Ranked 17, Targeted by Horror Games

I found this book in the sea Well written Some of the problems mentioned in the long comment do exist It does feel like a bit of a bug for a good ghost to help you for no reason. Maybe it's a hidden thread, but I wrote it a little too fast I hope that the presence of good ghosts in the author's subsequent content will be less Focus on the description of horror Because there is no heroine in the story, I am a bit confused about Xie Qingqing's closeness. He trusts the other person when they lie in his arms together, unlike a dean who has played too many horror games. Even if the male protagonist wears clothes, it is written that he and Xie Qingqing are not that familiar at the beginning. The original protagonist's personality is also on the cold side, and he hopes to be more friendly.

After reading the 42nd chapter of the update, let me tell you my feelings. The game settings are okay, the plot outside the dungeon will be more exciting, the card drawing, the setting of the compound are good, the chapter name is good [dungeon name] plus a subtitle, so that people can know at a glance which dungeon this chapter is. However, the dungeon is not very scary, and the writing needs to be more polished. I would like to give you a suggestion. You can learn from Kaleidoscope to absorb more real-life ghost backgrounds, such as human skin drums, box girls, and minotaurs, or learn from Trickster to innovate in the ghost rules. The setting of making amends and rising ghosts is very good. The setting of the big sun and the big lie outside the dungeon is also very attractive. There are also a lot of good ghosts in the dungeon. Why should the little boy help the protagonist group? Why did the pianist come out holding the protagonist? Once the ghosts are able to communicate with human beings, play games, and even be fooled around by the protagonist's words, the horror of the dungeon will be greatly reduced. Moreover, the novel lacks some reasoning parts, and it is easier to pass the level. The steel bars sealed the 1-6 floors, so I just pushed it out and took the elevator to the seventh floor to pass the level? It was too easy to pass the test. The tasks were to repair the elevator and take care of the son, but ended up killing the son, not repairing the elevator, and finally ran away from the seventh floor? Moreover, the previous article did not specify the specific time limit, so why did the ghost go berserk on that day? There are relatively few rules for dungeon missions. In the first and second chapters, you only know what the mission objectives are. This kind of open-ended exploration of ghost dungeons is very common, but the premise is that there must be strong plot support. There is also a common problem in this type of novels. In order to highlight the horror of the dungeon and the low pass rate, there are too many cannon fodders in the later dungeons. For example, the box girl in the ninth level of Kaleidoscope has nothing to say about the plot and atmosphere, but after the ninth level, there are newcomers who are cowardly, and the old man is also transparent throughout the process. I can't experience the feeling of cooperation or game among masters. I hope this novel can make the supporting characters a little more useful. At least now I feel that this Yukiko and a few old people are completely transparent. Considering that the ratings of Tomato novels are generally high, the ratings of Shelter and Ten Days are very high, so I might as well give a five-star rating to encourage new authors.

I would like to give the author a suggestion. Don't make the protagonist's halo too high. The supporting characters can die even if they deserve to die. There is no need for the protagonist to be from Liuliu. None of the supporting characters will die. People who have watched dozens of scenes in other compounds have said that they will die. There is nothing wrong with the protagonist's team. Obviously, apart from the protagonist, other characters in the compound have no particularly outstanding points. In addition, I hope the author will write about the difference between stars and levels. Anyway, it seems that there is not much difference between 1-star characters and ordinary people at present. Most of them have the weaknesses of ordinary people. 2-Star characters are usually stronger and more advantageous in physical fitness. 3-Star characters have a certain resistance to weirdness, and their recovery ability is also different from ordinary people. There are no 4-star or 5-star characters in the future. Only 6-star characters appear in the narrative. The article also mentions that characters have skills, but it is not clear from which star they start.

The advantage is that it is very creative. The author has a lot of imagination in terms of setting and plot reversal. The shortcomings are also great. The novel is more like a first draft and lacks polish in many places, which greatly affects the perception. Moreover, the behavior of many characters does not conform to logic and human nature (it is understandable that this varies from person to person), and there are some tears caused by the imperfection of the novel setting. Sense, and other people in the comment area also mentioned that the protagonist actually doesn't do much, and really doesn't do much. There are also a lot of protagonist auras and plot killings. The protagonist is completely ignorant, which is actually unreasonable. A person who has played to level 90, even if there is no reasonable logical planning, at least some game rules and settings should be well understood, but in fact there is no Normally I think it should be three stars, but since the book is new, I give it 4 stars (The ps author has carefully polished it and filled in the loopholes. With certain operations, I feel that the upper limit is expected to be 9.5)

Why is the rating so low? I think it can be given high marks. The author's basic writing skills can be said to be rare and excellent in the online literature industry today. First, the logical advancement of the story has always existed. The transition between space and time will not be deliberately marked like a running account. It will be explained clearly and unknowingly. It will not feel like the whole world has been unified, but it has only been a few days. Secondly, the basic writing structure is complete, who did what and when, it is clear and clear, and you won't have the feeling that you didn't study well in elementary school. Third, there is no logical conflict in the author's choice of words and sentences, and they are both smooth and reasonable. As for the author's writing style, it is quite suitable for this subject matter. It is low-key and unobtrusive, but it has all the flashes that the protagonist should do. I guess it's your unassuming way of writing that makes people lose the feeling of being pretentious. Pretending is a hard requirement for Internet writers. I am willing to read your every word, but it is difficult for others to say.

There is no female protagonist, so what is Xie Qingqing's position?

The book is very good. First of all, the protagonist is not actually very smart, but what is more prominent is his calmness and keen intuition for crises, which is more realistic, because the more skilled the hunter is, the calmer and keener he is, so even if the protagonist does not appear to be very smart, it is more realistic. I hope the author will not over-deify him in the later period and grasp the rhythm of a skilled hunter so that he will always be more like a human being. Secondly, the world view is also good. Regardless of the players or participants, the changes in the world, the short-term tenderness, etc., From the beginning to the end, it makes me feel that there is a pair of big hands controlling destiny everywhere, like a huge lie and deception. Maybe the protagonist always knew this Then survival is due to charity, so there is no need to say more about destruction! In this way, the strong will surely resist Heaven [smile]

The writing is quite good. Although the setting of "courtyard" where you will return to a certain place after completing the plot is quite common, this mixed setting of being both a "player" and a "character" is still very interesting. These "scripts" are all based on experience and brains. If the author hadn't prepared the entire outline in advance The concept is good, or the writing is very good, and the logic can be wrapped around without using props. So far, the level of the text has not been a problem at all for Bibi's popularity. I really like the protagonist's way of dealing with things, and the friends around him are also very good. I hope I can be merciful and keep a few. For me, it is a good read. I hope I can read the whole ending. There are very few such subjects. Thank you very much for giving me books to read.

It's nice to watch, the graphics are strong, the tension is OK, the world view and settings are big and novel, and the relationship between Qingqing and Qingqing is indeed a bit fast, but I think the incomprehension of Li Fu mentioned by other comments is normal, because it is a team game, and if the compound itself is led by someone, it is OK for such people to appear in the first five games. I think it's very reasonable. The only drawback is that some parts of the protagonist's reasoning are not very logical. There is also a problem here with the third son of the ship who commits suicide and rebels. But this is a problem that many decryption novels are difficult to solve. But for the atmosphere and tension, as well as the world view and setting, I think you can spend some time and give it a try. If you can't stand it, I'll talk about it.

It's great, the copy is thoughtful and the plot is vivid and touching. Very well written. Especially the connection between copies is relatively good. There is no long series of abrupt insertions like other books. I still quite like this. I hope that the relationship between men and women will not develop too much in the future. Otherwise you might get cold. After all, Tomato book friends don't like emotional dramas very much. Good looking (*/∇＼*)

It's not a loss to invest in. As for whether or not there is a female protagonist, I don't care. She is young and not brainless, and her actions are sloppy. The most important thing is that she has a clueless protagonist at the beginning. Whether it is true or not is not important. Besides, the writing is really good.

I have read 50 chapters and it is very attractive so far. For me, who has read dozens of horror books, the setting is very novel. The rhythm of the story is well grasped and the "front" of the story is not stretched too long. The plot is not very abrupt. Sure enough, if you search for many books, you can still find good books. I hope the author will not abandon the book. I am willing to spend money to read it.

I read the latest chapter in one go. To be honest, first of all, this book is worth reading. There are no logical flaws and the plot is quite exciting. The author's writing and polishing have slight flaws. Some parts may make you confused. For example, the high-star character was drawn out for the first time and then was imprisoned by the housekeeper for resisting the rules of the compound. Killing, this part is written slightly vaguely, but it is not a big problem. However, in the second book later, when the protagonist was running away with two other teammates, he suddenly mentioned that because of killing this character, the compound was raised to level 4, so the protagonist gained a certain amount of physical strength. This was not mentioned at all in the previous article. There aren't many places with small details like this, but there are a few. I am quite picky when it comes to reading books. This book is indeed worth reading. I hope everyone can read it and support it. Come on, the author [ Eat Melon ] [ Eat Melon ]

It's pretty good. The perspective of players controlling things from the outside really stood out to me. I really like this type of book. The rating is probably because of the new book. It should slowly increase.

The overall story is okay, but it's not an invincible novel. The relationship I described to Xie Qingqing felt so good that I almost thought it was not without cp. But overall it's okay, I hope the author can work harder. These stories are quite interesting.

I really like the character of the protagonist; I really like the weird feeling of the dungeon, although I feel like some of the dungeon content made me confused (maybe I didn't read it carefully); I like the setting of the protagonist's plug-in (although the system can't see its use yet). Then, the teacher can write more about the interaction between the protagonist and other compounds. In the world of the courtyard, there was a recent invasion of dummies, and then the protagonist, with three strokes, five divisions and two, rescued the surviving people in the yard and ran away together. If the teacher feels that it is not in line with his own ideas, forget it, I will not comment. Anyway, I am very happy to see it [Love] [Love] [Love]

The dungeon is very exciting, but I have a small opinion. It feels like the main line has never been clear. It would be better if readers can go to various dungeons with expectations for the main line. It feels a bit slow now.

The last time I read something this good was when I was in junior high school and was crazy about the horror novel No. 1. The novel Chasing Chasing was removed from the shelves due to rectification. Sure enough, it still can't kill the excitement of watching the weirdness. It's because the threading was not done well in the early stage, and the note in the pocket was not explained clearly. Will the male protagonist still be able to control his compound in the future? It really has the kind of ancient horror flavor from the past. Come on, author, you just write what you write, and we readers have to think more. The authors I followed last time were all famous, got married, and had children. I believe you can become the next great talent!

The plot is compact and the setting is novel. It's a pity that it won't be updated... The author! Come back!

First of all, as a new author, the writing is great! ! Secondly, the story is continuous and compact. Although there are still shortcomings, I think it is expected to become a new book and one of Tomato's excellent works. Give it five stars

The setting is a bit like a Korean comic pick me up, and the writing is quite touching_(:з∠)_

It's really tiring to watch and rape you every day. I want you to stay with me all day long and not to leave my sight. I want to know what you did, who you talked to, whether the other person was a man or a woman, and what you said. Have you thought about me, how many times have you thought about me, what have you thought about, and what are you thinking about now? You have to tell me, my dear, I know you should be free, but you know, I can't live without you. You are mine

Read slowly and carefully. You may not be able to understand this guy's book at a glance. The plot jumps very quickly and the writing is concise. It is undeniable that it is a very good work. The author still has a lot of room for growth. The more he writes, the better. I am afraid that the follow-up will not be finished.

It's so beautiful, the atmosphere is created very well, I love it! ! !

The world view setting is very novel, and the protagonist is well established. However, the rhythm of the plot is too slow, and the updates are slow, making the book chasing experience very unfriendly. The traffic of this book cannot match its quality, and I doubt the author can continue to update it for a long time. . .

Very good. So far, I rarely read books of this type, but this one is really fascinating. I am looking forward to whether the protagonist will return to reality in the later period, or the confrontation with the person behind the game. Please update the author more, and I will become a loyal fan!

It's okay, it can be considered a masterpiece among Tomato Ghost Escape [Note]

The subject matter is very novel, but the content is still a bit lacking. Come on, author. The author can practice characterization and content control

It's very well written. The low score now is probably because I just started writing the previous book. Trust me, read it and you won't be disappointed.

It's been a long time since I read Guishe Shuhuang, and I haven't been able to find a good book. I feel good about this one. I've been reading it for two days. [Sending my heart to you] Come on, come on