[Two male protagonists + modern urban superpowers + system + slice attack]
Huo Ci woke up one by one and found that he had traveled to the game world. At first, he just wanted to become stronger and stronger, but as he became stronger and stronger, he was inexplicably faced with a confession from his good brother... Huo Ci was about to cry without tears.
Slicing Attack
Reader comments
This article is okay, the plot is pretty good^ω^
The little cannon fodder in the early stage is okay. He has a good little character look, but he is not particularly brainless. The two protagonists in the early stage are both good. The warm feeling has a particularly strong atmosphere. In my mind, I like it very much. [Eat melon][laugh]
I have only read 20 chapters now, but I feel that this article still has some small shortcomings. [Salute] I can feel that the author wants to write this article well, but I feel that these words are all piled together. It seems to be well written, but they are too complicated, especially the appearance of the characters and the scenes. There are many words, and the plot presence is not very strong. Those words look very prosperous, and they often describe the appearance of the characters, and then use some metaphors, such as his skin is like white-fat goat jade, etc., And the scene. These descriptions are too detailed. In fact, they can be simpler and strengthen the plot. Otherwise, just like in Shuiwen, the sense of the plot will be very low [stunned]
But I still like this article very much. I imagine it is very warm in my mind, and then I look forward to the subsequent development of the protagonist [shy] If the writing is better, I will follow up and change it to five stars. If not, then I will quietly quit [sending my heart]
I feel that the author is very good at Chinese language. I prefer to write about daily life. The whole article is very detailed and delicate. Although the word count is like trying to make up for it [I understand], I think it is okay overall. It is slow-paced, but the description of the battle is very enjoyable. I want to have superpowers to fight. The emotional line It's slow, I recommend the main story, it's a good read, the mental power is still too supermodel [like] Recommended to read, after all, superpowers are rare, if you want a fast pace, you can just read the main story, not reading daily will not affect the reading, the author gives a big boost [blowing kiss].
However, I would like to make a small comment. Can you add a few lines in the first few chapters about the protagonist trying to save his parents but still failing? Otherwise, knowing the plot and not preparing for it would not be in line with the protagonist's character. The protagonist is kind and full of energy. I think he will never give up on his parents, so he shouldn't just pass it by. It will feel weird. [Love][love][love]
The author's writing is really good. I like it very much. Although the daily content is a bit too much, I hope I still like it! I hope the author's books will become more popular and his writing will become better and better. I hope the author will keep updating! Come on!
I want Shura Field, but then the whole article feels that it tends to be bland. I am not the kind of person who gets jealous all the time, but it is really bland, like a more casual article.
It can be seen that the author wants to create a world, but I feel that the plot is too oriented towards daily life. It could be more focused on combat. After reading more than 50 chapters, there is only one main character attack. But wasn't the copy skill detected at the beginning? Logically speaking, there should be official data. Why did it later become a mental power? Others can't find out that he has dual powers by searching for it? Everything else is fine, it has advantages and disadvantages, and there is room for improvement.
This is the first time I write a serious book review and I'll give it a whirl><There will be spoilers. This article is actually good but very few people read it.
(Demining: The protagonist has never kissed once until the finale, Shimizu Fumi) (In the ending, it seems that the protagonist and Gao eloped (it is not clear whether they are together) (Remind me that the author should have changed the protagonist's name, but there are some places that have not been changed to the point where there will be name errors) There are very few emotional lines, and it feels like it's written like a brotherhood. I don't know if the ending is complete. If possible, it would be nice to add some extras. Basically, the plot is a bit intimate from time to time, although there is no kiss. The ending is a bit rushed. In the early stage, the protagonist eats, sleeps, and wakes up to eat. In the mid-term, it is about the protagonist's growth and then the transition to participating in the competition three years later. Then, after the unexpected ending, I joined the team that attacked the slice and then solved the problem. But I didn't see who Queen Mu was (although it's possible that the last person in the slice is the first pollutant on the earth (?)) It would be better if the words were divided into paragraphs. The ending is that the protagonist has a hidden identity and then elopes with the attacker. This Qingshui novel makes my dull life even more dull. I feel like I can darken the text and check Xiao Ci's academic qualifications🌚😏
The summary is that it's okay, but there is room for improvement. It would be great if I could write a side story to fill in the gaps TT
Oh, yes, there is also the fact that although the protagonist has two powers, the other one is mentioned earlier and the protagonist also has a book in his mind to record the powers. Although I explained that I couldn't let Wen Yue know about it, I knew I wanted to see the protagonist show off his second power. It's very satisfying to think about how others were shocked () It's a pity that I didn't see the protagonist use the second power in the finale. I was still thinking that the protagonist would use the replica power for a while before the finale () It felt like the author forgot that the protagonist had another power later on (?) It's also possible that I skipped it a little too quickly.
Can the author update a hundred chapters a day? [Laughing evilly] It feels great. Why is there no one urging me to update it [crying] I really want to read it [note]
It feels like the trivial aspects of daily life can be omitted. I hope the plot pace can be faster.
Good luck! I really like the characters depicted by the author. Wen Yue is currently a bit darkened. I look forward to the wallpaper love in the future [laughing] I have seen more than 80 pictures so far and I really like the plot of Longling Village. In short, please do it author, this is a good book [love]
Not bad, come on, big brother! !
I hope I can take care of some small things and it's really beautiful! ! !
I was short of books and finally found what I wanted to read [crying]
Looks good! Finally read the novel I love! The author's writing style is very delicate and the characters are well created! [Blowing kiss][blowing kiss]
It is very reasonable in daily life. The article is designed to attract people with emotional lines, which can be seen in the title.
It's really exciting to see now, I'm looking forward to it ^ω^[][][]
It's very good and looks good. Kudos to the author!
The interaction between the protagonists is awesome, and the superpowers are also very powerful. The author works hard to update it. It is one of my favorite books.
It's so beautiful. I love watching it.
A good bedtime essay つ♡⊂
I've read Chapter 50 and thought of a straight man joke [laugh][laugh][laugh][laugh][admiration] It's so sweet to me
It's great. Love the author. I'm looking forward to Shura Field.
It can be your favorite supernatural theme, it looks great!
It's so good to watch, I finished reading it in one sitting! The author will update soon! [Adoration][Adoration][Blowing kiss][Blowing kiss]
The emotional line is very delicate. The protagonist has a cheerful personality, neither arrogant nor impetuous, neither humble nor overbearing. He gets along well with his friends. There is no big cheat.
This article is okay, the plot is pretty good^ω^ The little cannon fodder in the early stage is okay. He has a good little character look, but he is not particularly brainless. The two protagonists in the early stage are both good. The warm feeling has a particularly strong atmosphere. In my mind, I like it very much. [Eat melon][laugh] I have only read 20 chapters now, but I feel that this article still has some small shortcomings. [Salute] I can feel that the author wants to write this article well, but I feel that these words are all piled together. It seems to be well written, but they are too complicated, especially the appearance of the characters and the scenes. There are many words, and the plot presence is not very strong. Those words look very prosperous, and they often describe the appearance of the characters, and then use some metaphors, such as his skin is like white-fat goat jade, etc., And the scene. These descriptions are too detailed. In fact, they can be simpler and strengthen the plot. Otherwise, just like in Shuiwen, the sense of the plot will be very low [stunned] But I still like this article very much. I imagine it is very warm in my mind, and then I look forward to the subsequent development of the protagonist [shy] If the writing is better, I will follow up and change it to five stars. If not, then I will quietly quit [sending my heart]
I feel that the author is very good at Chinese language. I prefer to write about daily life. The whole article is very detailed and delicate. Although the word count is like trying to make up for it [I understand], I think it is okay overall. It is slow-paced, but the description of the battle is very enjoyable. I want to have superpowers to fight. The emotional line It's slow, I recommend the main story, it's a good read, the mental power is still too supermodel [like] Recommended to read, after all, superpowers are rare, if you want a fast pace, you can just read the main story, not reading daily will not affect the reading, the author gives a big boost [blowing kiss]. However, I would like to make a small comment. Can you add a few lines in the first few chapters about the protagonist trying to save his parents but still failing? Otherwise, knowing the plot and not preparing for it would not be in line with the protagonist's character. The protagonist is kind and full of energy. I think he will never give up on his parents, so he shouldn't just pass it by. It will feel weird. [Love][love][love]
The author's writing is really good. I like it very much. Although the daily content is a bit too much, I hope I still like it! I hope the author's books will become more popular and his writing will become better and better. I hope the author will keep updating! Come on!
I want Shura Field, but then the whole article feels that it tends to be bland. I am not the kind of person who gets jealous all the time, but it is really bland, like a more casual article.
It can be seen that the author wants to create a world, but I feel that the plot is too oriented towards daily life. It could be more focused on combat. After reading more than 50 chapters, there is only one main character attack. But wasn't the copy skill detected at the beginning? Logically speaking, there should be official data. Why did it later become a mental power? Others can't find out that he has dual powers by searching for it? Everything else is fine, it has advantages and disadvantages, and there is room for improvement.
This is the first time I write a serious book review and I'll give it a whirl><There will be spoilers. This article is actually good but very few people read it. (Demining: The protagonist has never kissed once until the finale, Shimizu Fumi) (In the ending, it seems that the protagonist and Gao eloped (it is not clear whether they are together) (Remind me that the author should have changed the protagonist's name, but there are some places that have not been changed to the point where there will be name errors) There are very few emotional lines, and it feels like it's written like a brotherhood. I don't know if the ending is complete. If possible, it would be nice to add some extras. Basically, the plot is a bit intimate from time to time, although there is no kiss. The ending is a bit rushed. In the early stage, the protagonist eats, sleeps, and wakes up to eat. In the mid-term, it is about the protagonist's growth and then the transition to participating in the competition three years later. Then, after the unexpected ending, I joined the team that attacked the slice and then solved the problem. But I didn't see who Queen Mu was (although it's possible that the last person in the slice is the first pollutant on the earth (?)) It would be better if the words were divided into paragraphs. The ending is that the protagonist has a hidden identity and then elopes with the attacker. This Qingshui novel makes my dull life even more dull. I feel like I can darken the text and check Xiao Ci's academic qualifications🌚😏 The summary is that it's okay, but there is room for improvement. It would be great if I could write a side story to fill in the gaps TT Oh, yes, there is also the fact that although the protagonist has two powers, the other one is mentioned earlier and the protagonist also has a book in his mind to record the powers. Although I explained that I couldn't let Wen Yue know about it, I knew I wanted to see the protagonist show off his second power. It's very satisfying to think about how others were shocked () It's a pity that I didn't see the protagonist use the second power in the finale. I was still thinking that the protagonist would use the replica power for a while before the finale () It felt like the author forgot that the protagonist had another power later on (?) It's also possible that I skipped it a little too quickly.
Can the author update a hundred chapters a day? [Laughing evilly] It feels great. Why is there no one urging me to update it [crying] I really want to read it [note]
It feels like the trivial aspects of daily life can be omitted. I hope the plot pace can be faster.
Good luck! I really like the characters depicted by the author. Wen Yue is currently a bit darkened. I look forward to the wallpaper love in the future [laughing] I have seen more than 80 pictures so far and I really like the plot of Longling Village. In short, please do it author, this is a good book [love]
Not bad, come on, big brother! !
I hope I can take care of some small things and it's really beautiful! ! !
I was short of books and finally found what I wanted to read [crying]
Looks good! Finally read the novel I love! The author's writing style is very delicate and the characters are well created! [Blowing kiss][blowing kiss]
It is very reasonable in daily life. The article is designed to attract people with emotional lines, which can be seen in the title.
It's really exciting to see now, I'm looking forward to it ^ω^[][][]
It's very good and looks good. Kudos to the author!
The interaction between the protagonists is awesome, and the superpowers are also very powerful. The author works hard to update it. It is one of my favorite books.
It's so beautiful. I love watching it.
A good bedtime essay つ♡⊂
I've read Chapter 50 and thought of a straight man joke [laugh][laugh][laugh][laugh][admiration] It's so sweet to me
It's great. Love the author. I'm looking forward to Shura Field.
It can be your favorite supernatural theme, it looks great!
It's so good to watch, I finished reading it in one sitting! The author will update soon! [Adoration][Adoration][Blowing kiss][Blowing kiss]
The emotional line is very delicate. The protagonist has a cheerful personality, neither arrogant nor impetuous, neither humble nor overbearing. He gets along well with his friends. There is no big cheat.