The Dungeon Becomes a Sandbox? the Little People Are Going to Suffer from Old Sins

The scum of the longevity flower, the hero of the dandelion. Take the first chapter as an example. Disadvantages: : The plot rhythm is a little slow: too much text is spent on some detailed descriptions, such as Liu Jianqing's reaction after receiving the express delivery and the listing of the contents of the dungeon instructions, which slows down the story slightly, which may affect the reader's reading fluency and eagerness to know the subsequent plot to a certain extent. The logic of some settings is not clear enough: For example, in the plot where the mobile phone automatically updates and installs the application and upgrades to VIP membership by deducting the fee, the triggering mechanism and the logic behind it are not fully explained, which makes it appear rather abrupt and can easily confuse readers and undermine the credibility and coherence of the story. The characters are not full and three-dimensional enough: Although there are certain behavioral and psychological descriptions of the main characters Liu Jianqing and Chang Ning, overall, the character traits, background experiences, etc. Are not explored deeply enough, and the images are relatively thin, making it difficult for readers to establish a deep emotional connection with the characters, and it is not conducive to attracting readers to continue to pay attention to the development of the story in the long term. Advantages: The plot is creative and attractive: the story begins with Liu Jianqing receiving a mysterious express delivery. The setting of the dungeon sandbox model is novel and unique. It integrates various elements such as farming, exploration, and mysterious rules, such as automatic deductions, VIP permissions, biosynthesizers and other functions, which greatly stimulates readers' curiosity and desire to explore, allowing readers to be quickly brought into the story setting situation and want to know the subsequent development. Delicate description of character reactions: When describing Liu Jianqing's face to a series of strange events, his psychological changes and behavioral reactions are shown in detail, from the initial doubts and curiosity, to the shock and distress after learning about the fee deduction, to the different expectations due to the new authority and the decision to become the UP owner, vividly creating a character who is greedy for petty gains and full of exploratory spirit, making the character come to life on the page. The dungeon scene is vividly depicted: the four-story structure of the dungeon is described in detail, including the room layout on each floor, special elements such as the red button next to the spiral staircase, the mysterious small cell, the dark passage, and the "forest sea" emitting purple light, etc., Allowing readers to clearly construct the appearance of the dungeon in their minds, adding to the picture and fantasy color of the story. The tense atmosphere was successfully created: When recounting the experience of Chang Ning and others entering the dungeon, the terrifying ant monster's appearance, attack movements, and the tragic descriptions of the people were described, such as "The ant monster violently waved its huge upper jaw, causing a whistling wind, and viciously moved toward A soldier was pinched. In the blink of an eye, the soldier died. The ant monster easily tore his armor, blood spattered, internal organs were exposed, and the scene was horrific." It created an exciting, thrilling and terrifying atmosphere, which enhanced the readability and appeal of the story. All in all, this novel is remarkable. The author has a lot of imagination. In the sixteenth-level grassland world, there is a city on Kun's back; why Liu Qingzhi treated Qin Fusu like this; the Earth Titan, the Crooked Horrible Nose Beast, the Mimic, and the Heavy Armored Horse. The red sea on the second level contains cracked jaw sharks, horsetails, and armored crabs. Also, there are three love lines in this novel, Liu Jianqing and Bai Xiaoxiao. Noah and Nianhua still have Zhu Jiuyin. Qin Fusu and a girl from the Grant tribe, Xiahou Lanxi. Finally, the author said that there are one hundred worlds in the dungeon, which means that he wants to create one hundred worlds! ? Brag, you!