Traveling Across the Heavens, Something Is Wrong with My System

There are some poisonous points, such as using modern people's thinking to think about people in the past, and having casual relatives in an era when men and women were not close to each other. Not to mention the past, even casual kissing of the opposite sex is now a crime of obscenity.

The first few chapters seem to be well written, keep it up. Was poisoned.

I would like to recommend this martial arts novel. This novel perfectly uses the three major illusions of life in the plot, giving a different twist to the story that was originally the same as the original novel. With the addition of the fairy sword vest, the invincibility, and the extremely interesting dog system, it is simply a top-notch novel that is worth your time to savor. It is already considered top-notch in terms of creativity, especially nowadays. At the moment when the martial arts genre in Tomato is declining, this novel is almost infinitely close to the pinnacle of new martial arts books. You can read it with confidence. Of course, there are also problems. The personalities of individual characters have changed somewhat, and they are not based on the character traits of the original work. According to the author, it is a deliberate change. I don't know if you are happy with it or not. I can only say that it depends on your personal taste. It's a pity that the first world was finished hastily, and what was originally an interesting beginning is now left unfinished.

The world of mortals is at its peak with a sword, and the wine is on its way to the sky. Although I was attracted by the title, I have to say that this book is very suitable for my taste. For a reader who is on the big waves, he is used to seeing big winds and waves, violent winds and rains, seeing all kinds of fights and killings, and bloodshed. Occasionally, I read some slow-burning novels. The light martial arts novels are very good. The author has done a good job. I will keep up the good work. [Laughing evilly][laughing evilly][laughing evilly]

The writing is quite good, and the character design of Huang Rong is also correct. Huang Rong in the original drama is indeed a jealous person. A little girl in love always likes to think too much. The key lies in how to develop later. Don't let the two of you become strangers in the future, it will be boring. When you update 2,000 words a day, subtle flaws will be magnified, and the rawness of your writing will be criticized. When you update 4,000 words every day, a little patience is born, and the progress of the plot is paid more attention to. When you update 6,000 words a day, the meager praise begins to sound, and the number of dead ends begins to decrease. When you update 10,000 words every day, readers' support will spontaneously form, and the voices of praise will become louder and louder. When you update 20,000 words every day, the Confucian debates are deafening, and the tolerant attitude is implemented both internally and externally. When you update 100,000 words every day, you will have a place in the bookworm's memories. Even in a long life, your name will leave a dazzling trace. Updates may not solve all problems, but more than 90% of problems come from insufficient updates.

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The subject matter is novel and not cliche. The protagonist has a plot, but when using the plot, it promotes the plot, rather than using the plot for the sake of the plot. This is very good. Generally, novels are too easy to portray the protagonist's combat power, but downplay the conflicts. What I like most is the plot in the book where the mother and daughter are reunited and then return home. It has a beginning and an end. , Although the protagonist usually doesn't talk a lot about things, but he can handle this kind of thing well from beginning to end, which immediately makes the protagonist's image fuller. In his interactions with the seven monsters, he even portrays the image of a bohemian drunken swordsman. I am afraid that the author has paved the way too much and it will be difficult to take it back. Overall, it is still a book that is very exciting.

Do you believe that I can fly with a sword in the future? It must be that some god or some spirit is not enough. He cannot fly for long, his face turns pale, he faints, and the cycle starts again...

Notice from the Handong Provincial Public Security Department on increasing update efforts and creating a tomato reading atmosphere With the in-depth development of the plot, the broad masses of the people's expectations for the follow-up content have become increasingly urgent. In order to effectively solve the key and difficult problems of the broad masses of people being able to read, read well, and study well, and to respond to the major problems of the broad masses of people in urging updates, the Handong Provincial Public Security Department, under the guidance of the Handong Provincial Political and Legal Committee, issued this notice to the author, requiring the author to update the book daily, eight chapters, and not to take vacations. In the update of the book, the spirit of reform and opening up of "not afraid of difficulties, the more you fight, the more courage you have" should be carried forward, and more exciting plots can be presented to the masses as soon as possible. At the same time, I also hope that the author of this book can continue to maintain a rigorous attitude during the creation process to ensure the quality of the work. We believe that with the ardent expectations of the people, this work will definitely become a classic and bring more joy to the people. Finally, I would like to thank the author of this book again for the wonderful works he has brought to the general public. I hope that the author of this book will update it as soon as possible to meet the expectations of the general public. Congratulations! Handong Provincial Public Security Department, Director of the Public Security Department Qi Tongwei

In fact, I saw that the protagonist came from modern times at the end, so he must know that "if you are born before you are raised, you can repay it with a broken finger, but if you are not born and raised with life, it will be hard to repay." When I saw the end, I felt like Bao Xiruo and that Yang? They asked Yang Kang to go with them. If it was Bao Xiruo, there would be no problem for Yang Kang to go with them. Oops, I don't know what to say about the latter part. Let me give you an example. Probably Zhang San has never seen his biological father since he was a child, but he was raised by Li Si and his mother. Suddenly one day his biological father asked him to leave Li Si and go with his mother to live as a family of three. However, this biological father did not raise him, and Li Si raised him since he was a child. For such a long time, he thought that his biological father was Li Si. I don't know what to say later, but as for Yang Kang, I think there's no problem at all if he doesn't go with that Yang Kang. After all, if you keep a dog for more than 10 years, it will always develop feelings for you.

After thinking about it, I'd give it four stars. Although the plot occasionally drags on, it still has laughs and highlights. There are too many internal dramas. Overall, it's a good watch. Sometimes the words are too dense, and it insists on being too loud when it shouldn't be. The latest chapters really make me helpless. Pay tribute to the classics, don't take away the essence and only take the dross. Qiong Yao's stuff does have a stomachache, but it would actually be good if it was done in moderation and didn't involve a stomachache plot. For example, at the end of Chapter 41, you can just go back to the inn and wait, or you can go out and do some mischief. After chasing him out, his attitude has been dissipated and he will naturally go back. If he doesn't go back, it doesn't matter what he does. (The above only represents my personal views)

The plot is good, and the writing is not bad with occasional golden sentences inserted into it. I heard that I received a malicious negative review, so I gave it a five-star rating [laughter]

There were too many romance scenes, so I skipped two chapters and it turned out that the heroine was no longer the heroine, but another heroine appeared. Because I didn't spend any money and read it for free, I gave it 4 stars. It's not because the book is good.

The writing is okay, but I really like the silly boy Guo Jing in the original work. Guo Jing, an unlucky boy, can fall through any opportunity, but if he loses Huang Rong, without Huang Rong, Guo Jing will not have the opportunity and capital to get up. Unless the protagonist gives him some guidance, this stupid boy will just be like that after practicing until he dies.

It's good to watch, but the reason for the low rating is probably because the author's plot is a bit cheesy. It's not popular anymore. Everyone likes to read cool novels. I can't figure out whether it has a single heroine or multiple heroines.

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I still only like the part about shooting the vulture, but when I moved to other worlds, it didn't feel as good as before.

Yes, the foreshadowing I wrote above gave me a sense of fun. The dialogue between the characters and the development of the plot seemed quite fun. The plot development at that time was quite exciting and interesting. It gave people the feeling of doing things casually. There are also many funny points later on, such as the part about swallowing date seeds. But the subsequent misunderstanding, although the writing is quite reasonable, is still quite unpleasant to watch. I hope there can be a good and comprehensive solution, the matter can be explained and resolved naturally, and it can be turned into certain benefits. It seems that it may be remedied and have a positive effect. It is not simply a misunderstanding to affect the mood, but it seems When you understand the other person's feelings, you can't wait to get to know the other person (for example, you happen to hear about him from Mu Nianci naturally), which seems to be a misunderstanding, but is actually an emotional accelerator, aggravating the other person's presence in your heart, affecting your mood, and caring about it, etc., Which may make you feel more relaxed and comfortable. Of course, this is less and more, it is refreshing to watch it at once, the problem is solved, it will not be as unpleasant and uncomfortable as being stuck in a depressed place₍˄·͈༝·͈˄*₎◞ ̑̑, heheớ ₃ờ

The idea is good and deserves 4 stars, but maybe I personally don't like to watch too many entanglements with the original women. If I have the time, I can go to Mongolia and kill ten people in one day, hundreds in ten days, and thousands of people in one hundred days. Will the rewards be maxed out [eating melon]

The author still has some writing skills and seems to be an experienced author. Advantages: The writing is fluent, most of it is easy to read, the settings and character descriptions are good, and it has surpassed the level of a mindless novel. There is also a certain reasonable construction of the works of Chuan Shu. It is not a direct adaptation of the settings. It can be viewed on Tomato. The emotional scenes are above the average level of male videos, maybe the author of female videos came over? Disadvantages: There are some flaws in the plot arrangement in the first few chapters. The character of the protagonist is uncertain. In the game world, it is okay to act erratically, but when faced with the characters in the book, he is worried about gains and losses from time to time. The escalation of character conflicts is quite slow and has a somewhat NPC feel. The settings also need to be considered. Currently, in the two and a half worlds, Tongzi's props have already increased the protagonist's ability to a point where it's a bit overwhelming.

Although this book has been discontinued. But the writing of Westward Journey is so awesome that it can be used directly as a script. Is it because the writing of Westward Journey is too high and it will be difficult to follow it up later?

This author has always written well When you update, subtle flaws will be magnified, and the greenness of the writing will be criticized. When you update twice, a little patience is born, and the progress of the plot is paid more attention to. When you are on the third watch, the little praise starts to sound, and the number of dead harvests starts to decrease. When you update the fifth update, readers' support will spontaneously form, and the voices of praise will become louder and louder. When you are at the tenth watch, the Confucian debates are deafening, and the tolerant attitude is implemented both internally and externally. When you are twenty, you will have a place in the bookworm's memories. Even in your long life, your name will leave a dazzling trace. Updates may not solve all problems, but more than 90% of problems come from insufficient updates.

The writing is pretty good, at least I have read 50 chapters and there is nothing toxic or outrageous about the plot. However, I have a suggestion. Even if you turn off the comments when reading a book, there will be a bunch of them with no rhythm, and you will not be able to understand the random comments. Some of the comments will be annoying.

Very interesting, reminds me of Master of Dreams of All Realms!

It was written by a veteran. The writing style is not like a newcomer at all. It's a pity that I brushed it when I only had so much time. It's really tiring to wait for the update. The only problem is that the protagonist never spends the night killing the villain. Will there be no villains to write about later? I hope I can keep the pace and not write too much.

I've been looking for a Condor Shooting fanfic to read, and I've read a few, but they're all trying to be different. Although this one is not exactly the same as the fanfic I have in mind, the writing is very good, and the plot is quite reasonable. I have the desire to read it.

It's very good-looking, Mu Nianci is very good, but it makes people feel uncomfortable to torture Huang Rong like this. I don't think you want to let Huang Rong go at this pace. She is not the kind of woman who can share a husband.

It looks good. The highlight is being a fairy in the world of martial arts, and the fighting power has not collapsed so far, and the relationship between men and women has no sense of rigidity. It is not the kind of invincibility (this allows the protagonist to be in the rivers and lakes instead of floating on the rivers and lakes). The only shortcoming is probably that the scene with the human traffickers and the Beggar Gang was a little immature at the beginning, which may be intentional. At that time, the protagonist was obviously not integrated into the world, and was led by the system tasks. Later, the protagonist gradually became more and more quaint. I really like it, I hope there are similar recommendations [Sending my heart]

The plot is very interesting, mainly because Huang Rong really can't refuse [laughs awkwardly]

Compared with ordinary time-travel novels, the previous one is a bit more digging and filling. However, when describing the Supreme Treasure in Journey to the West, it also incorporated the truth, goodness and beauty of Tripitaka and Kung Fu Star in the Conquering Demons chapter. I personally feel that writing this article is quite successful.