Claim the Investiture of the Gods and Teach Every Jie Sect Member to Become a Sage!

Stop using flashy words. I'm speechless. Basically every sentence is an exaggeration. Is it interesting? It seems that your words are beautiful, yes, but I think you are just showing off that you are literate! This is not an essay, let alone an exam! This is a novel, it needs to be streamlined

The writing style is okay, and I can feel the author's hard work. But each conversation should be concise and as short as possible. Don't have a long conversation with one person. In reality, there is no way for two people to have a conversation where one person goes on and on and the other doesn't say a word. Also, it is recommended that the author downplays the system, or dehumanizes the system, otherwise the sentence "system" suddenly pops up in your half-literary and half-white writing style, which will be too dramatic. There are also cheats. People who can directly give enlightenment and initiate enlightenment like this should not appear again. Originally, time is not valuable. You can understand the deepest laws of treasures according to the guidance of the system. This is no more reasonable than your system directly sending out enlightenment. Finally, there should be less conspiracy theories. Nowadays, conspiracy theories are too common, have no freshness, and have no interest in reading.