LOL: After Leaving, I Became More and More Invincible

After reading 44 chapters, it can be seen that it is a typical cool article, but the author has his own ideas and is by no means a mindless cool article. It is well written and five stars encourage it. But the author's writing skills still need to be honed. Here are a few suggestions: 1. It is best not to repeat psychological activities and narration, otherwise it will appear watery and long-winded. Just describe the protagonist's character once in detail, and strengthen it through side descriptions when there is no change in mentality. 2. The dialogues need to be refined, hoping to be more lively and interesting. There are a lot of dialogues in the article, but not every character should be polite, which is not conducive to the differentiated creation of characters. 3. I hope there can be more modal descriptions between dialogues, and the characters and traits of the supporting characters also need more exploration. For example, there should be more descriptions of the dragon girl's identity and traits, and when the dragon's horns are sensitive [laughing], otherwise the homogeneity will become a stallion. All in all, the future is promising and I would like to encourage the author.

This kind of theme, where the male protagonist meets a new heroine every time he travels and has an unforgettable experience, and slowly builds up his favorability level, is very suitable to my taste and is very interesting. I think most of the heroines in Demacia will become one of the wings of the male protagonist, and the only good-looking one in Bilgewater who can take action is Miss Lucky, who was also taken down. Now the pressure is on Sivir, the only heroine in Shurima [laughing]

Before the timeline, the angle of approach is novel, the articles are wonderful, and the emotions are delicate. Five-star article

It's really beautiful, why didn't I find out after it was finished (painful

Personal opinion is good, good-looking

Looks good, keep it up [Like]

Love watching, good looking, good at watching

Come on, well written

It looks good, but who is on the cover?

Get to work quickly, it's Chinese New Year and you should update a lot. [Sinister smile]

It's really good to have the ability to change the tragic fate of some people.