I Picked up the Point-Adding System in Cyber ​​City

Full marks, absolutely full marks. I haven't seen such a detailed and exciting article for a long time. The slowly growing invincible is very good. The writing is 99% better than Tomato, the plot is 90% better, and the conception is 95% better.

I'm currently at chapter 100. (Real rating: three stars) At first glance, it seems quite creative. Others are mechanically ascending in a world where the body is sanctified, but the protagonist is physically sanctified in a world of mechanical ascension. The 11 installation parts and load-bearing levels also made me feel bright in front of my eyes, but there seemed to be no shining points behind. First of all, there is the problem of the plot. I feel that the plot is bland and the arrangement is quite unreasonable. The protagonist and his team have been growing up in that small outer city, so can they really not go to other cities? Can't we use this to expand the world view and make the plot more interesting? (For example, when you go to different cities to buy different souvenirs, take on different tasks to expand the world view, and experience different things to characterize the characters, these can make the plot more interesting and make the journey of becoming a legendary hunter more meaningful and colorful) Moreover, this article is a novel about physical sanctification. There are not enough plots describing exercise in the book. Except for the description of exercise in Ren Wenbin's mission, I did not see exercise in the subsequent plots (maybe I forgot or didn't see it). I feel that the plot is not reasonable enough and it is not comfortable enough to read. Secondly, there is the issue of character. I think the characters in the book are not distinctive enough. In my opinion, the degree of distinctiveness of Niri's character > Tan Mengqiu > Blue Bird is ultimately a matter of the plot. The character is not fully portrayed, and the character cannot be directly felt. When reading, it feels like this person's character is erratic and the sensory experience is very poor. (If you ask me, you can make Jade Bird a tsundere and the protagonist a straight man. There will definitely be more people watching this way. You can also write more scenes where Jade Bird is jealous because other girls are close to the protagonist. Jiejiejiejiejie. It's interesting to think about it. If you change it like this, I will definitely give it a try🤓🤓🤓) Finally, there is the issue of combat effectiveness. After seeing 100 pictures, I still don't have a clear idea of ​​the protagonist's combat effectiveness. I just don't know what stage their combat effectiveness is at, and I don't have a clear idea of ​​the combat effectiveness of other enemies either. When I first started watching it, I felt that Blue Bird was a badass. After being highlighted by the enemies, I felt that Blue Bird's combat effectiveness was very high. However, after being highlighted by the protagonist, I felt that it was very good. It feels like everyone's fighting power is vague, and it feels like everyone's fighting power seems to be the same. As the author, you can plan various realms, so the reader's viewing experience will definitely be more than doubled. Also, can you change the title of your book? I really don't want to say. I asked if there was any relationship between the title of the book and the content, but I couldn't tell. If you change the title of a book, more people will definitely click in to read it. My suggestion is to change it to "Mechanical Ascension?" No, I chose "Sanctification of the Flesh" or "Sanctification of the Flesh in the World of Mechanical Ascension", so as not only to compare with the introduction, but also with the content. The last one is a poisonous point, and I also recommend changing it. There is a poisonous point in Chapter 89, where the protagonist suddenly thinks of the blue bird. I really can't stand it. Maybe it's not enough emotional foreshadowing. Anyway, when I read that, I saw the protagonist's inner monologue and felt so embarrassed. "Birth", why did you suddenly write such an embarrassing thing? I just closed my eyes and wrote it off. We could also write more about the shy protagonist, which I think is quite interesting. (I can't remember the others. Book friends can leave their own comments below and let the author change them) @There is no finish line. I have written so much, do you want to read it? Change or not?

It's good. Except for souls and ghosts, it's really unnecessary. The whole attack on the spirit is also fine. The boy is decisive in doing things. Chapter 100. They are brothers, they are whitewashing, and then they are blackening the ambush. There is also a hacker woman, and the ex-boyfriend appears and it is a misunderstanding. It is really unnecessary. Write more about human body modification and mechanical modification. No problem, cyberpunk? Then the eyes can detect similar abilities, which can be more diverse, and there are also limited types of enemies. There are also many types of enemies, which is interesting. In addition, biologically modified enemies, such as the lizards that appeared at the beginning, can even be biologically modified by any animal, inheriting part of the animal's abilities, like the Cthulhu Deep Diver, with a fish head, a leopard head, or a turtle head. To be honest, it is interesting at first. Later, it can be completely around the corporate consortium, mechanical biological transformation, and slums. Cyberpunk? The distinction between uptown and lower class people is particularly obvious.

For now, it's okay, just keep the writing style, but as for cyberpunk writing, it's really difficult to move on if it's not a fanfic or 2077. I hope the author sticks to his original intention, doesn't stop updating, and at least finishes it [Like]

Why is this very good book rated so low? There are some interesting things in it but no one has commented on it. I will recommend it to you. The further back you go, the better it looks, your physical body is invincible and it will blow up the cyber world.

It's awesome. Apart from the fact that the male protagonist is a little bit vicious at the beginning, but then the killing is also very satisfying. Everything else is in line with my fantasy of cyberpunk. I really look forward to the male protagonist growing up quickly and marrying back his beloved girl openly.

The author really writes well. Although it is not a masterpiece of creation, the author's persistence alone is better than 80% of Tomato authors. I hope the author can continue writing. Even if he can't continue writing, I hope the author can write a more satisfactory ending. Come on!

? Why is the rating so low? I feel like the author is quite positive o_C But it's a pity that not many people read it. I feel like I discouraged too many people at the beginning🤔

There are very few cyberpunk masterpieces, and the rating should be the same as those of its peers.

This book is okay, why are so few people reading it?

It's so beautiful, I won't say much more, just "cool"!

Not bad, relatively new and interesting.

It's okay, please support me

Great plot, super fun to watch

Not bad, very pretty

Touch the dog's head. Touch the dog's head.

The world view is quite different and quite nice.

It's a good book. The second volume is better than the first volume. As long as the author doesn't make mistakes and gives a steady performance, it's still good [face covering]

Not bad, cyberpunk style

The book is very good, good luck to the author If you only read half of this book, it is very interesting. Of course, the setting and content are a bit too different. When I saw the back part, I felt that it was a forced version downgrade. I went to school again to review the opening team and do the tasks. If I can push horizontally, I have to show off my IQ.

Personally I like it better

It looks okay so far

Looks good, but the rating is a bit low

Good book, give it five stars

Beautiful, this book is really beautiful

The second volume is really good

A very good book

It looks good, I love watching it.

It's okay, it's pretty cool

Personally I think it looks pretty [like] [like]