. The character design is not good, the plot is blunt, and most importantly, the look and feel is poor.
I have revised the content of Chapters 1-15 and fixed some plots and details. The author has tried his best. If there are any problems, please comment. 💕💕💕