Tomorrow*******

[Face covering] Ling Paopao has been sleeping every time he appears since he appeared. When it's time to wake up, he makes the protagonist drink, and then the bubbles gather to take the protagonist away from Nian Xi Ling. The heroine you think is: Nian Xiling, the real heroine is: Bubbles. Mistress: Ajie.

Here is what I would say about you as a Ring Apprentice Overall: B+ I can understand your love for the characters. Generally speaking, each character's personality is vivid. Even the research party can think that this is the character in Ark who can live freely in a normal urban campus. However, the protagonist does not give people the feeling of a protagonist. On the contrary, because you describe too many passers-by, A, B, B, B, and D, the status of the protagonist and the supporting role are almost equal. This equality of status does not mean that the protagonist is the protagonist in the play. The proportion is too small, but the character of the protagonist is too unclear, and there are too many meaningless side plots. The scolding war caused by the protagonist in the class is understandable to enhance the appearance of the protagonist, but it will only make people upset. The novel is centered on the protagonist. The protagonist solves the problem and creates the highlight of the protagonist, rather than letting the protagonist become a tool to vent his desires when other characters come to feel. The protagonist serves as his own That part, as an individual, is too little... Even the disgusting cliché plot about the woman saved by W who is only mentioned for a few lines is more impressive than many plots when the protagonist is present, but it is a taboo for a supporting character to be more impressive than the protagonist. I don't think you have thought about what you want to write before you decide to rush into the dark room to write. You just use a bunch of characters randomly. The built twin towers will collapse when they touch the reader's point of view, but even after entering the state, it is still a runaway train that is too fast-paced, reducing the appeal of readers who are interested in the vivid characters of Ark, and it is difficult for readers who come to satisfy their small heads to persist until the new plot. In works of the same type, the latest ten chapters are even the first ten chapters of other novels of the same type... But overall, there are still merits. The writing style is acceptable, so it will not fall to a C rating. It is particularly emotionally delicate, so it is B+. It is a pity that there are too many meaningless plots... It is very tiring to read, and some plots will only make people irritated. In addition, large sections of the plot are used to describe the absence of the protagonist, and the protagonist does not even appear once in a whole chapter... Succubus?

Great book! I was almost fooled by the book review and cover. [Cover face]

So exciting! But don't be silenced! [Laughing out loud]

Very well written, keep up the good work.

Great, don't be banned [Cool][Like][Like][Like]

Good book, sweet daily life, very beautiful (｡･ω･｡)ﾉ♡

The male protagonist won't become a star slave in the future, right? Now I feel like there are signs of this

The car speeds up, it looks good, I love watching it

It's so beautiful, Kou Ya, I just want to see this, Kou Gua

This book is definitely the best book I have ever read.

Although the development with the Sui family was too fast later, it is so beautiful that I love to watch [laughing evilly] [adoration]

For daily use, I think it's fine

Support me, it's well written

Super super super beautiful

Yes, the plot is quite interesting.

It's good to watch, love to watch, watch moreｸﾞｯ!(๑•̀ㅂ•́)و✧ Why is it still unknown whether he is alive or dead?

The writing is smooth and really interesting.

Sweeping the tomb, the soul comes and returns

Not bad, just change the cover

I hope you can stick to it and don't take it off the shelves, come on😊! ! !

I stayed up late to read it, I felt so good to read it, the author can give me more [blowing kisses] Does the author have a group? I'm afraid I won't be able to see it if it's blocked.

I like it very much, the author must write it down~

Don't know what to say

Not bad, quite novel

Don't be blocked

Very beautifully written

What looks good is very good

The writing is okay, okay.

Great flavor, no need for salt