Heterodox Magical Girl

After reading it, the selection of the subject matter is quite innovative, the current shaping of the characters is also good, and the content description is also well combined with the subject matter. I personally think this book is a relatively good product among the red persimmons. The narrative and content of the story are quite tense. The only two problems are that the current data is not very good (maybe because the title is not eye-catching enough? I don't think there are any other big problems), and I am worried that the author will not be able to persevere. The other is that the selection of this kind of subject is often accompanied by a large number of scenes that are easy to be criticized. Once the glass-hearted Shen He is targeted, it is easy to be locked in a small dark room (that kind of thing is a tonic). If it can be written to the later stage and Shen He is let go, I think this book should be around 9.3 However, another problem is that the current plot contains a section about using magical girls as a seedbed, in which a supporting character who seems to have a lot of roles is combined to breed an offspring (although this is the first thing that comes to my mind between magical girls and tentacle monsters). I think there is no problem with this section. It is a good plot foreshadowing and the growth of the protagonist with strong tension. However, the problem is that most people may not be able to accept this content in the environment of Red Persimmon. Most people still like to watch Kill Kill Kill or Post Post Post. This may also be a possibility of poor data. Although the connection is indeed good and the depth is also very connotative, I still have a small suggestion to try to avoid this area and reduce some plots related to supporting characters that may be unacceptable. Maybe the data will be better. Of course, this is just a small suggestion from readers. The author still tries to maintain the smoothness of writing inspiration and maintain the plot. Ensuring quality is fundamental. All in all, if I can accept a certain degree of dark and dark plot, the quality of this book is quite hard-core, and the plot tension is very good. I hope the author can continue writing, and I hope Shen He can be merciful (I couldn't think of anything sexy when I read the plot, so I wrote a book review. The above opinions are all my subjective opinions. If you are interested in reading the book review, I suggest you try it yourself)

Transformed into a novel, the brother becomes the second sister who died due to monsters. The resentment towards the monsters and the obsession to protect the third sister become the reason for the protagonist to live. 🤓👍 There are some minor flaws in the early stage, but overall it's pretty good. The battle descriptions are very visual, and the content descriptions are also very large-scale. 🤓👍 All in all, book lovers who like transformation novels, twisted flesh and blood, and exciting combat can give it a try🤓👍

Personally I like this work. --If it were used as a game script, it would be a high-scoring one. This work follows the original route, and it has the feeling of eleven orthodox magical girls transforming into a masterpiece. The description of interpersonal relationships is handled without the usual sense of awkwardness. I personally think that many low-scoring magical girl works ignore the construction of character relationships other than the protagonist. I think this article handles this quite well. Many of the narrative techniques of the story are quite Japanese, as if it were a beautiful girl game. --Style is destined to be rare. Just like the audience for games of the same type in the same industry, the audience for games with the same theme actually has a more otaku-like feel. The protagonist of an avenger who suffers from deep hatred, explodes his seeds to increase his combat power. The protagonist has short-lived attributes and is light on curiosity. These are all catered to the tastes of the Japanese acg audience. --Looking ahead Personally I think it is a work full of potential. If you can stick to the basics and ferment for enough time, you will definitely get good results. If it was purely for popularity, it would be easy to fall into a whirlpool of troubles.

The following is my opinion. If you don't like it, please don't criticize me. It only represents my personal opinion. If you have any differences, please do not criticize me in other comments. Thank you. Comprehensive; relatively good among the same themes Disadvantages/need to be corrected; there is a tendency of collapse of combat power, poor segmentation in the early stage, and no order in the chapter names, which will cause a loss of personnel in the early stage. However, there will be improvements later, and everything that should be included is already there. However, it is recommended to make one chapter of 2000 words and two chapters instead of one 4000-word chapter. This is better and helps to better understand the content of this chapter, because not all readers read intensively, and some skip reading. There is also the writing style, which gives me the feeling of reading a comic. I can only say that if it were a comic, the traffic would increase by at least 9 times, but this is a novel, so it becomes a deduction point. In terms of character creation, the protagonist's early tsundere is a small highlight, but the degree keeps changing, and the extent of the change is not in line with the plot's impact on the characters. On the bright side; the setting of the companion creature is very good. Although the tendency of combat power collapse mainly comes from him, it does not hinder it from being a good setting. Also, the picture is relatively strong, and the writing style is barely beautiful. If those dark things are removed, there is also the characterization. Although some parts are unreasonable, it is generally good, and it can outline a life with less pen and ink. This ability of Shengsheng is quite rare in free novels, and the author's control over the article is also low. The plot is less muddled, and the plot progresses at a good pace, just a little slow. Also, I took a look at the ellipses that many people are complaining about, but those ellipses are three to one character, and there is no water word count, which is rare. There is also this setting of using souls to replenish souls, which is great. It gives readers enough space to think about the future, and it does not make the ending of resurrecting the sister later become tacky. Additional personal suggestions (for reference only, if you have an idea in advance, it is better to use your own idea, after all, no one knows his own book better than the author); it is better to have a bed end at the end of the book. Happy end and normal end are not very suitable for the previous foreshadowing, and it is better to have a just right abrupt end. If you can't control it, don't write it, it is easy to write like a eunuch. In addition, the crimson people can die a few more times, preferably those with high influence. The third sister can also die. The setting of the diamond can be an important event in the later stage, so don't bring it up in the mid-term. The above is my evaluation. Overall, it's pretty good. In the future, as long as there are not many tenacious reports, it should be fine. However, I hope you should pay attention to it. The previous content is really easy to persuade some people to quit. I don't know what to do in this situation. I have never seen a few cases of successful counterattacks. Anyway, come on, even if you just change the order of the first and second parts, it will be much better than now. To be honest

See the part where the tentacles are tied together To be honest, the writing skills are really strong, and the light sad atmosphere and the rhythm of the battle are well grasped. If I hadn't read a certain hardcore magical girl article, I would have given it full stars.

Nnd, when I opened the rating, I started going around in circles. In order to write a book review, I deleted it from Tomato and re-downloaded it. All in all, 📕It's very good-looking. The main character pretends to be aloof and a bit arrogant, but he's also very gentle towards people. He's like an angel. Moreover, the setting of eating monsters to become stronger is also very exciting. After defeating a big boss, you can harvest a wave of new skills or magic circuits, which makes me look forward to the follow-up. The villain boss is too confusing, which makes the process more difficult, but it is very enjoyable to watch, and it feels like you have finally passed the level. Finally, Xiao Hei is so nice o(^▽^)o

A very unique magical girl story [laughs], a magical girl full of hatred, all kinds of blood, darkness and twists intertwined. The fighting scenes, emotions, and logic are all online, but I just don't know how long I can live 🤦

Fairless's "Heretic Magical Girl" breaks away from the sweetness and healing of traditional magical girl themes, and is eye-catching with its dark and passionate style. The story begins in a chaotic world where demons invade and goblins run rampant. The protagonist Liu awakens with overwhelming hatred for monsters instead of the common love and justice. This anti-routine setting instantly catches the readers' attention. The author's depiction of the battle scenes is outstanding. Liu wields the "cannibalizing gun" and activates the "Gluttony" magic to fight monsters. The picture is full of visuals and the aesthetics of violence are full, making readers feel as if they are in a fierce battlefield and full of tension. In terms of character creation, Liu's image is three-dimensional and vivid. She is cold and crazy when fighting, but privately she cares deeply about her sister. The bond of family ties injects warmth into this story full of darkness and killing. The daily interactions between classmates also show her side of an ordinary girl, and the strong contrast with the battle makes the character more layered. The novel cleverly combines fantasy adventure with urban life. While showing the magical girl's mission to save the world, it also deeply explores the inner struggle and growth of the protagonist, opening up a new path for the magical girl theme. It is worth reading for readers who love imagination and passionate adventure.

The writing is very good. The characters are very three-dimensional and the rhythm is pretty good. In addition, I actually think that considering the audience of this type of book, it would be better to develop the plot more in favor of Tangerine. Not to mention dual heroines or one-to-many, at least it can be labeled with an orange or something ( Why is woc still updating? This is so awesome. Such willpower.

Transformation processing: The reasons and methods of transformation can be said to be eye-catching at present. Combat part: The details of the senses are grasped. Why senses are needed in combat? You will know just by reading the article. Dealing with the enemy: It is a normal way of dealing with a person who has been hurt by hostility and has a close relative. Acquisition of power skills: There is no system, and the protagonist has just become a magical girl, so the acquisition method is not a one-shot process but an absolutely reasonable way. (Big skill) Stage BOSS: The design is relatively subtle and has a good look and feel. The author does indeed show us the alien world he saw. In the early stage, due to the shortcomings in the protagonist's power acquisition, it felt like a delicacy on the tip of the tongue. After making up for it later, the meal-making process should be greatly reduced 🤔 (I don't know if this is considered a spoiler)