A Desperate Start! Save the Witch and Become a Commander!

There are a lot of things to complain about, but let me tell you in advance that I think it's still very interesting. I feel that the plot moves forward a little too fast. The fatal crises can indeed arouse the readers' emotions, but it is a bit too compact. When the fatal crises come one after another, and then the passionate confession of life and death comes just after the end, it will be really numb. While the plot advances too fast, the progress of the protagonist group does not seem to keep up. The male protagonist seems to have been on the road of being educated and educated, and he likes to rush alone after being ambushed. Villain creation: To be honest, just by looking at the introduction and opening content, you might think that the enemy will be the Zerg, but in fact, the most significant presence of the Zerg is the Knight level at the beginning, and everything else has a sense of déjà vu. Crisis often comes from within. For a world where humans are killed to the point where only survivors can be said to be the only ones left, it can only be said that humans are a bit abstract. They keep shouting about the pressure of the Zerg, and then continue the daily civil war. In the end, the shortcomings are obvious, but I really enjoyed watching it, so I am willing to give it five stars, hoping it will be better.

Rare, 99% rare, Let the children solve the adults' problems, and the old man's decision will let the young people die. A very classic world view of Japanese film and television from the last century, a very classic male protagonist This is not a cool article, but if you are the audience in this regard, then this is a cool article for you.

It's really well written, with Japanese manga style and A-level style, apocalyptic style and witch. If you insist on writing it, it will be a very successful manga adaptation if you can use the novel to change the manga. It's not that this chapter is not written a lot, it can be read in about two hours on average. If I think it would be a bit difficult to write or release it in China, as a lot of things would have to be deleted. If it were to be published abroad, it should be quite successful, but the power of capital is also quite strong. If you like the above style, you can come and watch it. It is still worth recommending. As a long time reader.

The subject matter is novel, but there is too little interaction with the witch. Can there be more love plots that make people feel warm? I am a cat, and I like to watch this kind of thing (ﾉ∇︎)

Medium large cup The advantages are clear, the combat writing is online, the plot logic is clear, and the subject matter is eye-catching. The shortcomings are currently mainly reflected in the atmosphere, as well as emotions and character modalities. An obvious example is the latest storm coming chapter. There is no sense of urgency of war. It is like a small-scale attack by a small wave of troops. It can even be said that there is no sense of oppression at all. The reason may be that the length arrangement does not take this into account, but the effect is indeed unsatisfactory. I can't tell you too many advantages, but I can clearly point out the shortcomings. On the contrary, it also shows that this work is indeed excellent in other aspects. I am looking forward to the follow-up chapters. Come on.

The author has an idea, and I feel that it has been borrowed from Gundam, A/Z, etc. If it can be written seriously and the ending is a happy ending, it will be a masterpiece. And since it is written like this, there must be multiple girls [laughing evilly], and no girls are allowed. It looks good [crying], the author shouldn't write it so harshly, okay [crying], my heart aches, it hurts so much that I don't want to read it.

It feels like a work that combines the national team, muv, and 86. The overall reading is pretty good. I look forward to updates.

It has a strong flavor of a drama, so there are quite a lot of plots within the drama. There are some toxic points throughout the text, but overall it's tolerable. The lack of baffling systems is a plus. The whole book is not brainless, but it is hard to say that it is brainy. It is in a superposition state, so don't delve too deeply into it.

There are few novels on Tomato that I can read every day. Although the writing style is still a little flawed, the author's conceived plot is so in line with my taste. Various elements are blended together. I haven't read such a good novel in a long time. I hope the author will keep writing this book.

It's a very good novel. It reminds me of beta and Tanya's War. It can be seen that the author is very careful. I hope that the update will not be interrupted and there will be 5600 chapters. Thank you to the author [Like][Like][Like][Like]

Leaving aside the male protagonist [laughs], the author's writing skills are still very strong. He uses fragmented narrative techniques and fragmented information to piece together a complete world view. The events and plots are also tightly arranged, and the climax comes one after another. It is similar to a spiritual cage. Leaving aside the male protagonist, the design images of the supporting characters are also quite full. Only this Japanese male protagonist abandons everything when he sees a girl. The fact that Wu brain is for your own good is poisonous, but it is acceptable. After all, I don't miss Japanese comics. , I can only say that the author's writing is awesome and he only arranged such a male protagonist [face covering]

It's good to read. I really like this kind of mecha novel set in World War II technology. The three mechas reminded me of a domestic animation called Unlimited Hunter Kaineng. When I recall my childhood, I like Gray the most. Unfortunately, it's definitely not the main palace. If possible, I hope the protagonist has more aristocratic etiquette and pride.

It is a very interesting novel. I can see the shadow of many works in this novel. The author has stitched the essence of these works with history, which can make readers feel more involved. As a person who likes to read historical works, this work allows me to see many acquaintances in history. I am also looking forward to what decisions these acquaintances will make in this work and what they will do. What is the ending? The various elements of this novel were stitched together, which made me fascinated. However, sometimes I felt that the narrative was a bit too fast, and many data and definitions were not analyzed in detail. However, these shortcomings cannot conceal the fact that this novel is a masterpiece. I hope the author can update it faster, write better and better, and there will be more and more readers. This is my favorite Tomato novel ever, bar none. Now the plot has advanced to a new node, and the characters and events that have occurred have prototypes in history and correspond to each other. If we follow historical development, will the final outcome still end with the collapse of the empire? This also makes me look forward to the subsequent development of the plot. However, the historical prototypes of some of the characters that appear are highly controversial. The doctrines they represent are extremely sensitive and incorrect in today's world. This is a cancer in the history of human development. How many people have lost their lives and freedom due to this wrong idea, and what price have we paid to fight against this wrong idea? These are bloody lessons and history that we cannot forget. I hope the author will think twice when writing and not write some wrong remarks or spread unfair ideas. I would like to emphasize again that I like this work very much, and I only want to make this comment in the hope that the work will get better and better, and not to make any principled mistakes. Finally, I hope that the author will make more money every day, get more readers, and update more and more.

I was searching for a novel with a plot in which the male protagonist serves as a commander or a support staff member to help a beautiful girl fight, and finally I found this book. After watching it for a while, I found that the writing and plot were surprisingly good. My only hope was that the witch's feelings for the protagonist would be more complex and profound, not just love and love.

Except for the fact that Gray confesses her love for the male protagonist at the beginning and then becomes pregnant with another man, which is a bit strange, the male protagonist's character is a bit fake and empty, and most of the highlights are given to the female characters. All OK.

It's really good. This kind of harem mecha style book, the author's writing style is also quite good. I like this type of book very much. I recommend it. Not much to say, the writing is top-notch, a masterpiece among witch novels. The only problem so far is that the pace is slow, the number of updates is too few, and the protagonist's personal strength is 0, which is too weak. I hope to strengthen the protagonist soon.

Point 1, the article, the overall idea, and the idea are well written, and the Witch of the Seven Deadly Sins is also very well written, but there is a serious sense of separation between the early and late stages, especially in the early stage. The author wants to write a sense of time flashback, but maybe because his own strength does not allow it, or maybe because I am more sensitive, I feel that this flashback is more abrupt. If you read it carefully, you will feel that the early part of this article is a bit inconsistent with the logic of normal people. Of course, if you think this article is about giving up your brain, then I can give you good ideas in the early stage. , And when I wrote about the appearance of the seven deadly sins in the later period, the feeling of powerlessness was very accurate, but I vaguely felt that this feeling was too desperate. At this time, highlighting the heroism of the protagonist seemed abrupt, more like a person saving a world. This feeling is rare in today's society. It should be a group of people saving a world, showing heroism too seriously. Of course, this is also a category. Normally, I think the emotional treatment of the article is more delicate. Although it is a harem article and a male porn article, I still think it is better in terms of emotion. Finally, the later stage has highlighted the all-or-nothing option. Why is there no such option as the world and the same life? In the later stage, it feels like someone is about to become an immortal. There is a feeling that is incompatible with technology such as the economy. Taken together, I The score for this is about 7.5 To 8 points. If the author can deal with the problem of combat power collapse in the later period, I think it is no problem to give it more than 8 points and less than 9 points. Okay, this is my feeling after reading the latest chapter. When it is finished, I will write it again and read it again. If you are offended, you can tell me, if you have any differences, you can tell me, civilize you and me, and build a better tomato together.

I like this type of novel very much. I have read novels by Bilan and Shaoqian before. I feel that the author can add more daily life of the protagonist and the witch, so that there is a main line and daily life, so that the novel will be more vivid. Moreover, you can also delete or modify the previously controversial parts. Is the Grey's part considered toxic? It's hard to say. None of the novels of the same type I have read before seem to have this problem. However, this novel is probably difficult to read for people who are pure party lovers and people with mental mysophobia. I feel that modifying or deleting it can leave more readers.

After reading the latest chapter, I found that several long paragraphs were too subjective, so I couldn't help but write my own comments. The author's plot control, character creation, and description of war scenes are not like a novice here at Tomato. In addition, regarding the settings of mechas, I also wanted to use the setting of biological mechas like EVA to write a novel. There is also a synchronization rate setting, and there is even a witch-like setting to achieve synchronization between humans and machines. It is great to see this kind of setting being written.

The writing style is top-notch among tomato novels. The description method is not as boring as other articles, and the wording does not make people feel dramatic. I personally love writing. If the description is not good, I won't even read it. But this article does a great job.

What can I say? The writing is really good. The storyline, characters, and the relationship between the girl are all in the style of Japanese comics. There are no surprises. I believe the author will make this novel better and better. If I really want to say it is a masterpiece, it is absolutely fine to give it 4 stars because I have very high requirements for the novel. But I believe that the author will maintain the quality and continue to optimize and improve. It will not be awarded 5 stars, and it may become a masterpiece of Tomato's mecha. Book friends, I will not reveal the plot. You really can't read it by yourself. It doesn't matter if I gave it to the wrong person. It's worth giving it five stars now, but there's definitely still a lot of progress to be made.

It's very powerful, very attractive, and worth reading. I have to say that the themes are indeed novel, mechas, girls, and empires. Although I have read a similar book in the past, this book really worked hard on the storyline and will not feel cliche. Come on, I look forward to finishing it.

It's a very interesting book, but except for the beginning when the mecha driven by the protagonist explodes, I feel that the protagonist doesn't have a strong performance later on. I hope the protagonist can be stronger [please update] [sending heartfelt messages]

It's a good article, you can read it, but you will always feel a little frustrated. The protagonist seems to have been making up his mind, and then he has been indecisive and being manipulated, and then made up his mind again, and then been indecisive again. The plot is reasonable, the emotional line is reasonable, the story line is more reasonable, and to be precise, the protagonist does not have any cheats, just like when I first wrote it, it was purely about luck and the mastermind behind the scenes.

It's a very good novel, and the reading experience is excellent. So far, I don't feel that it is toxic at all. The interaction with the girl really makes my aunt laugh. The background, promotion and military strength of the protagonist are also quite comfortable; however, the proportion of these two parts makes it feel a bit mediocre. Overall, for me, it is a top-notch daily novel + a better military novel, very beautiful + relaxing? .

The writing is more delicate and the writing style is very good. The content is a bit like MUV. I haven't seen anything special about the male protagonist yet, so it's not that exciting. However, the plot is getting better and needs to be strengthened.

The plot description is good, and the sense of substitution is strong. It seems to be based on World War II, with elements of mechas and insect swarms added. However, I don't know much about the history of World War II, so some of the names don't match up. This is my personal reason. There are several other suggestions: 1. If World War II is used as the background, the characters can be written as round figures, which are complex and changeable rather than single. 2. I feel that some of the psychological and linguistic descriptions of the characters are not rigorous and realistic enough, and there are a few inconsistencies. I hope they can be adjusted. 3. If possible, AI can be used to generate some big scenes or character pictures. One page per chapter will be enough, I think. (Learn from my machine girls who are all world-class, even though they were fucked) 4. There is also the emotional problem of the protagonist. Just like the emperor can favor but not love his concubines, although he and the witch are life-and-death colleagues, it is best to keep a good distance. I think the awakening of the heroine's witch bloodline is a foreshadowing, let's see what happens later. 5. We can put some effort into our worldview, which is not limited to Europe. The above are my personal suggestions, and the author will handle them at his discretion. After all, I have no experience.

The setting of this book is very novel. It is a rare new setting among the books I have read. It does not follow the setting of the previous books about witches (I am not very experienced, please forgive me if there are any mistakes). Instead, it creatively combines witches and mecha science fiction, and tells the story of the protagonist pursuing the goal of equality, unity, cooperation and harmony between humans and witches. At the same time, the invasion of the Zerg will give me a faint sense of doomsday compactness, which makes people want to stop. The content of this book has ups and downs, and the clues are complete. Most of the early doubts can be answered later, so it is relatively complete in structure. In addition, the protagonist's attitude towards the witch is truly good. His attitude towards the witch and his loyalty to humans are impeccable, so I think he is a person who dares to fight against the dogmatic world. From this point of view, I think the author really brought this protagonist to life. In the end, the protagonist's luck is really too much. I hope the author can give them a happy ending in the end (please, I don't want to take the knife)

It's a very good book, and the subject matter is very suitable for me [like]. I think the most exciting thing for me is that the character arcs are captured very well. It can not only tell the story of the heroines' life experiences and settings well, but also reflect the heroines' "growth" and "bond with the male protagonists." The most important thing is that the story can return to the very critical point of "the bond between the female protagonists and the male protagonist", capturing the essence of ML. [Like] This is one of the rare books I have read that captures the character arcs very well.

The subject matter is very good, but unfortunately the actual content is different from what I thought. What I want to see is a story where humans unite to fight against the Zerg, and the protagonist saves the witch and talks about love. But the Zerg in this book are basically just a background, mainly describing the internal fighting among humans.