Honkai: Star Rail: With Fairy in Hand, I Can Do Whatever I Want

Sometimes the plot may be a bit slow. If you feel that the writing is not very reasonable, you can tell me directly and I will try to modify it ฅ/ᐠ .⸝⸝⸝. ྀིﾏฅ

Overall it's okay, but the light cones are a bit lacking. Most of the people who will come to watch it are Bengtie players. They all remember the plot. What we want to see is the author's complete work, that is, what kind of light cones can be written, and what kind of fun can be created [Thinking] [Thinking] [Thinking] Also, there are some pictures that are suitable for making light cones but do not make light cones. Another minor problem is that the protagonist was given a double order right at the beginning because he didn't want to hide, but he didn't tell anyone his identity.

The writing is okay, with less OOC, so it's not brainless, it has some logic. Personally, I prefer the setting of getting in a car + original protagonist, and the setting of opening a store is also quite novel. Next, let's talk about the shortcomings that I think The store management has no sense of presence. It feels like asking the characters to help sell movies in Zero Zone. Selling movies is Shui's daily commission, and this sales cone is Shuiwen. The protagonist has little sense of existence. It is understandable that he does not participate in the main plot or participates less, but isn't this a post? Where is my post? There is no main recommended game character. Some fan authors who like Xingbao or March will add roles to the characters. This article does not highlight the supporting characters. It feels like it is just following the main plot and has no focus.

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There are too many digressions, the reading experience is very poor, the plot is a bit confusing and has nothing to do with the protagonist.

It's a daily article but it doesn't match the title. It was said to be a sell-out, but in the end it didn't sell much. Instead, it's more about living the plot and daily life.

Changes are simple, the writing style is excellent, and the literary style is partial. There is zero description of women's clothing, women's bodies, and women's degeneration. The plot of the magic modification is a fun heroine, Star Trail + Iron Fall fanfic, the golden finger is huge, and the heroine is invincible. Unfortunately, it lacks a lot of character descriptions, and the descriptions of battle scenes also need to be improved. Many of them are skipped. Basically, those who have played the game plot can watch it, but those who have not played it will be very unfriendly. . .

The subject matter is quite novel, and I think it's an invincible article that just wants to have fun. However, the plot of resurrection is very brainless. Don't talk about the system. Under the Mi family's cosmology, resurrection is against the basic rules. Even if you write it, it is to change the timeline to save others like the end.

It looks good, but can the author make the light cone more relevant to the store?

I came here with the intention of opening a store, but in the end I didn't even have a few chapters about the store.