Dragon Clan: Abducting Xia Mi at the Beginning to Create His Own Extraordinary System

The obvious sentences in the early stage are a bit green, but as I gradually become more proficient and enter the main storyline, I feel more comfortable watching them. But I feel like I overplayed the joke in some places [face covering], but in fact, in many cases, the weakness of being addicted is relative, and it is not really attractive. After seeing that the next generation started to humiliate me, I didn't hold back, so I can only attribute this to the fact that the joke was taken too far. In conclusion, if you read it without skipping a page, there will still be a lot of obstacles, whether it is a slightly straightforward awkward language or a slightly unfamiliar emotional line, but I think it is okay. The original work has been stretched by the author, and it is still annoying to watch a second creation [cool] But if you just want to watch it for fun, it doesn't matter if it's poisonous or not, as long as it's comfortable to watch [you taste it carefully], don't be like those picky nts. If you don't want to watch it, you still have to leave a comment in the comment area to prove to everyone how good you are* byd, don't be a fool, you're reading this book just to see the heroine Xiami, why are you not mentioning Chu Zihang? This sentence of yours can instantly lower the reader's expectations for the entire book [punch]. I hope you won't do this kind of thing again in the future, otherwise I can only say goodbye. Editor 2: You're really addicted to playing memes, right? Insulting Xiami's combat power is not such an insult [smiles]. Do you really think Xiami is weak? Melee Fantasy God is kidding you, people's weakness is relative to their power. I can't stand the jokes anymore. That time the surrogate and the dark side monarch humiliated her in front of her. The feeling of separation almost killed me [rolls eyes] Editor 3: Brothers, I can't stand my evaluation anymore. The previous plot was quite enjoyable, but the quality has started to plummet since the economic and political struggle. [Awkward laugh] I won't go into other difficult points. The life of the mistress of the Laurent family was saved by the protagonist. The arrangement and protection of the family were all helped by the protagonist. As a result, she later took it for granted and began to aggressively accuse the protagonist of protecting her territory. There are also several paragraphs with the same meaning but different number of words. Did the author use AI to expand the paragraphs and then delete them without even deleting them [laughing] Just forget it once and there will be a second time? Are there more places I didn't see?

It's very in line with my preferences. What I hate about it is the bullshit Lu Mingfei is reborn. There is Chu Xia together. In the novel and comics, Jörmungandr still doesn't want to kill him in the end. This shows that revenge is more important than Xia in Chu's heart. Later in the novel, it is described that Chu felt very regretful about his choice to kill Xia, and he had already killed him, but he still had to describe it repeatedly, regretting, regretting. Now that they are all dead, the author wants them to get back together again, which is a big part of the reason why Long 45 died. 123 Has a lot of originality, and Er 45 is just resting on its laurels. And it is very unbearable for the audience. Dragon One makes people feel uncomfortable, Dragon Two makes people feel heartbroken, Dragon Three directly makes people crazy, and then Dragon Four and Dragon Five directly hit the muzzle. Chapter 4 takes Xia Mi as the theme. I think the theme of this section is very good. The climax is as strong as the muscle, and the emotional scene with Xia Mi is written to make the audience fall in love with the character of Xia Mi. I think this emotional scene of yours is very important, even more important than your later description of how to get Jiu Deya to join the gang. If this paragraph is written, it will pave the way for the future writing of two female protagonists and the addition of Hui Liyi. You can even directly forcibly describe what happened to Eri Yi. She fell in love with the protagonist because of the protagonist's step-by-step rescue and Xia Mi's kindness and kindness. With the various buffs of Xia Mi's love brain and kindness, you agreed to Eri Yi becoming the second heroine. If you want to write a story with multiple heroines in the future, based on my experience of more than 10,000 hours, it will definitely be unfinished. Since Xia Mi is the heroine, you can't accept other women. Because these two women are the most popular in the Dragon Clan, let me put it bluntly, other women are not worthy of her. Why did the ancients say that you pedal on two boats? Because two boats make it easier to balance. I won't say much else. Because I'm too lazy to say it.

It is recommended to go to a small place and watch Dragon Clan: The Road to Becoming a God by Undercover in the Beginning

Okay, okay, the writing is very good. Although the author is relatively watery and the plot is not that logical, the emotional line between the protagonist and Xia Mi is very well written [laughter] Well, I've read Chapter 90. How can I put it? I feel that the author's rhythm is very strange. Author, you don't actually need to explain the plan in such detail. Not many people like to read this part. When the protagonist talks about the plan, I just glance at it and skip it. You can just write the protagonist's subsequent action arrangements [face covering] The plot involving this part is long and boring. It feels like a teacher giving a lecture. Here is a copy of a book friend's comment. I quite agree with his point of view. (I found that so many things are: advancing a plot, raising a question, explaining in detail, pushing another plot, asking questions, and analyzing in detail. Can you describe a little more about doing business, it is all a plan outline) There is also the issue of the marginalization of classic supporting characters. Since the author is a novice, I am not so demanding. As long as the author does not forget some characters in the later stages of writing, that will be fine. The last question is, the author should decide as soon as possible whether it is a single or multiple female protagonist, and then mark it in the introduction. You can't tell whether it is multiple or single in the current introduction, which still has a big impact on a novel (I personally prefer that the author writes multiple female protagonists, but I can also read single female protagonists, just don't give away one female protagonist)

Very nice, not being a nanny, having my own ideas. It would be fine if the protagonist had a harem, but if not, the previous behavior of flirting with other female characters would be a bit...

It's quite interesting. Could you please ask if you will become a purebred in the future?

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It's wonderful. It's the one that I've seen that has the best understanding of the world view of the dragon clan among the dragon clan fanfics. The protagonist of lyb, a closed-loop plot. 666, Recommended by old bookworms who have read for more than 20,000 hours!

It's very beautiful, but it's a pity that there are too few people to watch it, so I can't get enough points. The protagonist of this book participates in the plot as a third party, destroys other people's plans, breaks away from the traditional power system of the dragon clan, and takes a different path from other fan fiction. I think the logic is still very clear. After all, how can we defeat the Black King who created this system with the power of the Dragon Clan's system?

Is the author a single female protagonist or multiple female protagonists [Thinking]

Author, isn't this another version of the West Lake Riders, Xu Xian and Xia Mi, Xu Xian and White Snake, good guys, I just came across it, no wonder it felt a bit familiar when I saw it.

After reading the previous part, I felt it was well written, but I feel that the author's style is similar to that of Fengshen next door [Thinking]

From the first few chapters, I can see that it is indeed written by a novice, but it gradually became more fluent later on. I am a good author and have potential, please do it [cool] [sending heartfelt wishes]

Can the author's dialogue description be refined? [Eating melon]

There is a very large plan description in the middle. That section was very boring and white, but I had to watch it. It's rather uncomfortable, but I still like looking at the front and back. Support

I have read the eighth volume and it seems that the plot arrangement is very good. The protagonist is a bit too benevolent. The biggest problem is that the dialogue between the characters gives people the feeling of a primary school student bragging. It is very dramatic. The conversation with the orthodox patriarchs really made me feel awkward. There are also some jokes that are quite interesting. It makes people want to watch the plot but don't want to read in detail. I want to jump when I see the dialogue. Let's see what happens next. I will come back to add if there are advantages. Before reading, you can jump directly to Chapter 110 and give it a try. There are many similar language descriptions, and everyone's poisonous point is different. If you can accept it, this book will be a good dragon fanfic, which is a lot more enjoyable. The protagonist is rare among dragon fandoms and is kind-hearted. It is in line with the author's idea of making up for his regrets.

It's good to watch. The protagonist is a fun person. Although the introduction says that the heroine is a shrimp king, many girls are attracted to the male protagonist. The plot is interesting and humorous, and the writing is okay. By the way, Lu Mingfei and Su Xiaoqiang are a pair, which can be regarded as opening up a new track. However, the protagonist is a bit fast in the early stage. Although it is also cheating later, it is not that outrageous. Generally speaking, it is OK [Like] [Like]

Monkey and crab! My friend, you are the true god in the Dragon Clan fandom. Please update me more. The days without follow-up are really hard [crying] When you update, subtle flaws will be magnified, and the greenness of the writing will be criticized. When you update twice, a little patience is born, and the progress of the plot is paid more attention to. When you are on the third watch, the little praise starts to sound, and the number of dead harvests starts to decrease. When you update the fifth update, readers' support will spontaneously form, and the voices of praise will become louder and louder. When you are at the tenth watch, the Confucian debates are deafening, and the tolerant attitude is implemented both internally and externally. When you are twenty, you will have a place in the bookworm's memories. Even in your long life, your name will leave a dazzling trace. Updates may not solve all problems, but more than 90% of problems come from insufficient updates. [Cry]

The early stage is okay, I just hope that the author in the later stage will not make the protagonist self-inflicted. Go and join Chu Zihang's relationship. The writing style and writing power at the beginning are quite good.

It looks great, and I even added some background expansion to a couple of sentences in the original work, so cool!

There are some small poisonous points. Some chapters in the whole book are poisonous from time to time, and the frequency is not low. There are many, and the overall look and feel is good. Excluding these poisonous points, it is still very good to read. There is also too much nonsense in the article, there are many words that affect the perception, and the description plan is too long, so there is no omission. In fact, some things can be mentioned in one sentence.

Although I don't watch Dragons, it is a good Dragons fanfic. It's a pity that the plot has changed. Where is the background of Dragons? Even though it has changed some of the sand sculptures and fun, it is a pity that the previous technical pavement is to establish an earthly fairy kingdom and move towards the multiverse;

It's very consistent with what I'm thinking. I like Xia Mi, and I like to read novels as long as the heroine is Xia Mi. Hope for a quick update.

Will you, the author, write new books? There are not many high-quality fan authors like you, and I can't bear to leave you.

Good, so sweet, as sweet as Kai's book [Adoration]

It's good to read, I love to read it. Although I know there is no need to say the following sentence, I still want to say that I am really not an actor. This book is really good. It is not like other books. Either Lu Mingfei is reborn, or he travels through time and then tortures Lu Mingfei crazily. The pace is so fast that it is not interesting at all. I really enjoyed reading this book. I highly recommend it. These comments are just my own subjective comments. I just say that I like it very much and think it is well written. The main reason is that I have read too many messy things in the past. It is rare for someone to be normal or even good, so I will give such a high evaluation. After reading it for a while, I feel that this is actually only 4 stars or 4 and a half stars, not five stars. Anyway, I will give further comments after I finish reading. I have seen one or two hundred chapters so far, and the content is quite good. I just feel that the protagonist's strength has developed a hundred million points faster.

Ah, the behind-the-scenes boss series [almost crying] Why am I only reading this book now? [Face covering] It's a good book that I've been looking for [laughing crookedly] The author must not stop updating it [laughing and crying]

It's okay for the author to have his own plot, but to be honest, some dragon fans don't really like this writing style. It's too complicated and too slow, which makes people feel uncomfortable. But as a newcomer, I give you five stars. I hope you stick to it.

This is my first time reading Dragon Clan. It looks really good. It's very interesting. Gou, Liu

The Dragon Clan fanfic is pretty good, but I always like to make jokes and mention stories about my first wife in front of the heroine (Natsuya) and the prospective harem. Damn, I am really afraid of suddenly writing some green scenes, which really panics a lot of people. However, there is no such sign at the moment, but it is still a bit uncomfortable. However, these shortcomings have been corrected in the future. Putting aside these flaws, the writing is actually quite good. The protagonist is very good at calculating others. Five stars!