Prison Love******

Hello, fellow readers! I am Aunt Yi. This book is actually just to satisfy my small selfish desires. My writing may not be very good and some of the order may be messed up. I hope the babies will remind me more!

I read more than a dozen chapters and analyzed them, and found that only the fittest fall into the trap. In the early stage, Shou cannot tell the difference between big and small kings. He talks back and is not a stable character. He knows that Gong is not a good person [crazy]. Those like Lei should retreat quickly. Those who like to look at weak Shou should be cautious. I have something to say to the author. The plot is frizzy (it's not a good idea to have this kind of problem because the characters are too individual, and the supporting characters are often better written). You can slow it down appropriately. I'll read it again tomorrow morning after I finish writing. There's a lot of room for improvement [exploration]. (Just speculation, don't enter if you don't like it) Next is the plot guess. According to recent similar articles, it is probably pseudo-coercion. In the end, I am afraid that Shou will not be able to obey, and Shou will become very strong. I guess he is not stronger than Gong. Shou takes the initiative to accept the two of them, Gong repented, and will no longer be forced.

It's good-looking, and the emotional descriptions are delicate, but the entire novel is basically telling the story of the protagonist. I hope that more branch lines and main story lines can be added, as well as the grandeur of the background, and the description of ordinary people other than the protagonist will be more charming. I hope that in the later stage, yes, although the offense is very strong, I don't want Shou to be passive all the time. This kind of love must not last long, and the foreshadowing laid in the early part of the article shows that Shou is extremely talented. If possible, it is better to be than force he or be. I hope that both offense and defense are relatively equal. There is no one side, it is to do The deep sea, the other side is a drop of water. The contrast between the two sides is too serious. There can be more. The sadistic heart is of course the masochistic attack. The emotional line can be more delicate. The current rhythm is still a bit fast. The whole text is described around the attack of the two protagonists. It should mainly write about the main and passive perspectives, but other perspectives are hidden very deeply. You can use more descriptions to enhance it. To make the plot richer, some foreshadowing can also be added. Although the two of them are motivated by sex, if they were motivated by sex, they should not be so paranoid. They can describe some transitional stages from liking beauty to really liking this process. Well, if possible, I hope to increase Shou's combat power. After all, he is a cultivator in the Nascent Soul stage. How could an immortal person be turned into a person in the flower house by an ordinary mortal? After receiving the inheritance of the predecessor of Chaos, I did not understand one of the four tests he had gone through. In fact, I let it go. It is better to say that the hatred was transformed into another thing to make him persist. Doesn't it mean that the great power gave up all his cultivation? Why is Shou's cultivation still only at the Nascent Soul stage? Also, the description of Master Shou's journey through the tribulation in the Great Completion Stage is relatively light. I hope it can be written more. Does he only have a little power and the frozen thousands of miles after the tribulation is successful? After feeling this power, I broke through the bottleneck. Maybe it can be changed to normal. After successfully overcoming the tribulation, there will be the kind of luck that was left behind after the tribulation was successfully overcome. Wouldn't it be more reasonable to achieve that kind of breakthrough? I only have a small request, I hope I won't be too weak. The attack in this work is too strong, and the writing style is relatively bold, but it lacks a little bit of delicacy and a little bit of thinking logic. Author, you can bury a little more foreshadowing. I said that the positioning tracking function of the jade pendant can be a little foreshadowed, otherwise the plot will not be so amazing when you read it. (The above are just my own views and opinions, please delete if you don't like it)

I can't. I want to see Yiyi not liking them all the time (the finale will not change), but being forced to stay by his side (due to various family factors). Although I don't know how to write it, I get excited when I think about it. I have really wanted to read this kind of writing for a long time, hahahahaha, I feel like I am a bit of a sideshow [laugh][laugh][laugh] I want to ask if it is he or be

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The plot is relatively full, and the character traits are quite clear. The main event is to escape and then be caught. This is okay in capital letters. There is tension between the characters. In the early stage, the protagonist's character was carefree, and it is still the same now. In the later stage, the protagonist's character can be described in more detail and the transition will be more natural. What you wrote is actually in line with my heart. I hope you will continue to work hard~(￣▽￣~)~

Author I love you Good luck! ! !

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I don't have much education, I can only say that it's so beautiful.

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It's not bad, but I feel quite suffocated.

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Possible cultivating genre

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