Preface
"You're on the road again."
"The wind blows through your temples, the earth carries your footsteps, and the sky will watch your progress and open up a path for you."
"The grass and trees sing for you, the dew sparkles, day and night alternate, and your steps never stop."
"But if you stop and look back, the beauty in the world will be eroded by filth, the weather will become chaotic, and the cold winter will never recede."
"You see the spread of war, you see the omens of disaster, the dying lives are lamenting and roaring, hating the injustice of fate and resisting everything they can."
"The natural order began to collapse, Henggu's death crawled onto the ground, time stopped moving forward, and space stopped flowing."
"But this is the choice of fate, and you are the one who resists fate."
"You have received the enlightenment of wisdom, and the holy power accompanies you as you move forward. You have sealed all disasters and malice in the world, and driven away all evil thoughts and filth. The world, bound by fate, will praise your achievements until the next reincarnation."
"This is your destiny, to be the brightest star among thousands of stars, shining brightly."
The God of Destiny wrote these words and engraved them in everyone's heart. When the stars of destiny coincide with you again, time will flow back and return to the beginning.
And your journey will begin again.
Reader comments
I'm happy to cheer you on, but let me talk about the issues you need to pay attention to.
It's roughly as follows:
"Climbing high and looking into the distance, the scenery is picturesque and refreshing. It's hard to describe this feeling." The corners of her mouth slightly raised with a bit of self-mockery, "Li Qirzepa. (Sanskrit transliteration: heaven)"
Change it to your way of writing it, roughly:
"Climbing high and looking into the distance, the scenery is picturesque and refreshing. It's hard to describe this feeling." The corners of her mouth slightly raised with a bit of self-mockery, "Lichirzepa."
See what I mean? Dialogue does not add [,] after ["]. This is a wrong usage. In fact, I am not sure about this myself, but my long-term reading experience clearly tells me that there is no such usage.
Come on! (*^ω^*)
Overall, the worldview is okay, but some passages feel like they could be optimized, with more focus on the protagonist (although I probably wouldn't be able to write it that well if I were asked to write it)
I'm happy to cheer you on, but let me talk about the issues you need to pay attention to. It's roughly as follows: "Climbing high and looking into the distance, the scenery is picturesque and refreshing. It's hard to describe this feeling." The corners of her mouth slightly raised with a bit of self-mockery, "Li Qirzepa. (Sanskrit transliteration: heaven)" Change it to your way of writing it, roughly: "Climbing high and looking into the distance, the scenery is picturesque and refreshing. It's hard to describe this feeling." The corners of her mouth slightly raised with a bit of self-mockery, "Lichirzepa." See what I mean? Dialogue does not add [,] after ["]. This is a wrong usage. In fact, I am not sure about this myself, but my long-term reading experience clearly tells me that there is no such usage. Come on! (*^ω^*)
Overall, the worldview is okay, but some passages feel like they could be optimized, with more focus on the protagonist (although I probably wouldn't be able to write it that well if I were asked to write it)