After Li Lianhua jumped off the cliff, he vomited blood and fainted while sitting in the boat. He returned to ten years ago, and later found the sound of the flute flying. Fang Xiaobao and Jiao Liqiao came back together, and met Li Xiangyi
You saved everyone, but you couldn't save yourself
Reader comments
It's very beautiful, and it has written the plot that I want to watch the most.
Hee hee hee, I read it again and want to comment on the author. It's just my personal opinion without any malice [making a face]
1. The sentences used by the author are very good, but in some places they are used too frequently, making the theme less prominent.
2. The author does not need to write so many psychological descriptions. For example, sentences like "Li Lianhua's eyes showed a firmness" are fine if they appear less, but if they are too many, they will appear a bit wordy.
3. Then you don't need so many narrations, which seems to distance the readers from the plot of the story, and cannot make the readers feel the fun of it more intimately.
Finally, I admit that the author's writing is very good, but I hope to improve it a little. In fact, the author's writing style is very good, but there is a possibility that some parts are used incorrectly, which makes it feel a bit awkward. I think it will become better if I improve it, yes, yes, yes [make faces] [smile] [get it]
It looks good, I like it. I sit down and write quickly. I really want Li Xiangyi and Li Lianhua to recognize each other, and Lianhua and his master to recognize each other [admiration]
It's very beautiful, and it has written the plot that I want to watch the most. Hee hee hee, I read it again and want to comment on the author. It's just my personal opinion without any malice [making a face] 1. The sentences used by the author are very good, but in some places they are used too frequently, making the theme less prominent. 2. The author does not need to write so many psychological descriptions. For example, sentences like "Li Lianhua's eyes showed a firmness" are fine if they appear less, but if they are too many, they will appear a bit wordy. 3. Then you don't need so many narrations, which seems to distance the readers from the plot of the story, and cannot make the readers feel the fun of it more intimately. Finally, I admit that the author's writing is very good, but I hope to improve it a little. In fact, the author's writing style is very good, but there is a possibility that some parts are used incorrectly, which makes it feel a bit awkward. I think it will become better if I improve it, yes, yes, yes [make faces] [smile] [get it]
It looks good, I like it. I sit down and write quickly. I really want Li Xiangyi and Li Lianhua to recognize each other, and Lianhua and his master to recognize each other [admiration]
Some typos. But I like the story.
It's really great. I like it.