Two hundred years ago, an alien organization named Golgom invaded the earth, and mankind fell into a major crisis. A mysterious black knight stepped forward and defeated the Golgom organization. However, not long after, the alien civilization Chrysis Empire also set its sights on the earth. With the joint efforts of the black knight and humans, the Chrysis Empire was finally wiped out with difficulty, and the black knight was also missing...
It was not until the early twenty-first century that disaster emerged.
Reader comments
The setting is good, and the plot so far is okay, but the writing style is a bit weird, using too many metaphors. The whole article is full of sentence patterns like... Like... Like... Every sentence has to use a metaphor, and every action has to be described with a lot of complex sentences. It is really too wordy, and the words are not gorgeous, but redundant, which makes people uncomfortable. Just like when I write an essay, I have to write long sentences to make up the word count, which makes people look awkward. I hope the author can make some improvements and not put the cart before the horse in pursuit of a gorgeous writing style.
I didn't feel wrong. I seemed to be watching the narration tell a story. It was a strange feeling [face covering]
The setting is good, and the plot so far is okay, but the writing style is a bit weird, using too many metaphors. The whole article is full of sentence patterns like... Like... Like... Every sentence has to use a metaphor, and every action has to be described with a lot of complex sentences. It is really too wordy, and the words are not gorgeous, but redundant, which makes people uncomfortable. Just like when I write an essay, I have to write long sentences to make up the word count, which makes people look awkward. I hope the author can make some improvements and not put the cart before the horse in pursuit of a gorgeous writing style.
I didn't feel wrong. I seemed to be watching the narration tell a story. It was a strange feeling [face covering]
The protagonist's presence is too low.
Feeling pretty good
Nice! ! ! ! !