The deaths of so many characters in The King's Avatar left me with regrets. Recently, I happened upon this and wanted to write a story about Versatile Mage to make up for them. The protagonist, Yang Bin, possesses the Ten-Tails' husk, the Demonic Statue of the Outer Path. He gradually revives the Ten-Tails and rises to the pinnacle.
The pace is a bit fast. I think you want to get through the early stages quickly. It's understandable, but it's a bit sloppy and is particularly unfriendly to someone like me who listens to books. You didn't break it up into paragraphs, which makes the sentence very illogical. The subject matter is very novel. Why do you say it needs to be divided into paragraphs? Because normal people can't speak so many words in one sentence, it seems weirder the more you listen to it. The main reason is that the early stage is a bit sloppy, and the segmentation makes it difficult for me to listen. I remember that there should be some software that can help segment it, right? Like some AI or something like that
The pace feels a bit fast, but there are not many full-time mages on Tomato that are still being updated. I hope the author can keep updating 👍
The pace is a bit fast. I think you want to get through the early stages quickly. It's understandable, but it's a bit sloppy and is particularly unfriendly to someone like me who listens to books. You didn't break it up into paragraphs, which makes the sentence very illogical. The subject matter is very novel. Why do you say it needs to be divided into paragraphs? Because normal people can't speak so many words in one sentence, it seems weirder the more you listen to it. The main reason is that the early stage is a bit sloppy, and the segmentation makes it difficult for me to listen. I remember that there should be some software that can help segment it, right? Like some AI or something like that
The pace feels a bit fast, but there are not many full-time mages on Tomato that are still being updated. I hope the author can keep updating 👍
Writing style needs to be improved
Very good
Women's novels slipped away