Immortality*********

The background of the story is quite good, but the main reason is that it is too messy. If nothing else, it is very messy. From the beginning, she is complaining about the female channel, complaining about the incredible nature of the female channel, and then suddenly she says that the person she complained about is his mother, and is he the person who said bald? Then the dungeon suddenly started, without any continuity, and then returned to reality. They were discussing which school to enter, and then the TV broadcast reported that a strong person had died. Everyone mourned until the next chapter, and the protagonist began to redeem rewards. It was so sudden, and then the protagonist finished redeeming the rewards and started practicing. At this time, he kept sending him messages. Only then did I know that he had joined Jingwu. Overall, it's a mess. The rest of the writing is pretty good. It would be nice if the author could revise what he wrote earlier. There were some problems again, as for Zhao Yaoyao, he appeared in Chapter 36. When I read what the author wrote, I thought I had missed how there seemed to be an emotional scene with the protagonist, so I searched the full text and found a total of 50 pictures, only in Chapter 36, at the end, Zhao Yaoyao appeared once. No, when I read your description, I was thinking about Bai Yueguang, who was the protagonist. She appeared in 50 pictures for half a day, her only appearance. The background settings of the author's stories are pretty good, but they are just too confusing. In the first world of the protagonist, the protagonist says that he is in the Heavenly Realm, but there is no Heavenly Realm in the realm, and the protagonist later turns out to be a golden elixir. At that time, I was still wondering which realm the Heavenly Realm is? Also, the protagonist is too brainless in the first world, so just listening can improve the proficiency level. The protagonist listens to six at a time, and the six skills are improved at the same time. This trick is a bit brainless. But the author is a newbie, I hope the author can continue to work hard

The subject matter is very good, but there are too many adjectives. If this continues, how long will it take to finish writing a copy? So much nonsense. There are a lot of rows. It's hard to watch. Not worth watching. Please avoid the pit immediately!

What a mess

It really looks too much like AI