The introduction has been updated (I watched a video and wrote a novel on a whim, so updates may not be guaranteed. And there is no outline, so I just take it step by step.)
Jiang Lei, who traveled to a different world because of a computer explosion, looked at the gray world around him.
Jiang Lei:......
Not buddy! ! !
But as the development progressed, Jiang Lei found that the panel in front of him seemed to be MC?
"You know, I'm happy." Jiang Lei silently took out a shulker box filled with enchanted golden apples...
(Immortal realm: Qi refining, foundation building, elixir formation, Yuanying, spirit transformation, void refining, integration, Mahayana, overcoming tribulations)
(Martial arts realm: third-rate, second-rate, first-rate master, great master, innate heavenly being)
(Soul realm: virtual realm, real realm, transformed realm)
Mainly the introduction, the rest of the text will be deleted. But I have to wait until I finish writing Xuantian Continent before I can update and change the previous content. Or finish writing the Eastern Region (it shouldn't take a year, please come back and read it after a year, I promise you won't miss it. Because everything about setting the boundaries has been added, I feel a little unwilling to not finish it. In April, I said there was a possibility of resuming the update in September because I started school in September, so I should have time to write. Now I'm still working, because I don't have much passion to write at night. I haven't written a few chapters, and I can't keep up with the updates even if I publish them. So I understand that you don't want to wait. I will speed up the progress later, and you can also give me some mods that I don't know, and I will write them if I find it suitable.)
Reader comments
I don't have enough experience. What are your instructions for eating? [What]
(Next to middle) Four-star green+, level 2
Sense of substitution A, attraction B, plug-in A, setting C, writing style B, imagination C, rhythm D, main line C, character design C, logic C
Extra points: supporting characters are random D, story is bland D
Personal feelings: The overall feeling is quite good, but the plot is very empty.
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#Objective evaluation. If you have different opinions, you can evaluate it yourself. This way it should not be blocked.
1. Recommended Evaluation Criteria·Ninth Edition Revised
(1) Evaluation items
1. Sense of immersion: The attraction at the beginning and the foreshadowing of the world view.
2. Attraction: follow-up attraction, follow-up reading.
3. Plug-in: The golden finger is reasonable and functionally innovative.
4. Setting: background credibility, system self-consistency.
5. Writing style: Does each paragraph promote the development of the plot?
6. Brainstorming: Whether each small story is connected to the main line.
7. Rhythm: Are you tired of reading or feel that the word count is low?
8. Main line: Whether all plots revolve around the core goal.
9. Character design: Is the protagonist's behavior consistent and whether the supporting characters are impressive?
10. Logic: Whether making money, cultivating, etc. Are consistent with basic cognition.
11. Extra points deduction: balance the scores of the first 10 items, data, economy, structure, three perspectives, supporting roles, time, geography, knowledge...
(2) Evaluation grouping
1. First impression: sense of immersion at the beginning, subsequent attraction
2. World background: reasonable plug-ins and background settings
3. Content: Writing • Promote plot, imagination • Secondary innovation
4. Structure: Rhythm • Overall coherence, main line • Close to the center
5. Details: Persona·Character design, logic·Consistent with common sense
(3) Rating of recommended evaluation items
1. Highlights: S-level 4 points, A-level 2 points
2. Standard: 1 point for Grade B, 0 points for Grade B
3. Defects: Grade C - 1 point, Grade D - 3 points
3. Rating of online articles
(1) Up, up
1. Red+: Total score is above level 30
2. Red: Total score is 26 or above
3. Red-: 10 items A
(2) High-quality and bright web articles
1. Orange+: Total score is level 22 or above
2. Orange: Total score is 18 or above
3. Orange-: 5 items A
(3) Shang Xia·High-level online articles
1. Purple+: Total score is 14 or above
2. Purple: Total score is level 10 or above
3. Purple-: 10 items B
(4) Upper-intermediate and high-level online writing
1. Five-star blue+: total score is level 6 or above
2. Five-star blue: total score is level 4 or above
4. Five-star green: 5 items B
(5) Zhongyi·High-standard online articles
1. Four-star green+: total score is level 2 or above
2. Four-star green: total score is level 1
3. Four-star white: 10 items C
(6) Middle 2 and 2·Standard online text
1. Samsung White+: Total score -1 level
2. Samsung White: Total Score -2 Level
(7) Middle and lower three•Flawed web articles
1. Samsung Gray+: Total score -3 levels
2. Samsung Gray: Total Score -4 Level
(6) Xia Shang·Web articles with great flaws
1. Samsung Black+: Total score -5 levels
2. Samsung Black: Total Score -6 Level
3. One-star black +: total score -7 levels
4. One-star black: total score -8 levels
5. Two-star black: 10 items D
One star is an invalid rating, two stars is the lowest rating
(7) Medium•No rating (lower middle to upper middle)
(8) Inferior • No rating (middle to lower to lower)
(9) Xiaxia·Malicious
1. The first stage: total score - below level 10
2. The second stage: total score - below level 20
3. The third stage: 10 E
It's okay, but I still hope that the protagonist will be more involved in outside affairs. I feel that his series of actions have brought me back to the time when I was playing liver games, which is a bit painful. After all, I do so much just to enjoy myself.
The description is relatively concise, with fewer details and metaphors. The protagonist acts spontaneously and feels good. It doesn't matter if you like the protagonist. The NPC looks shocked. If nothing else, he will continue to pursue it, but what?
Why should I persist in learning the Turtle Breath Kung Fu?
Do you plan to honor the golden apples you casually promised?
When will you add other modules? Why don't you try it and see what the effect is?
Create mode once a month, why have you never used it? Including the time when I fought wither, level 30 is no big deal.
It's not bad, it's pretty good-looking, because it's too confusing to watch. I have a question, are the villagers put in hell to grow? Also, was a tunnel dug downward? Aren't you afraid of being discovered by your spiritual consciousness? If anyone reads the book review first, please answer me after reading it [Note], I am too lazy to turn forward.
It feels pretty good. The game development and plot advancement are well written, and there are no messy things.
Although the author is new to writing novels, he has been playing games for a long time. The various resources and data of the protagonist should be a record of the step-by-step development of the author's newly opened archive. In short, it is highly recommended.
I'm not bragging, it's a very interesting novel. It draws on the ideas of many previous MC immortality books, and also incorporates many of my own ideas (it just doesn't generate electricity [smile])
So far, the quality is okay
It's pretty good. The subject matter is novel. As long as the author grasps it well and doesn't overwhelm the combat power, this book will be a top-notch book on Tomato.
It's pretty good-looking. There's nothing poisonous about it so far, and it's quite bland. I think it's pretty good-looking [eat melon] [eat melon] [eat melon]
The writing is okay, keep up the good work
There are no surprises other than frequent check-ups. Although it is suppressed, it is still invincible. It is a pity that the subsequent plot has not unfolded.
The writing is good, but it could be better. You can read Lao Huang's MC novels to learn from them (Back Room and the newly released Xiuxian). The character and character of the protagonist written by Lao Huang are really good (someone can do whatever he wants, but not poisonous)
It's very well written. I hope this book will stick with me until it's finished. It won't suck.
It's quite good. I've always wanted a book of this type. I finally saw it today. It's very beautiful and the setting is reasonable. It's just that the update is a bit slow. Come on, author! ! ! !
Five-star support
Laozuo, haven't you come back yet?
You must hold on
The writing is pretty good, keep it up👍🏻
Very nice and casual.
Well written, keep it up [cool]
Not bad
Do you have to send it in 5 characters?
Come on, come on, come on, come on
Comparable to the old yellow trumpet, the youth version
In case I can't find it in September. Added bookshelf. Although I generally don't look at bookshelves.
It's good to watch. Come on, author. I'll watch the video to support you.
Shen Nong tastes a hundred herbs, this is another MC template different world novel after the author who succeeded Huang. The writing is smooth and the battle is exciting.
I don't have enough experience. What are your instructions for eating? [What]
(Next to middle) Four-star green+, level 2 Sense of substitution A, attraction B, plug-in A, setting C, writing style B, imagination C, rhythm D, main line C, character design C, logic C Extra points: supporting characters are random D, story is bland D Personal feelings: The overall feeling is quite good, but the plot is very empty. ─────────────────── #Objective evaluation. If you have different opinions, you can evaluate it yourself. This way it should not be blocked. 1. Recommended Evaluation Criteria·Ninth Edition Revised (1) Evaluation items 1. Sense of immersion: The attraction at the beginning and the foreshadowing of the world view. 2. Attraction: follow-up attraction, follow-up reading. 3. Plug-in: The golden finger is reasonable and functionally innovative. 4. Setting: background credibility, system self-consistency. 5. Writing style: Does each paragraph promote the development of the plot? 6. Brainstorming: Whether each small story is connected to the main line. 7. Rhythm: Are you tired of reading or feel that the word count is low? 8. Main line: Whether all plots revolve around the core goal. 9. Character design: Is the protagonist's behavior consistent and whether the supporting characters are impressive? 10. Logic: Whether making money, cultivating, etc. Are consistent with basic cognition. 11. Extra points deduction: balance the scores of the first 10 items, data, economy, structure, three perspectives, supporting roles, time, geography, knowledge... (2) Evaluation grouping 1. First impression: sense of immersion at the beginning, subsequent attraction 2. World background: reasonable plug-ins and background settings 3. Content: Writing • Promote plot, imagination • Secondary innovation 4. Structure: Rhythm • Overall coherence, main line • Close to the center 5. Details: Persona·Character design, logic·Consistent with common sense (3) Rating of recommended evaluation items 1. Highlights: S-level 4 points, A-level 2 points 2. Standard: 1 point for Grade B, 0 points for Grade B 3. Defects: Grade C - 1 point, Grade D - 3 points 3. Rating of online articles (1) Up, up 1. Red+: Total score is above level 30 2. Red: Total score is 26 or above 3. Red-: 10 items A (2) High-quality and bright web articles 1. Orange+: Total score is level 22 or above 2. Orange: Total score is 18 or above 3. Orange-: 5 items A (3) Shang Xia·High-level online articles 1. Purple+: Total score is 14 or above 2. Purple: Total score is level 10 or above 3. Purple-: 10 items B (4) Upper-intermediate and high-level online writing 1. Five-star blue+: total score is level 6 or above 2. Five-star blue: total score is level 4 or above 4. Five-star green: 5 items B (5) Zhongyi·High-standard online articles 1. Four-star green+: total score is level 2 or above 2. Four-star green: total score is level 1 3. Four-star white: 10 items C (6) Middle 2 and 2·Standard online text 1. Samsung White+: Total score -1 level 2. Samsung White: Total Score -2 Level (7) Middle and lower three•Flawed web articles 1. Samsung Gray+: Total score -3 levels 2. Samsung Gray: Total Score -4 Level (6) Xia Shang·Web articles with great flaws 1. Samsung Black+: Total score -5 levels 2. Samsung Black: Total Score -6 Level 3. One-star black +: total score -7 levels 4. One-star black: total score -8 levels 5. Two-star black: 10 items D One star is an invalid rating, two stars is the lowest rating (7) Medium•No rating (lower middle to upper middle) (8) Inferior • No rating (middle to lower to lower) (9) Xiaxia·Malicious 1. The first stage: total score - below level 10 2. The second stage: total score - below level 20 3. The third stage: 10 E
It's okay, but I still hope that the protagonist will be more involved in outside affairs. I feel that his series of actions have brought me back to the time when I was playing liver games, which is a bit painful. After all, I do so much just to enjoy myself.
The description is relatively concise, with fewer details and metaphors. The protagonist acts spontaneously and feels good. It doesn't matter if you like the protagonist. The NPC looks shocked. If nothing else, he will continue to pursue it, but what? Why should I persist in learning the Turtle Breath Kung Fu? Do you plan to honor the golden apples you casually promised? When will you add other modules? Why don't you try it and see what the effect is? Create mode once a month, why have you never used it? Including the time when I fought wither, level 30 is no big deal.
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It can be written well, personal feeling
It's not bad, it's pretty good-looking, because it's too confusing to watch. I have a question, are the villagers put in hell to grow? Also, was a tunnel dug downward? Aren't you afraid of being discovered by your spiritual consciousness? If anyone reads the book review first, please answer me after reading it [Note], I am too lazy to turn forward.
It feels pretty good. The game development and plot advancement are well written, and there are no messy things.
Although the author is new to writing novels, he has been playing games for a long time. The various resources and data of the protagonist should be a record of the step-by-step development of the author's newly opened archive. In short, it is highly recommended.
I'm not bragging, it's a very interesting novel. It draws on the ideas of many previous MC immortality books, and also incorporates many of my own ideas (it just doesn't generate electricity [smile])
So far, the quality is okay
It's pretty good. The subject matter is novel. As long as the author grasps it well and doesn't overwhelm the combat power, this book will be a top-notch book on Tomato.
It's pretty good-looking. There's nothing poisonous about it so far, and it's quite bland. I think it's pretty good-looking [eat melon] [eat melon] [eat melon]
The writing is okay, keep up the good work
There are no surprises other than frequent check-ups. Although it is suppressed, it is still invincible. It is a pity that the subsequent plot has not unfolded.
The writing is good, but it could be better. You can read Lao Huang's MC novels to learn from them (Back Room and the newly released Xiuxian). The character and character of the protagonist written by Lao Huang are really good (someone can do whatever he wants, but not poisonous)
It's very well written. I hope this book will stick with me until it's finished. It won't suck.
It's quite good. I've always wanted a book of this type. I finally saw it today. It's very beautiful and the setting is reasonable. It's just that the update is a bit slow. Come on, author! ! ! !
Five-star support Laozuo, haven't you come back yet?
You must hold on
The writing is pretty good, keep it up👍🏻
Very nice and casual.
Well written, keep it up [cool]
Not bad Do you have to send it in 5 characters?
Come on, come on, come on, come on
Comparable to the old yellow trumpet, the youth version
In case I can't find it in September. Added bookshelf. Although I generally don't look at bookshelves.
It's good to watch. Come on, author. I'll watch the video to support you.
Shen Nong tastes a hundred herbs, this is another MC template different world novel after the author who succeeded Huang. The writing is smooth and the battle is exciting.
Personally I feel good.