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It is probably the first time for the author to write a novel, and his writing style is immature. Generally speaking, there is no problem. However, in the third person, the protagonist's new character can use ' ' or brackets or something, as long as it is the same symbol as the one speaking. Sometimes I have the feeling that he said it, but otherwise there seems to be nothing wrong with it. Another point is that the author can think about the rationality of this logic again, because I don't write it, so I don't know how to describe it. The problem that the author has is that the writing he writes is generally very good, but, as far as the first few I read, I think it feels a bit like self-entertainment, and there is a kind of imposed feeling, that is, the protagonist has a sense of being outside. , But there is a feeling of being involved. Although it can be known from the author's description of the protagonist's voice that the protagonist does regard them as companions, and his future plans do include them. However, I don't actually feel much about this from the interaction. Also, I would like to remind the author that Chapter 1 The one-person perspective is indeed easier to write, but it is not easy to write emotionally. After switching from the author to the first-person perspective, the texts I see tend to be calmer. I mean there will be some exciting ones later, so it will be difficult for the protagonist to express the emotional ups and downs of the protagonist, even more It's difficult to arouse readers' emotions. In fact, there is nothing wrong with being calmer. The key is that this seems to have CP, and the hunter seems to be a kind of hot-blooded comic in nature. Looking at the protagonist's appearance, it seems to follow the main plot. The protagonist's state still needs to be paid attention to.

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Wow (✪ω✪) It's actually Hisoka, the CP of Full-time Hunter, come in and have a taste of it. The author can try more diverse descriptions. Don't describe anyone with "a hint of something" [face covering]. Most of Hisoka's descriptions are gentle and helpless. You can try other descriptions.

Not bad ~ the main character is very cute^~^

I think we still need to make some improvements, that is, the paragraphs should not be too long, and the changes in person pronouns need to be more natural, otherwise it will be uncomfortable to look at, but overall it is good😘

Come on, your writing is very good, please write more [please update]

This is my first time reading a Hunter fanfic, and it's so beautifully written. I couldn't help but review the original work again. The shortcoming is that there are too few, the author should update it quickly! Not enough to watch! ! ! I've done it twice.

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Come on, come on, work hard to finish writing

Can the author give you more? [Blow a kiss][Blow a kiss]

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It's so pretty ૮(˶ᵔᵕᵔ˶)ა Give me more [blowing kiss]

Why was it removed from the shelves?

Ok ok ok

It's nice to read. Thank you to the author for the writing. [Sending heartfelt wishes]