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Reader comments
Judging from the existing updates, the character settings and outline are very good, but the plot arrangement is not rigorous and too hasty. The protagonist joins the Shadow Pavilion inexplicably at the beginning. The mysterious man accepts the protagonist inexplicably. There is no written reason why he must accept the protagonist. What are the highlights of the protagonist? What is his personality? Is he cowardly or murderous? It seems very bland. And why should the little maid be so respectful to the protagonist? Doesn't she know anything or has some agenda? The first cannon fodder seems too stupid. The maid is already respectful to the protagonist, but she still dares to provoke him? This is very confusing. I hope you can see my suggestion and change it, and it will definitely be outstanding [send my heart][send my heart][send my heart]
Judging from the existing updates, the character settings and outline are very good, but the plot arrangement is not rigorous and too hasty. The protagonist joins the Shadow Pavilion inexplicably at the beginning. The mysterious man accepts the protagonist inexplicably. There is no written reason why he must accept the protagonist. What are the highlights of the protagonist? What is his personality? Is he cowardly or murderous? It seems very bland. And why should the little maid be so respectful to the protagonist? Doesn't she know anything or has some agenda? The first cannon fodder seems too stupid. The maid is already respectful to the protagonist, but she still dares to provoke him? This is very confusing. I hope you can see my suggestion and change it, and it will definitely be outstanding [send my heart][send my heart][send my heart]