Even the Daughter of Heaven Can End Up Chasing Her Husband to His Funeral

The writing style is a bit jerky, and the original plot and the heroine's emotional changes are too fast and sudden. For this kind of cremation novel, remember that the emotional plot must be deep, so that the cremation can burn vigorously, otherwise it will make people feel inexplicable. For example, when the heroine chooses to practice the Heartless Art in the first few chapters, you can write that after reading this book, she will have a certain degree of hesitation and a certain psychological struggle. Then after a period of time, she will feel that her progress is too slow every time she practices. At this time, the tragic death of her tribe members stimulates the heroine. He worked hard to cultivate, but in the end, he gradually blinded his original intention in hatred, abandoned his relationship with the male protagonist, and then began to practice the book. The female protagonist suddenly found the book and started practicing. It will only make people feel inexplicable that he has no feelings for the male protagonist. There has to be a process of getting lost. There is also an emotional transformation in this process so that there is fuel for cremation.

Oops, it scares me to death. The emotional scene in Chapter 2 is too poisonous. The male protagonist forced his wits. Xuan wrote to the male protagonist. Can't you tell Yao about it? Shouldn't we talk to Yao about the relics of the late emperor? There is also Yao, a transformed god. Standing in the back, you can't even hear what the two people are saying. Is this really a dynasty of cultivating immortals? In Chapter 2, all the encounters that happened to the male protagonist could have been avoided if they had been explained clearly, but if they were not mentioned, the conflict between the male and female protagonists was too deliberate.

The pace is fast, but without the writing, there is no emotion in the whole reading, it is all anecdote, "He traveled through time, he was abandoned by his lover, he was killed by his lover, his lover regretted it, he traveled through time, and his lover chased him back." There is also a strong sense of separation, which feels very inexplicable. When he went out to inquire about the situation, he was beaten to death, and then the heroine inexplicably practiced the ruthless way, and the following became more and more inexplicable. The summary is Strengths: Fast pace, not wordy Weaknesses: A running account, no emotion, a sense of fragmentation, a strong sense of arrangement, and the whole book is inexplicable Poisonous points: 1. Rather than saying that the female protagonist abandoned the male protagonist, it is better to say that it was forcibly arranged for the female protagonist to abandon the male protagonist. 2 So the characters are just like AI, they have no meaning or feelings, they can be abandoned at the drop of a hat. 3. All the female characters are like Emperor Yan or Emperor Yan. From the beginning, I love you very much, to the middle, I don't care whether I have you or not, to the later, how can I live without you?

It's so shameful everyone, I am a Shennong who has tasted everything in the world and I have never tasted such delicious food. I suggest that everyone come and eat. I will give you a six-point encouragement and give it three times.

Improve your writing skills The plot of the story is passable and I like it, but the writing is too watery, like a running account, and the ending is too hasty. From the first story to the end, the most critical moment of regret, the writing is still like a running account... It's disappointing. This is the first time I've written a review after reading a novel. I'm not going to offend you, but I think the plot is very satisfying to me, but the writing is too dry, like a primary school student's diary. I just need to improve the writing style and some more detailed descriptions of the plot. It's quite a pity.

The pace is quite fast and not bad. If you like sadomasochism, you can watch it.

1. First of all, the pace is a bit fast, and there is no obvious rhythm difference between the plots, and there is not much foreshadowing. The plot jumps quickly, and it feels like a running account. For example, when we first went down the mountain, the sect was destroyed without any omen. I think it would be better if we added a little suspense to foreshadow the situation. There was no clear contrast between the two in the cave, and everything connected too quickly and without focus. There was not much foreshadowing to predict the departure of the junior sister. 2. There is no detail where it should be detailed. A lot of it is just language, but the expression, movement, psychology, and details are all not reflected properly. The main reason is that there is no magnification of details, and many angles of view are zoomed out. 3. The emotional transition is not very good, but the main reason is that the foreshadowing and rhythm are not done well. 4. Finally, give me some encouragement. Come on.

It was written into my heart. I have read many regret-type books. But I always feel almost like this. I feel that this is very well written, and it really touches my heart. No matter how others see it, in my heart, you have written very well.

Not bad, not bad. He is a malleable talent [blowing kiss]. This book is just what I want. It seems simple but is not difficult at all. I can't get enough of the short to medium, fast-paced plot. But how will the author deal with so many destined heroines [fear][fear]

Okay, okay, the writing is okay, but a bit sensational. Some flaws, no big deal. I hope there will be a good ending. The male protagonist feels a little wronged. I have written this story so many times that I hope it can be improved. I personally prefer a happy ending. [Sending Hearts]