Arknights: I Cultivate Immortality with Originium

To be honest, the writing style of this book is generally a bit immature in terms of plot twists, and the description of the relationships between the characters seems a bit impatient. I suggest that it be slowed down a little, and the relationships between the characters are discussed. In addition, the content is a bit repetitive after reading too much about cultivating immortals. Overall, it is about three stars, but I like the content very much. The feeling of peace and tranquility in the years is also very good, and the sky is full of stars. The plot from 45 to 52 is very confusing. The problem is still the same. The speed is very fast and gives people a blur of changing the world at a glance. The characters are not three-dimensional. As another comment said, the sense of immersion is not enough. The change of thoughts of the clone needs a process, but it is obvious. However, the relevant descriptions in the book are not enough. We can also write more about the customs and customs of Ursus, and expand the branches of some minor characters to shape the protagonist, so that the description of the protagonist is not so monotonous. The plot of Chapter 52 is even more confusing. Why did the protagonist decide to revise the book? After practicing, we still have to recognize each other when the clones die. I saw the author's previous comment that the emotional line will add a little twist. Such twists and turns are not deep enough. Since we have decided to do it, why not leave at that time and let the four girls grow up in pain? There can also be some interjection. Remember, wait until later to find a chance to recognize each other. Isn't that a burning fire? {The dog's head saves his life}. Since you have practiced, why don't you write out the indifference of cultivation, or why not write more love lines? It really seems helpless to be caught in the middle. Okay, the plot after chapter 52 is still very sweet, more of it, if you like to eat fine chaff.

It's well written, but it's a pity that it's not suitable for me. There's nothing bad about the previous story, but there was something that puzzled me when I saw the Ursus chapter. On the one hand, the inner guard clone of the protagonist loses control and starts a massacre, but the protagonist is indifferent. It is not until the inner guard clone fights all the way to Dayan and wants to kill "Xi" that he is willing to kill his own inner guard clone (in the early stage, he said that he wanted to serve the people of the world and did not want to be that cold and heartless immortal. Although it may be that his mentality has changed because he has experienced too much time? He does not want to care about worldly affairs?), I don't understand why the protagonist lets his clones massacre? I have no objection to killing those people in the institute. After all, they are the ones who reap the consequences, but letting the clones massacre civilians all the way to the Great Flame really makes me uncomfortable. (Is it because the clones have cut off the connection with the main body that they don't know about the massacre? But I think in the plot, the protagonist has obviously heard about it, but why doesn't he take action? Is it because he doesn't know the location? Or because he doesn't want to take action? In terms of finding someone, the protagonist should be powerful, so I can only conclude that the protagonist doesn't want to take action). In the end, the book is a good book, but it's a pity that it's not suitable for me, and I don't like to give negative reviews, so I'll give it a five-star review. After all, this book did bring me happiness, and that's enough.

I give five stars to show respect. The author recommends you to read it. The lonely era of cultivating immortals and witnessing the world of mortals. Also, Arknights is also a day of rebellion. You will know how imitating the cat in your description is!

Come on, author, take good care of you.

A very good Ark fanfic, I hope the author can stick to it.

Let's just say that this book is very good. I must support the author. I don't have any objections. Cheers to the author, Ollie

I want to see the reverse father complex

Update quickly, I beg you, let me do anything 😢😢😢

What I wrote before is okay, but it started from Yan Guo and it was a little bit poisonous (in my opinion) Come on, by the way, I said it in advance in 10 minutes, Happy New Year!

The writing is very good, I hope you can keep it up 👍 [Please update]