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The setting is very good and suits my xp. The main problem is the writing style. The content of the article is a bit too formatted. For example, when writing a barrage, there will definitely be words like "Immediately afterwards, a barrage appears: xxx..., Which resonates with other people." I feel that as an online article, and it is a fanfiction, there is no need to write it in such a serious way like writing a high school argumentative essay or answering a question. This kind of description will only make the reader feel very cumbersome. Things like barrage can be expressed as [...], And there is no need to add the subsequent feelings. The number of words for an article is completely enough. The text gave me the feeling of being stiff, with too many repeated modifiers. Take Chapter 18 as an example. In the first 8 paragraphs, there are 3 "firm" words. This is almost the same as the coping style composition I wrote [face covering]. The author can replace it with synonyms, or simply not write about the character's demeanor at this time. It is also a pleasure to read online articles if the reader imagines them. Overall, this article is pretty good, cheers to the author [blowing kiss] I almost forgot, don't describe your appearance too much

Transformation into a hundred, the writing is excellent, the tomato transformation is top-notch writing, the description of women's clothing and body is perfect, and the description of female abortion is zero. It's a very sweet plot. The first part is about protecting her, the second part is about the magic transformation, saving Fufu, and finally there's a sweet confession, and then it's gone. . . Can't you post a few more chapters? It's rare for a Genshin Impact to be written in such a good way. It's such a pity. . .

The author writes very well, and I like to read it very much, but a large paragraph is a bit too uncomfortable. Each period is separated by a paragraph. Otherwise, when listening to the novel, I suddenly see a paragraph that I really want to hear, but it turns out that paragraph is inside your big paragraph, which is very uncomfortable.

I hope it can be updated soon, and the fields should be separated a bit. One chapter with more than 5,000 words is too powerful. It is difficult for me to code a thousand words. But I think this book is beautiful, but there are some typos [crazy] [crazy]. Big, updated! ! !

Although it has some flaws, it is still very good overall and perfectly meets my xp. I can only say that the author will update it soon, I hope he will update one chapter in an hour [Blowing Kiss][Flowing Kiss][Flowing Kiss]

Very good, I really like watching [Blowing Kiss]

The character settings are novel and three-dimensional. I highly recommend giving it a try.

I like it very much, very good

Why? Fukalos was gone in the end [pouts]

In fact, it feels like there aren't many changes from the original plot?

It's okay, give me a five-star support

It's pretty good so far, I really like watching it.

The plot is delicate and the writing is beautiful

Each of his pictures has a lot of words, which are very beautiful.

Did you forget to point the stars?

Super invincible and beautiful

If you are narcissistic once, give me a five-star rating...

There is no need to comment. The good points are naturally the good points. The shortcomings are naturally the shortcomings. But I seem to have already commented

Beautiful, how can I live without you?

It looks great, but there is a certain price to change. Unlike others, I personally like this.

The characters are three-dimensional and full, and the setting is novel

Well enough? It's pretty good to watch, but not many people see it [eating melon]

Overall, it's okay. The author is excellent. Come on, author.

This book is very nice. I hope the author will continue writing this story [Like]

Yes, yes, it's a different feeling, I suggest you take a look. When will (the author's) women's clothing be released?