Gu Qingbai and Chu Tiancuo were picked up by Mingde Immortal Lord and brought back to Wanjian Sect together. Gu Qingbai was upright and well-mannered. After twenty years of pursuit, she finally achieved success. She was a veritable senior sister of the sect. And she, Chu Tiancuo, had made a mistake since she was born. Even her name was different from that of the senior sister. She was no better than the glorious one. She behaved like a dog and acted obscenely. She only wanted to do things that harmed others and benefited herself, but she was frequently stopped by that senior sister.
The more the senior sister stops her, the more she appears to be of noble character and herself humble.
Finally, Chu Tiancuo, who was holding a grudge, found an opportunity to take revenge on his senior sister.
While Gu Qing was using the golden elixir to resist the thunderstorm, she forced a breakthrough in an attempt to attract the attention of Mingde Immortal Lord. However, she was abandoned by everyone. Thunder rolled down from the sky, severe pain struck, and the world was boundless gray.
When he opened his eyes again, she became Gu Qingbai's inner demon, living in her sea of consciousness, communicating with her, and even interfering with her thoughts...
Chu Tiancuo laughed loudly. All the bad treatment God had given her finally came to a turning point at this moment...
Reader comments
First of all, this book is definitely not enough to attract readers. Why? Because when you first read it, when you read more than ten or twenty chapters, you will always see just an ordinary novel about cultivating immortals. There are no highlights that can catch the readers' attention at once. We might as well release the most eye-catching thing of this novel - the setting - in advance. The most crucial thing that will attract readers to this novel is the setting. In terms of setting, the heroine will become Gu's inner demon. So you can try to point out the heroine's becoming the inner demon at the beginning, and write about Gu's psychological descriptions such as being lost, ordinary, etc., And then through the interaction between the two, you can Use conversations or people or things that they have experienced together to bring out the contradictions and conflicts between the two, instead of starting from a relatively longer time period like you do, and adding a lot of conflicts between the two heroines and others in the middle.
Secondly, there is another problem mentioned above. The book is written about conflicts at the beginning and takes up a lot of space. This makes the mutual feelings between the two heroines unclear. Later in the article, they mention their mutual feelings once, but they still lack that sense of bond. For example, they are old enemies, close friends, or one of them has an ambiguous attitude but the other is unaware of it, and so on. The lack of a sense of bond means that the heroines are just senior sisters who have some conflicts or misunderstandings. There is no friction or conflict. It just looks like a running account recording daily life.
In general, this book can completely put the heroine's inner demon at the beginning, tell the readers about the relationship between the two through Gu's attitude towards Chu after his death, and then use the two people to face things together to bring out the conflicts you put in the beginning, the conflicts between Chu and Mu, the conflicts between Chu and Gu, and the relationship between Gu and Li. Through the common experience of the two, they can resolve each conflict and resolve each misunderstanding to slowly bring the two people closer. This kind of story will have more feeling.
The author's expressions are accurate, and as a long novel, the setting is also very interesting, so I give four stars for encouragement.
Ps: Did the author get inspired by reading the short article written by Rabbit Fang?
I originally wanted to give it five points, but I think the flaw is that there are no extra chapters for the two lines of Yun Sheng and Si Yin, and the two female protagonists are killed. However, the female supporting characters should also have a good ending. If the author sees this comment and is free, can he make up for the ending of the two CP pairs of Yun Sheng and Si Yin? Si Yin doesn't need to think about it, it must be he. Although Yun Sheng's secret realm shows he, its ups and downs ending should also be added. I am very interested in one of the endings of Yun Sheng mentioned in the secret realm. Of course, the author can also abandon the secret realm line and write a new Yun Sheng line, but the ending must be he. Take my knee.
Not bad~(๑•̀ㅂ•́)و✧
Come on, author! You are the best!
It looks pretty good so far, but I want to ask if there are two female protagonists?
Why is it gone? Wuwuwuwu
It's very interesting, I'm looking forward to the next episode.
Good-looking, good-looking, good-looking, good-looking, I am a layman, I can only say good-looking~
The little rascal is so handsome and cute, ah ah ah, come on now if you are innocent!
Good article, I like it, treasure, hide it, only I can read it
The author writes really well [love][love][love]
Come on, author, give you good reviews.
Good-looking, good-looking, good-looking
It's just that the front is too annoying and frustrating.
I almost thought it was BEed. The sub-CP has been BEed, the main text has been BEEN once, and the extra chapter has BEEN once again. 😭It's just a knife, you knife me back twice [I'm about to cry]
The emotions are delicate, I hope the author will use more words!
It's very good, the text is vivid, and I also like the CPs in it. I'm short of words, but it's very good
Good article, a rare treasure article
I've finished reading it, overall it's pretty good, and it made me stay up all night to read the novel.
The writing is good, the characters are well created, the actions are logical and character-like, and it reads smoothly. Worth reading.
The heroine is very cute, the action and plot are very fitting, the supporting characters are also very distinctive, and the writing is very good [heartfelt], highly recommended.
First of all, this book is definitely not enough to attract readers. Why? Because when you first read it, when you read more than ten or twenty chapters, you will always see just an ordinary novel about cultivating immortals. There are no highlights that can catch the readers' attention at once. We might as well release the most eye-catching thing of this novel - the setting - in advance. The most crucial thing that will attract readers to this novel is the setting. In terms of setting, the heroine will become Gu's inner demon. So you can try to point out the heroine's becoming the inner demon at the beginning, and write about Gu's psychological descriptions such as being lost, ordinary, etc., And then through the interaction between the two, you can Use conversations or people or things that they have experienced together to bring out the contradictions and conflicts between the two, instead of starting from a relatively longer time period like you do, and adding a lot of conflicts between the two heroines and others in the middle. Secondly, there is another problem mentioned above. The book is written about conflicts at the beginning and takes up a lot of space. This makes the mutual feelings between the two heroines unclear. Later in the article, they mention their mutual feelings once, but they still lack that sense of bond. For example, they are old enemies, close friends, or one of them has an ambiguous attitude but the other is unaware of it, and so on. The lack of a sense of bond means that the heroines are just senior sisters who have some conflicts or misunderstandings. There is no friction or conflict. It just looks like a running account recording daily life. In general, this book can completely put the heroine's inner demon at the beginning, tell the readers about the relationship between the two through Gu's attitude towards Chu after his death, and then use the two people to face things together to bring out the conflicts you put in the beginning, the conflicts between Chu and Mu, the conflicts between Chu and Gu, and the relationship between Gu and Li. Through the common experience of the two, they can resolve each conflict and resolve each misunderstanding to slowly bring the two people closer. This kind of story will have more feeling. The author's expressions are accurate, and as a long novel, the setting is also very interesting, so I give four stars for encouragement. Ps: Did the author get inspired by reading the short article written by Rabbit Fang?
I originally wanted to give it five points, but I think the flaw is that there are no extra chapters for the two lines of Yun Sheng and Si Yin, and the two female protagonists are killed. However, the female supporting characters should also have a good ending. If the author sees this comment and is free, can he make up for the ending of the two CP pairs of Yun Sheng and Si Yin? Si Yin doesn't need to think about it, it must be he. Although Yun Sheng's secret realm shows he, its ups and downs ending should also be added. I am very interested in one of the endings of Yun Sheng mentioned in the secret realm. Of course, the author can also abandon the secret realm line and write a new Yun Sheng line, but the ending must be he. Take my knee.
Not bad~(๑•̀ㅂ•́)و✧ Come on, author! You are the best!
It looks pretty good so far, but I want to ask if there are two female protagonists?
Why is it gone? Wuwuwuwu
It's very interesting, I'm looking forward to the next episode.
Good-looking, good-looking, good-looking, good-looking, I am a layman, I can only say good-looking~ The little rascal is so handsome and cute, ah ah ah, come on now if you are innocent!
Good article, I like it, treasure, hide it, only I can read it
The author writes really well [love][love][love]
Come on, author, give you good reviews.
Good-looking, good-looking, good-looking It's just that the front is too annoying and frustrating.
I almost thought it was BEed. The sub-CP has been BEed, the main text has been BEEN once, and the extra chapter has BEEN once again. 😭It's just a knife, you knife me back twice [I'm about to cry]
The emotions are delicate, I hope the author will use more words!
It's very good, the text is vivid, and I also like the CPs in it. I'm short of words, but it's very good
Good article, a rare treasure article
I've finished reading it, overall it's pretty good, and it made me stay up all night to read the novel.
The writing is good, the characters are well created, the actions are logical and character-like, and it reads smoothly. Worth reading. The heroine is very cute, the action and plot are very fitting, the supporting characters are also very distinctive, and the writing is very good [heartfelt], highly recommended.