Restarting Life: I Redeem My Childhood Sweetheart and Conquer the Business World

I have been reading sweet articles recently, and I have a deep understanding of this kind of article. Regarding this novel, I feel a little disappointed (five stars and gifts, the author continues to work hard), there are a few specific points ① The article has less foreshadowing and more foreshadowing. It is understandable that I have just started writing this novel. As a reader, I did not have a deep impression on the protagonist and heroine. The character characteristics are not obvious and the character introduction is not adequate. ② The plot jumps quickly without good connection. I feel that the plot of the article is scattered, and some plots are a bit abrupt. The past situations of the male and female protagonists can be explained in appropriate plots to make the characters fuller. Appropriate explanations should also be given before some key plots. ③As a sweet novel, the sweetness is not high enough. Part of the reason is because the novel has just started and there are few plots. Excessive description of emotions will make people boring. From this point, the next question arises. Some of the writing is vulgar and a bit awkward. Some of the descriptions of Chen Mo make it difficult to understand his character. It may also be that I read too quickly and am confused about the emotions he shows sometimes. ④ Specifically speaking, the story line is vague, the emotional line is not in place, and the characters are lacking. There are following suggestions: 1. Contrast cute setting - Case: Professor Gao Leng accurately weighs chemical reagents in the laboratory, but on rainy days he packs ginger tea in a thermos cup and quietly puts it in the intern's locker. - Skills: The rigor in the professional field contrasts with the tenderness in private, the focused eyes under the microscope contrast with the panic when peeking at each other 2. Five senses awakening method -Visual: Osmanthus flakes stuck to the tips of her hair - Touch: The velvety touch of the sweater cuff accidentally rubbing against the back of the hand - Hearing: The moment when the scratching sound of pencil on the sketchbook suddenly stops - Smell: lingering cedar aroma on the shared scarf - Taste: Deliberately ordered the wrong caramel macchiato for sweetness 2. Scene construction template The formula of exciting scenes = daily objects + accidental contact + time stasis - In front of the supermarket refrigerated cabinet, fingers touching while reaching for the last box of strawberry yogurt - Beside the library window, fingertips pressed simultaneously between the pages of books blown by the wind - When the subway suddenly stopped, the hand holding the waist and the blush behind the ears 3. Dialogue design mentality 1. The Art of Subtext - Surface: "Give me half of your headphones." - Hidden: Want to enter your music world - Surface: "Help me taste the sweetness of the milk tea" - Hidden: Want to kiss indirectly 2. Silent tension - Sudden eye contact when sharing quiet time - The frequency of eyelash trembling when you want to speak but stop talking - 0.5 Seconds of hesitation before fingertips are about to touch 4. The secret of rhythm control Emotional heating curve: First encounter at a convenience store (eye tracking) → Chance encounter in a cafe (passing items) → Borrowing an umbrella on a rainy day (physical contact) → Late night messages (emoticon attack and defense) → Chance encounter on a morning run (getting along naturally) 5. Detail amplifier - Item symbolization: always bring extra hot milk, an old repaired pen - Environmental projection: breathing paintings on the glass, peeking at the reflection in the bus window - Body language: the lines of the forearms that are tense when rolling up the sleeves, the long fingers that turn the pen unconsciously when speaking Lightning protection guide: 1. Avoid direct confessions. 2. Be careful in using exaggerated metaphors and avoid "His eyes are like the Milky Way" 3. Control the sugar concentration and appropriately add sour moments (such as missing the last train but unexpectedly getting alone time) Classic structure reference: The third law of chance encounters: library → convenience store → pet hospital, increasing the intimacy value by 10% each time Weather Assist Law: Sudden showers/strong winds/power outages act as catalysts Item cycle: lent scarf → washed and returned → "forgotten" again at the other party's place Practice suggestions: 1. Observe the details of three real couples' interactions 2. Record three sets of life clips that make people smile. 3. Rewrite three cliche plots (such as catching a scarf after falling instead of being caught by an automatic door) Remember that the highest level of sweetness is hidden in restrained details. When readers dig out the sugar between the lines, the dopamine produced will be three times stronger than if the sugar is sprinkled directly. Try to bury more than 5 heart-warming clues in the 200-word scene, so that the sweetness will spread naturally like the fragrance of tea. Of course, my examples are definitely not very applicable to this article, but they can be regarded as some suggestions from the author, paving the way for better articles in the future. It is easy to be wrong when writing a sweet article about the protagonist's rebirth, and the character image is also difficult to describe, which can easily make the character form a conceited image. These are the current suggestions. Come on, author, I will be your first fan.

The overall content of the novel is okay, with a lot of foreshadowing, and it feels like it's still in a very early stage. I hope the author can keep up the good work, come on