Lunar Calendar: Broken Wing Feather

Judging from the external score, the writing is passable, organized and logical, not nerve-wracking, and there is no blind ambush (I don't know if it's because the knife is more ruthless or because the supporting roles are clear and impressive). Progress will be made within a certain period of time, followed by the next bigger mystery, and the increasingly anticipated story development is also the motivation to continue reading (coming from someone who has finished the plot of the ruined library and Yun Naoye and the Bus) (feeling), there is no feeling of spoiling the world view, the writing focus is clear, and there are not many redundant pens (I don't know if the 6 Association small gang incident at the beginning was glossed over, if not it should be foreshadowing, if not, it also has a feeling of urban daily life.) The feeling of multi-faceted foreshadowing is the normal state of the city. The city is full of mysteries, and all kinds of small or big events are brewing in the dark. It is very exciting, isn't it? As for the enjoyment of the article, I feel that if you don't know YJ well, you will have less of a feeling: How can this person survive so well? Is this right? You have to have someone by your side, right? Isn't that what it feels like when you feel refreshed? I also read the book about falling in love with Angela, mainly to understand regret and pain 😭 (the love part is also a highlight! Whisper bb) Compared to that book, this one has a heavier sense of mystery and ghosts, the feeling of rising combat power is gentle and full of mystery, and the fighting part is very good. That's all I thought of for the moment, and I followed up on the part where the three of them returned to the collapsed branch to recover the abnormality. Look! In addition: The boundary between the Lobe Company game and the novel is very well adjusted. It is not like a complete game. Some of my own ideas have been added. Although it is a branch, the lightning protection headquarters is taken from the EGO of A, weakening the gamification details. This is a feeling that many YJ novels do not have, but the performance of the protagonist as an ordinary person makes him not prominent in the plot. I hope the author will consider this. In the subsequent library chapters, I personally hope not to suddenly add a large number of mod character packs. This is based on my experience in another YJ article. The large number of supporting characters, most of them without pictures, and the need for them to promote the plot make the plot extremely messy and complicated, making it difficult to remember and understand. In addition, I wonder what kind of sparks other associations besides the 6 Associations will have with the protagonist? (Ryu Jin, handsome!) And five fingers. In the library part, I don't know whether to focus on the library or the city? Or is it the protagonist? Of course, it's a bit early to say this, just treat it as fans' suggestions, and I hope it's based on your own ideas. The bus part is very confusing, so I won't talk about it, but are you going to talk about the red-haired employee? I hope there is a role for her (please🙏)

It is a surprising monthly novel that closely matches the style of the original work. This is an oversight in many other fan novels. This novel contains the helpless and commonplace urban daily life, the description of abnormal images that shock understanding, and the assembly-line iteration of the names of passers-by ( At least for now, you can rest assured of the author's imagination. In short, this is an amazing fan fiction, please bear witness! (Elden's ringside speech) This novel is excellent as a fan novel for games under Project Moon 1. The author's writing ability and selection of materials successfully depict the so-called "urban style". Sudden death, indifferent yet entangled human nature, and the storyline are sometimes hopeful and sometimes make readers think about the question "what is the real hope in the city?" 2. The author is currently writing a story in the Lobotomy Company period, and he has a good grasp of the plot. From the perspective of an employee who has just joined the Lobe branch, it depicts chaotic urban daily life and extremely impactful scenes of abnormal management and suppression; for the original Lobo novel, which lacks the perspective of grassroots employees, this novel is a perfect complement to the perspective. 3. The plot not only depicts the depressive atmosphere of the city, but also describes interpersonal relationships and social processes to an appropriate degree, allowing readers to understand why they feel depressed without having to contact the original work to gain rationality. As a reader, I very much hope that these insights can help those children who think that Yueji is not good enough to write fan fiction but want to read something to strengthen their determination to give this novel a try. And I tried to make some suggestions to the author, I hope it will be helpful. 1. The awakening of divine equipment and distortion seem to be very simple settings, but in fact it is very difficult to write in fan fiction, because the novel is not like the Abnormal Files and only requires a moment of imagination to be completed. The "strong emotions and sincere wishes" required to achieve divine power and distortion can easily conflict with certain passages in the previous plot. Once the process is not fully explained, it is easy to create a sense of gap. Even the plot about Philip and Shao in the ruined library is a PPT-style passage. It only shows some things before and after the awakening without explaining the specific previous experiences of the characters in detail, so the foreshadowing that can be easily recycled is very important. 2. The indifferent and repressive city treats everyone equally and gives them pain. From mice to leaders, everyone is trapped in inner loneliness. Therefore, family love is both a reasonable key to breaking the lock and a difficult leash. This warm color is destined to be incompatible with the cold color as the background. Therefore, the "transformation" of the plot and characters requires unimaginable foreshadowing. Perhaps expanding the scope of imagination and introducing more concepts and forces will help. Finally, I wish the author good luck with his writing (⌒▽⌒)

It's a very good Tsukiki fanfic. Different from the time-travel protagonists in other books and all kinds of outrageous plug-ins, the protagonist of this book is a native urbanite, an ordinary person suffering from "urban disease". The plot is plain but not boring, and instead makes people look forward to the climax. The life of an urbanite who doesn't cheat. This is the most worthwhile thing to read in this book. In this era when cool writing is rampant, each one is as high as the sky. Works like this are even more surprising. The emotions in this book are described more delicately, and the author is very good at creating a certain atmosphere. Although the writing style is not particularly outstanding, it is very comfortable to read. Summary: It's a monthly plan fanfic that's worth reading. If I were to recommend a monthly plan fanfic, this one would be my first choice. Nowadays, most of the fanfics are essentially cool articles based on the settings, and the plots can be said to be the same. This book can better reflect the essence of "city" and can bring you a different experience.

I personally think this book is very good. As the first work of a new author, it is already very good or very rare. It has distinctive characters and rich plots (referring to original abnormalities and daily life). I have not read other books about lobe, but few other lobe books are as close to the lives and thinking of ordinary urban people as this book. Most of them are about key plot characters such as supervisor, secretary, and Angela. It unfolds as a main theme of salvation, but do these really make the protagonist grow? I can only say that it has grown but not much. The biggest charm of this book is that it is close to the daily life of ordinary company employees, and they grow step by step. As the protagonist grows up, he also gets to know many people, including ordinary company officials, as well as his comrades and ministers. It is the characters in these books who will become the protagonists in the future. They provide the foundation and support for the protagonist's growth. At the same time, the protagonist's relatives also provide indispensable support for his future growth. In my opinion, Lobotomy's greatest charm is its plot, its vivid characters, and those very interesting abnormalities. But in other books, I only saw boring plots. Maybe there was a little improvement in the plot, but not much. The characters are okay, but the charm of the abnormality, which is what attracts me the most, has never been brought out. What attracts me most about the Abnormalities in the game is the uncertainty of the Abnormalities, and their sense of unknown, mystery, power, weirdness, terror and oppression. But I haven't felt the above points in other books. On the contrary, the plot and atmosphere are very relaxed, casual and harmonious. There is no oppressive atmosphere in Lobe at all. The protagonists in other books travel to the city through the general process: becoming a supervisor or a close person, joining Lobe and becoming an employee (referring to the extremely unnatural ability to gain attributes) and follow the process to get rid of Abnormalities. After that, there are various ways to brush accessories, brush attributes, and brush equipment. Occasionally, I flirted with Angela, and then I got a group of fans or fans who were inexplicably confused. These are lobes of the brain! A place where someone could die at any time! I was also speechless. As the protagonist, he has prophetic attributes, so he can basically farm Abnormalities without any pressure. There are no casualties at all. If the protagonist's prophet attribute is removed, the protagonist will basically be useless.

It's a perfect book, unlike other system-invincible books that seem bland and boring. On the contrary, the daily life in the city is written very clearly. And the strength of the self-created abnormality is online. Nor is it purely invincible. I give you five stars, keep up the good work. [Like][Like]

Humor rating mechanism, more than 130 comments were all full stars, and the result was only a 7.2 Rating 666, humorous tomato The only shortcoming now is that there are too few and not enough to read, but the author's updates are really stable [Like] [Like]

It's good to watch, and the plot is not sluggish or sloppy, but I hope the essence is still free of CP. I hope the male protagonist can be unique. It feels weird to be with seniors. The big event will come soon, let the male protagonist become stronger, and the sister can be ignored. The combination with the rich lady is quite cute, with a faint fragrance of lilies [laughing] Nothing unexpected happens. As long as you keep updating, I will always follow your [Thinking]. The author is great. It is a rare good book about the Moon Plan. It does not break the combat power. I have read many books about the Moon Plan written by Tomato. They are either magically modified or the combat power is too outrageous. It is difficult to break down [face covering]

What a masterpiece! ! ! Even the pen and ink you wave at your fingertips are enough to eclipse the hard work created by vulgar people like us! Lively words, troubled life, cold body, suffering soul, magical stories, cruel reality... It analyzes the depressing and lonely atmosphere in the city in an ingenious way, but in an instant it vividly embodies the theme of Yueji - "Hope contained in despair". This masterpiece will forever be engraved in the history of the Ring, allowing countless belated comers to admire this pioneer who blazed the trail! And you - you can be called the guide of the gods. We sincerely invite you to become the leader of the ring and lead our group of believers who cannot escape from the worldly desires to go to the other side of the real art and create a world of elegance and art. (PS: Self-Designed Abnormality is so hot!!! Write it hard! I can't get enough!!! Two chapters a day is not enough!)

Lobe Company is a very interesting stand-alone work development game. The game is very warm, and it is not cold even in winter. There is nothing that makes people feel red. Abnormalities are also very friendly. The game is biased toward positivity, warmth and harmony. Players only need to extract energy to complete their daily work. NPCs will also help your company lay off employees every now and then. There are no knives. I highly recommend this game. , This game is really suitable for children who are timid and easy to break defenses, and there are blind boxes to give you little surprises every day, and there are doctors to help the employees, so Lobotomy Company is really fun. I really recommend it. If you encounter "Supervisor, Supervisor, Supervisor, Supervisor...", You must choose it, and "I will cure all diseases in the world, and you will be reborn." They are all very good abnormalities, so hurry up and play 🤓

The setting is very consistent with the setting of Lobotomy Corporation. I didn't know that Lobotomy Corporation had a branch before reading the comics (it's a bit ridiculous now that I think about it, after all, as a wing and a large energy company, how could it not have a branch) The character settings and abnormality settings are handled very well. Some paragraphs also reminded me of all the interesting things that happened when playing Lobotomy. And I think the interaction between the protagonist and the abnormality is the highlight of the book. When I was playing Lobotomy, I was also observing the comment column next to the employees at work. The author's imagination and logical thinking are very good to write such good interactions.

It's really good-looking. It's much better than the monthly plot that just follows the main plot. At least it takes a different path and still maintains some monthly plot style. It's especially good when the protagonist joins Lobe as a civil servant and owes debts at the beginning. It also has some foreshadowing. The writing is very good.

After reading a little bit, I immediately locked it. It perfectly embodies the feeling of an urban world view, which is more than a little better than other invincible novels that use the lobe system. We Yueji people are here to watch the plot, not to compare the combat power with no sense of fun.

It's a good read, and the descriptions of the opposite sex in the book are also very good. There is no embarrassing feeling at all.

It's a good book. It writes about life in the city, but not much. It's not like in the main part, where you have been in the company for 50 days, and there is a love line. But the author doesn't know whether to write a female protagonist, and she may feel that she is good at knife. The two of them get along very warmly. Long live office romance! Anyway, I quite like this line, but I probably can't keep it. It's a rare good lobe. I prefer this kind of plot where the branch works every day compared to the main part. So far, almost all of them are the author's original abnormalities. I haven't seen the main part. I think it's pretty good. The author should update it quickly. The more updates, there will be more long reviews like mine.

The quality is sometimes lacking in terms of length, but fortunately the plot makes up for this shortcoming. The activities of the protagonist are all traceable, and the logic of the supporting characters is self-consistent without any inconsistency. The method of digging and filling holes is not bad, but the holes are dug and then filled in within a few chapters, but there are also advantages. The quality of this work is of the highest quality!

Very well written. The emotional line is natural, the plot is too smooth, the IQ of the supporting characters is online, the characters before and after are consistent, the climax is sufficient, and the description is detailed and appropriate. The level of this book is medium, but it fully meets the needs of a best-selling book. I think your book can be used as a reference example for more new authors to write books.

The writing is wonderful and very relevant to the city. I hope you don't use a knife, otherwise it will seem too cliche. Come on, a good story does not require too many knives, but more of a real sense of integration. When I read this, I felt like I was really there again. I played a lobe game (for personal reasons, please don't beg Dao Wenmi and my sister, the author is definitely one of the best authors [Like][Like][Like][Like][Like][Like][Like][Like][Like][Like][Like][Like][Like][Like]

A great Yueji novel, with a kind of blandness that belongs to ordinary people, and the characters are well created, but compared to the Yueji itself, it is still too gentle and peaceful. A great book with potential, please update quickly.

The author updates quickly, and I think the writing is good. After all, it is good to grow a little bit from the lobe of the brain. Everyone has a different life. If it starts with the headquarters in the same way, the rest will be boring. Looking for the heroine of the drama [sending my heart]

The writing is really good, but it's so good that I don't get used to it. You may not say how well they portray many characters, but at the moment they die, you will understand what the fragility of life is. It is precisely because it is not good, and it is precisely because too many people die too easily, that it makes me feel a kind of despair and insignificance, but... Just like there is a minister in the article... The existence of the protagonist makes me feel again that the hymn of mankind is the hymn of courage. (Personally, I haven't actually played Lobe Company, but I bought it, and I also played 084 without watching the plot. But this novel really made me feel that it was well written, but I don't know how it looks in the eyes of the big guys)

It is my favorite monthly novel that I have read so far. I have always wanted to find a novel that goes beyond the main plot of monthly accounting and unfolds from the perspective of an ordinary urbanite. This is it. The setting is very suitable, but the content is too little and has not been expanded yet. I hope the author will work hard!

This is at least the most comfortable book I've ever read. I've never played the game, so I don't understand many of the settings. But that's probably because I've added a lot of custom settings. The look and feel is basically much better than what I've seen before.

It's good to watch, and I'm looking forward to the plot after the protagonist's branch. The Moon Chronicles fanfic has made some innovations and created some alien bodies that are not in the original work. The protagonist being an employee of the Lobe Company branch is a good entry point. Later, the protagonist may be transferred to the main company. It seems possible now, but it is unlikely that the protagonist wants to go voluntarily. The protagonist is not short of money at the moment, so there is no need. (The protagonist is an indigenous person) Overall, the writing is smooth and there is no lag, and so far there are no poisonous points or setting errors. I am Shennong, and this is the fairy grass. Yueji is a masterpiece, please witness it! Also, I wish the author to break through the lock restrictions and not be discovered by the leader [crying] (The following may contain spoilers, so read with caution) I boldly predict that the following story should be about the protagonist's work and life developing at the same time. What about the identity of the younger sister and the last words of the mother? (Death Rattle) As a foreshadowing, I will probably take a trip to the suburbs. (But I should go get the things first, then solve my sister's problem, and then maybe run away?)

Okay, okay, I found another nice lobe fanfic, great, come on, author

A very good monthly book made me feel excited. It is the kind that even people who don't know the background at all or have played the game can read it very enthusiastically. The protagonist is an ordinary urbanite who has no time travel and no system. He only has some mysteries in himself. He joins the branch of Lobotomy Corporation with confusion and confusion among colleagues. Warmth and family companionship make him want to protect everything, but just like the background of this book and Lobe Company, life is always full of unknowns and blood. He is an ordinary person, but he has a bright heart. The progression of emotions is very warm, like a trickle, but because of this, the pain and suffering are so dazzling. , Tragic, confused and tragic, unable to find hope, but occasionally warmed by the warm days, it seems to be talking about the city, and it seems to be talking about us. I haven't read such a good monthly book for a long, long time. Even if I take this protagonist out alone and put it in any type of texture, I think he is a person who can shine, but he is not that vain. Piaomiao is the kind of protagonist who is like the author's tool. He is a real person with flesh and blood. He has shortcomings, cowardice, and confusion, but he is also full of determination and determination. Moreover, the author writes it in very detail. Even people who have never played or do not understand the background can read it as a fantasy novel. It is highly recommended.

He deserves a 9.5 Rating First of all, the protagonist has no system, and there is no time traveler. The setting of the reborn person is just an ordinary person, which is quite eye-catching, because in the city, well, his growth as an ordinary person may indeed require some lobe skills and control of the plot, because it is almost impossible for ordinary people to grow up. You have to give a reasonable reason. The reason I gave you at the beginning seemed pretty good, that is, to work as a clerk at the Lobe Company. And based on his foreshadowing, it is considered medium. There are too many foreshadowings to count, which makes it difficult to write. If there are few foreshadowings, there won't be much of a twist, so the foreshadowings are just right. They can give the plot a twist without being too difficult to write. The current progress shows that the chapter of Lobotomy Company ending the ruined library has just begun. Overall, it deserves a five-star rating. The main reason is that I don't know how to use words to describe how good a book is. After all, I am not a reviewer. 9.5 Points are worthy of it. I feel that the writing style of this book should be at least 9.5, And the guarantee of 9.5 Should also be 9.0.

Great fanfic. Unlike most other monthly novels, which have an unparalleled beginning of punching the mother and kicking the red sister, this book focuses on describing the protagonist's growth from a civilian to a high-level finisher. The plot details and jokes mixed in also have the characteristics of the monthly novel (name and praise the ubiquitous black Mr. Mute in the book). The emotional description is also relatively delicate, and the combat description is slightly insufficient, but the flaws are not concealed. The only shortcoming may be that the story is too short, after all, it ended in a hurry soon after becoming a color.

It's very satisfying, especially the "Visitors from Extraterrestrial" section, where the oppressive feeling of Class A Abnormalities is very real! So cool😃 but not enough

This is the best Lobotomy fanfic I've ever read.

A masterpiece. After reading so many moon doujins, none of them can compare to this book. The rhythm of this book is very good, and it can be seen that the author has been deeply involved in urban settings. He is very familiar with many settings and also knows about the side stories - the author did not follow the main plot, but added many original chapters. The abnormality and work during the branch and the period of the finale are full of strong urban flavor. It is very suitable for those who like the original work - and the description of the characters in this book is very realistic. Very urban. The character of the protagonist is a rare good person in the city. He has a strong heart and a high talent. There is no such thing as the gods and monsters who are invincible and insult the original work from the beginning. The protagonist's growth in strength and character is very comfortable. The description and portrayal of other characters are very good - in addition, the author's writing style is very comfortable. There are no urine points in the whole story (it can be seen that the author has introduced many classic books and is widely read and literate) - in short, it can no longer be described as A+. I would like to call it the longest river of monthly fans. Highest mountain