The Cold, Aloof Immortal Venerable Is Actually in Love with Me?!

Very delicious 😋, cold face 0 awesome (I want to follow you [blowing kiss]

In fact, I think it's okay. The pace in the early stage is a bit fast. The characters and relationship between the two heroines are very interesting. If there is more ambiguity... Hehehehe. We've seen a lot of dual heroines who cultivate immortality, but it's rare to see a heroine who is invincible as soon as she comes out, which is refreshing. The world view is not that big. A little love fight between the two heroines looks okay, but I feel there is a trace of sadness between the lines. I won't be cruel in the later stage. It's a tonic, it must be he [crying][crying][crying][crying][crying]

Now that I see it, I feel that the character design of the whole book is very good and the content is quite rich. I also love Yun Mian's cold character design. I think he has a plot against Yan Li for a long time, and he will not recognize Yan Li at a glance even if he denies responsibility. However, the author's foreshadowing is not too rich. I think we can lay down the foreshadowing in this aspect, and I will feel it when we get to know each other later. It's too abrupt. I could focus on the emotional aspect, and also write about the previous fight. Although I remember that the author wrote a scene where Yan Li hummed a tune and revealed Yan Li's identity. I think the author did a good job in this aspect. He could also intersperse the previous scenes of getting along. Now we can only rely on our readers' imagination. The whole book is quite good, I hope the author will keep up the good work, come on!

The author's writing is very good, and Tomato has started to promote it. I believe that the author's achievements will become greater and greater. Then let me give you some advice, that is, the author's pace is too fast. In just a few chapters, I have finished the content of more than 20 chapters by others. In terms of emotional drama, I feel that there can be more inner descriptions and focus on how the relationship between the two is cultivated [Thinking]

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It looks good. I can see that the rhythm of the writing is getting better and better. The pace is a bit faster at the beginning. I like it to be more tumultuous, but it is still very interesting. I like the part where two people surrender to each other. It is well written.

I quite like the characterization and everything. It's easy to fill in the pits and it's really cool not to be able to counterattack!

It's a very comfortable article to read. The pace is not as procrastinating as other immortality articles with a bunch of messy trials, and the character design has not collapsed. In short, it is really good! It would be better if the psychological description of the characters was more delicate.

The story is one that I still want to read after reading it, and the characters are the characters that I want to be like. As I read it, I saw the happy ending in the story that I longed for. Give the author a big thumbs up👍👍👍👍👍👍Recommend passing reading

After the male protagonist died, the plot became relatively dull. Later, when the Demon Lord wanted to use his original power on the Qingyin, he was speechless and felt a bit like a holy mother. However, the author is much more lively, so it's not a big problem. I will still support the next one [shy]