Rule Horror: Who Is the Strange One?

I read more than a dozen chapters and found a problem. It just lacks a transition point to connect the plot. Example: The change of personal perspective is too abrupt. This is to try to use the same person, push the plot forward, have a suitable plot link transition point, and then switch the perspective, for example: use the God's perspective to describe it at the beginning, connect the transition point through a plot such as falling into a dream, switch to the second person perspective, then connect the transition point through the plot of waking up, and switch back to the God's perspective (or other personal perspective) I watched the previous plot, and sometimes it suddenly switched from "Su Luo" to "you" and "me", which made me feel very uncomfortable. If you are proficient in using the previous method, you can try these two again: linking through foreshadowing (psychological transformation) / pushing and pulling the plot transition point back Linking through foreshadowing + psychological transformation (using the protagonist's name directly): Su Luo stared at the woman in front of him, but she only sighed leisurely, sounding very helpless, "I... You go and look at the moon with your peripheral vision..." "Pfft" The knife pierced Su Luo's shoulder, and the knife holder was the woman in the alley, tearing The pain tortured Su Luo, but now her mind was surprisingly clear. "She seems to have changed! She transformed from an NPC to a weird one! When she was in the alley! When he sighed! 'I...' What did she want to say at that time?" The soul suddenly opened up. This was not a dead end. I still had a chance. I grabbed the woman's hand and pulled out the knife... (I am not very proficient in using these two, but if I am proficient in using this one, the effect will be great) Move the plot transition point back: End of chapter one. Su Luo's mind went blank, but her body instinctively avoided it. It was the woman in the alley who slashed at her. Chapter two begins. I felt dizzy, and I thought about everything in the past. I watched myself hide in a corner and cry alone after being scratched. I watched myself grow up, feeling despair, resentment, and unwillingness. It seemed that it all meant nothing to me. It was a pity. I can only move forward aimlessly. Looking at the abyss in front of me, I closed my eyes and leaned forward... End of Chapter Two. But I want to live. I still have a lot of things to do. After Su Luo witnessed his memories, a strong will to survive erupted. Su Luo got up from the ground and quickly thought of a plan of action. (This expression is a bit difficult, use it with caution) The basic framework of the plot is okay, but the description of the plot is too bland, there are no ups and downs, the description is not too tense, and it does not make people relax immediately. The writing needs some work. The protagonist's talent setting is okay, but the dungeon selection is not novel enough, mainly because the description is too bland. If you have extra time, try to write/read short stories to practice your writing skills. I wish the author will get better and better. You are popular and I am an old fan [blowing kiss]