Gu Qingbai and Chu Tiancuo were both taken in by Venerable Mingde of the Myriad Swords Sect. Gu Qingbai is righteous to the core, graceful and composed. After twenty years of cultivating her heart, she has finally achieved success and become the sect’s undisputed senior sister. As for Chu Tiancuo, she was a mistake from the moment she was born. Even her name falls far short of her senior sister’s. While Gu Qingbai is as bright and noble as the moon, Chu Tiancuo scrambles for petty gains, behaves disgracefully, and is always plotting to benefit herself at others’ expense, only to be stopped time and again by that same senior sister.
The more her senior sister stops her, the more virtuous she seems, while Chu Tiancuo appears ever more despicable.
At last, consumed by resentment, Chu Tiancuo finds a chance to take revenge on her senior sister.
While Gu Qingbai forms her golden core and withstands the tribulation, Chu Tiancuo forcibly attempts a breakthrough, hoping to draw Venerable Mingde’s attention. Instead, everyone abandons her. Thunder crashes down, pain sears through her, and the world fades into endless darkness.
When she opens her eyes again, she has become Gu Qingbai’s inner demon, living in her sea of consciousness. They can even feel each other’s sensations, and Chu Tiancuo can interfere with her thoughts to some extent...
Chu Tiancuo laughs out loud. At last, after all the ways Heaven has mistreated her, her fortunes have finally taken a turn for the better...
First of all, this book is definitely not enough to attract readers. Why? Because when you first read it, when you read more than ten or twenty chapters, you will always see just an ordinary novel about cultivating immortals. There are no highlights that can catch the readers' attention at once. We might as well release the most eye-catching thing of this novel - the setting - in advance. The most crucial thing that will attract readers to this novel is the setting. In terms of setting, the heroine will become Gu's inner demon. So you can try to point out the heroine's becoming the inner demon at the beginning, and write about Gu's psychological descriptions such as being lost, ordinary, etc., And then through the interaction between the two, you can Use conversations or people or things that they have experienced together to bring out the contradictions and conflicts between the two, instead of starting from a relatively longer time period like you do, and adding a lot of conflicts between the two heroines and others in the middle. Secondly, there is another problem mentioned above. The book is written about conflicts at the beginning and takes up a lot of space. This makes the mutual feelings between the two heroines unclear. Later in the article, they mention their mutual feelings once, but they still lack that sense of bond. For example, they are old enemies, close friends, or one of them has an ambiguous attitude but the other is unaware of it, and so on. The lack of a sense of bond means that the heroines are just senior sisters who have some conflicts or misunderstandings. There is no friction or conflict. It just looks like a running account recording daily life. In general, this book can completely put the heroine's inner demon at the beginning, tell the readers about the relationship between the two through Gu's attitude towards Chu after his death, and then use the two people to face things together to bring out the conflicts you put in the beginning, the conflicts between Chu and Mu, the conflicts between Chu and Gu, and the relationship between Gu and Li. Through the common experience of the two, they can resolve each conflict and resolve each misunderstanding to slowly bring the two people closer. This kind of story will have more feeling. The author's expressions are accurate, and as a long novel, the setting is also very interesting, so I give four stars for encouragement. Ps: Did the author get inspired by reading the short article written by Rabbit Fang?
I originally wanted to give it five points, but I think the flaw is that there are no extra chapters for the two lines of Yun Sheng and Si Yin, and the two female protagonists are killed. However, the female supporting characters should also have a good ending. If the author sees this comment and is free, can he make up for the ending of the two CP pairs of Yun Sheng and Si Yin? Si Yin doesn't need to think about it, it must be he. Although Yun Sheng's secret realm shows he, its ups and downs ending should also be added. I am very interested in one of the endings of Yun Sheng mentioned in the secret realm. Of course, the author can also abandon the secret realm line and write a new Yun Sheng line, but the ending must be he. Take my knee.
Not bad~(๑•̀ㅂ•́)و✧ Come on, author! You are the best!
It looks pretty good so far, but I want to ask if there are two female protagonists?
Good article, I like it, treasure, hide it, only I can read it
Why is it gone? Wuwuwuwu
The author writes really well ❤️❤️❤️
Good-looking, good-looking, good-looking, good-looking, I am a layman, I can only say good-looking~ The little rascal is so handsome and cute, ah ah ah, come on now if you are innocent!
It's very interesting, I'm looking forward to the next episode.
I almost thought it was BEed. The sub-CP has been BEed, the main text has been BEEN once, and the extra chapter has BEEN once again. 😭It's just a knife, you knife me back twice 🥺