Blue Archive: Is Takanashi Hoshino in My House?

What does this book say? Recommended to watch without thinking The early stage seems very bad. If the author has time, he must make some changes in the early stage, because it is easy to persuade him to give up. The early stage is almost not a novel, but a script. It is just a person saying something and adding a sentence, but the rest is not bad. First of all, about the subject matter. In fact, I initially thought that your subject matter was about a BA character traveling into the real world. I think this subject matter is very new, but then you become a character who travels back to BA, which is actually not bad, but not very good either. However, in terms of content, your transition is very blunt, that is, the events that happened before and after are very sudden, and the character's attitude is also very strange. In fact, it is quite that, so I recommend reading it without thinking. Then about the writing style. Well, as I said before, your writing style actually needs to be practiced. You only have language description and action description. I couldn't stand it in the middle. I dug out the environment description and only found two short ones. The psychological description, demeanor and appearance were also very poor. This needs to be strengthened later, and the repetition of your characters and the abuse of function words are very bad. Finally, in terms of character image, in fact, the portrayal of characters is okay, at least not as disgusting as some writing styles. As for other people, in fact, as long as the description of the writing style enhances the character image, it will be fine, unless you have problems with your three views. Finally, if you want to talk and ask me if there is anything you want to change, you can also ask directly and I will answer it. The above is my comment, okay (๑°3°๑) I quit for about a few months, but I didn't expect the writing to be so good when I came back. If you had changed it before, your book would be considered a very good one (✪▽✪) First of all, your writing style has been greatly improved, especially the part about drinking in the Northern Dynasties. You use detailed descriptions and environmental descriptions to highlight the actions of the characters. It is similar to the part in Lao She's "Camel Xiangzi", and it is quite powerful. But there are still some points to pay attention to. It is good to segment the language when describing it, but be careful not to divide it into too many segments. Try to combine them as whole as possible. You must have the awareness of a small paragraph and a large paragraph. It cannot always be a small paragraph, nor can it always be a large paragraph. In other words, you still need to be aware of the description of demeanor and appearance. Because I have read it all before and forgot a little bit, I will refer to what you said later. When going out for a drink, several people's clothes can be described in more detail. I did not see a more prominent description of appearance. The above is my evaluation, okay (⑉°з°)-♡

It's very nice, and the style of writing makes me feel friendly even though this essay only scored half points (20.5/40) (Why did I pass 24 in the essay!!!) The following is my personal evaluation (even though I'm not good at writing), it's purely subjective and I only want to comment lightly. Those who have read the original plot in the early stages of this book (1-36) may feel that it is a bit long-winded (?) The character portrayal is not bad, and the image could be strengthened (っ- ‸ - ς) In the later period (37-now), I feel very good. There is a feeling that people have been replaced, but the transitions are a bit stiff (ﾟ⊿ﾟ)ﾂ(To be honest, the author has gone crazy in 68-69, how did Xingchen become the boss!!!) All in all, this is a well-written book and highly recommended. Finally, I hope the author can be happy every day and have smooth studies ヾ(≧∪≦*)ノ

It's awesome. At first, you may think that some plots are too childish, but after reading it, it is better to say that it is a bit of childlike innocence that still exists in the adult world, which is very touching. Moreover, the divisions and integrations in the story are exciting, and the three parallel lines are based on the plot development of the Blue Files. The daily life of Hoshino and I is mixed in to avoid the content being empty. The style is fresh and a little sweet, but not overly sweet.

The author is too vain, he only wrote 14 chapters 🤦

This is also very interesting, okay. I, King Sasuke, am also taking Xokang.

It's more everyday, lighthearted and funny, no need to use your brain, it's worth a try

Hoshino is cute, love her

Chef Hoshino is already laughing so hard

You can read this book every day. If you are tired, you can read this book to relax.

I'd say it's good, I'd say it's not bad. It's not very attractive. It's suitable to read it all at once, because you might forget this book, but it's a new book after all. I would like to encourage you 👍👍👍