Shock! I Am Also the Heroine Bai Yueguang

I think you can mark "micro-group portraits" and "main plot" in the introduction. This book is indeed very good-looking, with delicate emotions and well-described characters. It's just that the supporting characters are described too much, and the other protagonist only appears for a while, so it is better to mark "micro-group portraits", otherwise it will make some people feel uncomfortable. I feel like I have been tricked into it. The perspective of the two protagonists switches, but they mainly describe what the other encounters to promote the plot. There are very few encounters between the two, and there is too little emotional line (it can be said that there is no one at this stage), so it can be marked as "main plot". I feel that the author is very good at short stories, and the description of detective stories is also good. Later, I can start with fast-travel or thriller games. I feel it will be very good. I'm looking forward to the author's story. Is there a hint of Bai Yueguang who is really Weng? It's hard to tell, and it feels a bit far-fetched. According to the author's description of Weng's attitude towards Xu and what happened between them, Xu is at best a glimmer of light, and Bai Yueguang is definitely not included (because on the one hand, the author describes Weng wanting to end the relationship with the original male protagonists because he doesn't want to see disgust in Xu's eyes, but on the other hand, he does not describe Weng taking any action against Xu, and Xu almost disappears from Weng's perspective. Xu has always taken the initiative to contact Weng from Xu's perspective, so it feels like It's a bit far-fetched and contradictory, and I can't see the "white moonlight" state between Weng and Xu. It feels like he wants to end the relationship as if he is maintaining his character. ), And why Weng agreed to be girlfriends with the original male protagonists. I hope the author can explain it well in the subsequent plot. If it is because of resources, I don't see how those people are helpful to Xu. It feels like they are forcing Xu to have a boyfriend-girlfriend relationship with them in order to get involved. I hope the author can write down the reasons later to fill in the pit.

This work uses an unconventional book-traveling rescue plot setting. What is unique about it is that it does not deliberately emphasize the "favorability" mechanism or forcefully advance the emotional line. Emotional development is natural and smooth, character relationships gradually deepen through daily contact and shared experiences, plot logic always dominates, and emotional lines are more like natural by-products. This approach makes the story more realistic and avoids the mechanical feel of common systematic writing. However, the branch line "Qinghe's drama script" interspersed in the work is slightly abrupt. If the "micro-group portrait" content shown in the label is weakly related to the main line, it will easily interrupt the reading rhythm. When I read it for the first time, I was paused by the sudden insertion of chapters in the script - especially when readers are expecting "post-post" interactions. Turning to a stand-alone script can make people feel disconnected, and even misjudge the slow progress of the story. In terms of character creation, Qinghe's story line is full and dramatic, and the CP's interactions are also stable and sweet. But Xu Qiu, one of the core characters, has a slightly flat image. Her overly perfect "emotional stability" trait lacks sufficient foundation, which makes people curious: Why can she always remain rational? If her growth experience or inner conflicts could be a little more detailed, the character would be more three-dimensional. Overall, the work's flaws outweigh its flaws. The natural emotional progression, solid plot structure, and group portrait tension of the branch lines all show unique appeal. If the branch line connection method can be optimized and the protagonist's characterization can be deepened, the reading experience will be even better.

Viewpoint: ①The writing is passable, has good potential, and is worth reading. ②Not romance-oriented but plot-oriented. ③The perspective of the non-protagonist is more like a group portrait, with many branch lines, rich descriptions, and strong visibility (the criminal detective case line of campus bullying, the entertainment circle line, the supporting character racing story line, the emotional entanglement line between the original heroine and the original male lead, etc.), But the specific main line cannot be distinguished. ④The heroine surnamed Xu has little description, unclear portrayal, and is dispensable. - Suggestions (not criticism, just my personal understanding of the article): ① Change the article title and introduction tag, and add words such as "plot direction", "group portrait" and "criminal investigation reasoning" to lock in the audience. The current title will only attract people who want to see the love line of "the time-traveling heroine redeems the original heroine, who has already secretly liked the time-traveling heroine". ②Clear the specific main line and main narrative perspective. The story line is too scattered, and the narrative perspective switches too quickly and it is easy to become confused.

I started reading this novel yesterday. I feel that the heroine of White Moonlight, Xu Zhiqiu, also has a good character design. However, I feel that she has very few scenes so far. Most of them are about the heroine Weng Qinghe. Personally, I prefer Xu Zhiqiu. I still hope that the two heroines can have the same amount of scenes. In addition, there are relatively few emotional lines. I feel that the three men want and want but do not break up with Weng Qinghe, and then they can't forget Xu Zhiqiu! (Personal opinion, don't comment if you don't like it).

The writing is good, and the characters are described very delicately. However, the emotional line of the protagonist is too few. After reading 30 chapters, I have only met the protagonist a few times. Come on, author! [Blowing kiss]

The story is complete and the characters are full-bodied. The low rating should be due to too few people watching it. I am willing to give this work full marks. I like the characters of Xu Qiu, Xu Zhiqiu and Weng Qinghe very much. Xu Zhiqiu is the white moonlight of early death like the sun, Xu Qiu is the warm light of darkness, and Weng Qinghe is a tragic heroine with a strong core, bitterness and purpose. The collision of the three characters is just right. Weng's The theory of quantum entanglement love is really touching. The author is also very knowledgeable. I learned a lot. The geographical knowledge in the expedition was also very appropriate. He did not just focus on the plot. He gave Xu Qiu a much richer character as a doctor. The author really put his heart into it. This is what touched me the most about this book. Come on, author. The blessings given to the protagonist in the article also wish the author a safe and worry-free life.

Super nice. First of all, Xu Zhiqiu and Xu Qiu are really good and good people. [Crying] Xu Zhiqiu is worthy of being praised by many people. It is such a big explosion, a gentle explosion! Long mouth, invincible [admiration] [admiration] directly shows that I am not her, wait ☝️Then there is Xu Qiu, very good, saved Xiao Weng, really a very good person, the wish is to let the original owner come back, etc. Oh, oh, oh, it is so good, I don't know how to praise her. The only thing is that I haven't seen enough of Xiao Xu and Xiao Weng's daily life [Shy] [Shy] [Shy] I think the love part is less, not as exciting as Mrs. [Explore] [Explore] Finally! School bullying is shameful! Put an end to! [Laughing awkwardly]

Although it is a time-travel novel, the original person she wears is also a very good person, not some inexplicable scumbag. Even Zhiqiu survived in the end, and Xu Qiu also used her real body to be with Qinghe (if Zhiqiu really died, I might cry to death, after all, all three are very good This is the first time I have seen such a development. In the past, I have either used other people's bodies or brought my girlfriend back to my own world. It would be strange if I read it too much. The author's approach really made my eyes shine. And after reading the column, I found that it is actually the first book written by the author. The writing style is really good. I look forward to writing a new article [Love]

The rating is too low, but the writing is actually very good. The characters are full-bodied and three-dimensional, if it weren't for the system that spans time and space. It really can be read as a documentary novel. I think we can even make a movie out of it, reflecting the bullying problem and the impact of unfortunate childhood growth behind the glamorous characters, and having different effects on others, as if each real character came to life.

How can I say it's very good-looking? The best novel I've seen on Tomato is very detailed. I feel like it would be a hit in JJ. It's really good-looking. It has high-profile mission settings, including the system and the settings for the original heroine. It's amazing nb

The plot of the two heroines may be a bit sparse and mostly foreshadowing, but the details are well drawn and beautiful. More to come.

Very delicate and beautiful! It's more daily-oriented. The author's writing gives me a warm feeling. The writing is very good💥❤️🔥🔥❤️💥The plot and emotional lines are very smooth and flowing. I like this style of writing very much, and the character creation is also very good. From the way Xu Zhiqiu calls Officer Chen in the hospital bed and the tone of voice she uses when she comes back to chat with Weng Qinghe, we can see the specific differences between her and Xu Qiu. Xu Zhiqiu is a child who grew up in love, and his words naturally reveal his affection for the people around him and his own naughtiness. Xu Qiu is different. She has never experienced love or family affection. The lack of emotional experience makes her more calm and collected than Xu Zhiqiu. And so many geographical exploration experiences have made her face things calmly. As the author himself said, he is a mature personality who has experienced ups and downs, and is particularly charming. Weng Qinghe is also very good. Like her name, she is a very vital soul. After experiencing the pain of the truth being covered up and her friends leaving, she still insists on breaking out of her own world and trying to fight back. It is really amazing! It's also hard work for us, Qinghe, along the way🫳🫳Fortunately, the two of us met each other in the end, and it lasted forever! The fly in the ointment are some details, such as gender-related titles and pronouns: 1. From the unpopular "Yao Mei" to the "Chu Ye" who is the underdog of the protagonist group and represents the erudition and power (Yao Mei will not go into more details, but why is Chu Yao regarded as a male title as soon as he shows his ability, a representative of male ≠ power, which is actually a gender stereotype) 2. The pronouns of System and Nuomi are both "he" (I personally think both should use "it", after all, there is no clear gender, it is "it", "he" is used as a neuter pronoun and a male pronoun at the same time, it is inappropriate to use it for System and cats who do not mention male and female) This is the only minor problem in the article. It cannot cover up the flaws, but if it can be corrected, the reading experience will be even better.

It's very interesting, a long-lasting relationship. It's rare to see a novel with two female protagonists that doesn't have some interesting points. Until I read the chapter on the snow mountain, I picked up the habit of writing a diary again, recording what happened every day. Just like Xu Qiu said, I will look back at the diary written in the past and relive that day through the details written down. Why is it over? The resident student went home and turned on his phone to see that we had met. I was so happy. As soon as I turned the page, it was over. I have to give me 100 extra chapters. I don't care [crying] [crying] [crying]

It's so good, I didn't expect to eat such fine rice noodles in 🍅🥹 This is really the most unique story I've ever seen. It doesn't use too much force and inexplicably captures the horse, nor does it use the guise of conquering the heroine but actually engages in a dog-licking routine, and there is no cliché plot such that the person who wears the book is the original owner! Moreover, the original owner Xu Zhiqiu is a good person who can become everyone's Bai Yueguang. In this situation, Xu Qiu did not want to replace her, but instead promised her to come back. It was like a second to pass through Shuwen! Back to the protagonist, Qinghe is really not easy, so it is normal for her to be attracted to the free but gentle Xu Qiu. Xu Qiu is the same. To love someone is to love everything about her. Knowing that Qinghe has been planning for revenge for many years, his first reaction was to feel sorry for her. In fact, he must have fallen in love at that time. Although the whole story is both book-like and systematic, it still has a sense of reality (a compliment). Everyone has flesh and blood, including the male supporting characters, and not just mere tools. It's great. Thank you to the author for this story.

It is a very good work. Although the emotional line is slow, the plot is very delicate, the rhythm is well connected, and the details are in place. However, the hole is not small. I hope it can be filled in the future. As the anchor, is your emotional line a bit too slow? [Grievance] Doesn't the anchor plan to write an emotional line? I saw it said non-romance in the profile

The writing is very good. It doesn't matter if the relationship progresses slowly. I just hope that the heroine Xu Zhiqiu has more scenes. Come on, the author.

The author writes well, and the plot is fascinating and makes people unable to stop reading. Bullies are simply abominable. Song Xinya and the others should fall into the endless abyss under the judgment of morality and conscience!

Like it! The two heroines are very distinctive! They are all very smart people, with dark sides and positive sides. It's like real people came to me from the book, not the perfect people in many novels. The plot concept also focuses on social hot spots, campus bullying and cyber violence, which are all worth thinking about, especially the reversal of cyber violence. It is really like netizens, who start venting without thinking, and go wherever the wind turns... It is true that the Internet is about right and wrong, do more and talk less. The characters are very three-dimensional, and even the villains are full-fledged characters with flesh and blood. Song Xinya is very bad, but she is spoiled and can't distinguish between right and wrong. The doting of her family makes her feel that it doesn't matter what is right or wrong, the law and morality, as long as she is happy, but if she does something, she will always have to pay the price. And the author's writing style is really to my liking! The character language and description of the environment are very attractive to me! ! ! The short scripts and stories are also very well written! But I'm so hungry, Master Wen doesn't have enough to eat [crying][crying][crying]

So pretty, so pretty, Xu Qiu is such a gentle person. Although she says she is an emotionally indifferent person, I think she is really gentle and empathetic, and is a very good person. Whether it's the experience with the Andai family on the grassland, or the wish that Xu Zhiqiu can return to his original body, we can all feel that Xu Qiu is really a very, very good person! Weng Qinghe is also a tough and intelligent heroine. He encountered bullying in high school, his friend committed suicide, and he was forced to drop out. Before meeting Xu Qiu, Qinghe's life was very miserable. His mother passed away, his father was a dead man, and he had no relatives to take care of him. He struggled by himself, seeking justice for his friends and himself. Fortunately, she met Xu Qiu, which healed her barren soul. The two of you need to be happy, and you will be a sweetheart for a long time! Also, Xu Qiu is a geographical surveyor. This setting is rare and very novel. The author's description is not out of place, and it is really well written!

The writing is quite good, but because of the title, I thought this book was mainly from Xu Zhiqiu's perspective. After reading the author, he said that he wanted to write a group portrait, but the group portrait also has a protagonist. After reading more than 30 chapters, Xu's appearance is pitiful, even less than many supporting characters. It feels like a personal NPC.

Finished watching it, it's very interesting. Although the interaction between the main CP is light but quite sweet, love is restrained. There is nothing to say about the writing and wording. The first book is so well written ദ്ദി(˵ •̀ ᴗ - ˵ ) ✧, I will read the next one soon. After reading it, it's like drinking a cup of light tea, leaving a lingering fragrance on your lips and teeth. It's not very sadistic, maybe because the main perspective is mostly about the heroine's revenge? It would have been so suffocating when I was bullied as a child. But the sad mood can be seen in just a few words. I am a very empathetic person. Whether reading or writing, I tend to fall into it easily, but crying becomes normal again after a while. PS: It is quite difficult to write a novel. I have recently finished one, which is also my first one. I didn't think too much about it at first. I simply made a rough outline, and then slowly used small events to fill in the progress and progressed to the big world. Fortunately, there weren't many glitches, so it ended successfully~ I also understand the anxiety the author mentioned. In the beginning, there were really not many people watching the stand-alone game, but gradually there were readers. I was still anxious for a while, but gradually I stopped caring so much. Because no matter how many people there are, only one person will write it down, even if the only reader is myself. Writing novels can indeed help you learn something about your wording, logic, reading other people's literature, supervising you, etc. Anxiety is indeed very uncomfortable, but in some ways it can also remind you of the direction and not get stuck in the emotion. The most important thing is to write happily. I write happily. Those are the protagonists in my novel. I hope they will create different sparks.

It's really good to watch. The relationship between Zhiqiu and Qinghe is described very delicately, the plot is also very interesting, and the characters are well created. Everyone has their own story. Great support for the author [Like]

I'm not one to write book reviews, but! Then again! This book is really beautiful! ! I couldn't help but write a book review, hoping to contribute a little bit to increase the rating. The rating shouldn't be so low. Worth a high score of nine points. I think the character creation is very successful, but the emotional line is indeed a little short (but I still like it very much). When I read it, I almost wondered if the heroine had no CP. The author's arrangement of Xu Zhiqiu and Xu Qiu was very reasonable. The biggest point is that the writing is super good! ! And the emotions are very delicate. It can definitely be ranked in my heart. I strongly recommend this book! !

The worldview is well-founded, the plot is simple (positive), the characters all have their own characteristics, there is no dramatic conflict or the change from bad to good, and it is very enjoyable to watch. It is suitable for reading it slowly on a rainy day when you are alone, it is very healing, like a chapter of a literary novel.

So pretty! Finally, it's not just a cool novel for fun. Everyone is three-dimensional and everyone has extenuating circumstances. I really like this kind of complex human nature. These are not absolutely evil characters. The supporting actors are not written as mindless villains just to get the heroine to take revenge. I really like the characters of Qiu and Qinghe, they are gentle, firm, kind and intellectual. In fact, I really want to see Qinghe pick up physics again, because I can feel that she is still interested in physics; I also want to see them go to Caoshuai Hotel to play and travel to other places... It would be nice if the novel stopped here, but their story will not stop. I wish Qiu and Qinghe a happy marriage and grow old together. Hahahaha, this episode is so sweet ε=ε=(ﾉ≧∇≦)ﾉ❤️, I really went to Cao Shuai's Hotel, yeah, yeah, I'm going to pass out from the sweetness! !

The author's writing style seems to be very good, and the plot is also good. Uh-huh, maybe because Xu is the main perspective, some parts of the article lack psychological description of Qing He, which makes Qing He's behavior seem not so pleasant and polite in some places. But no one is perfect. . I feel that the author handled it very well in the end. There was no NTR plot or misunderstanding. Two sincere people will always come together.

It looks good, the plot is good, the characters are good, what role does each person play and what is his perspective, what happens and what role he plays here are all well written and clear, but the plot between the heroine and other people feels a bit lacking in emotional lines, and I don't feel like the heroine Bai Yueguang, but it is also very good and does not feel like a novel. It's also crazy. The men are all normal people and they didn't say that they would harm the heroine by insisting on pestering her. The characters in it are okay except for the Song family and the rumor-mongering brother, but the one named Pei is also very bad. His indifference and indifference when the heroine was bullied, and his strength and control after marrying the heroine are all very bad. Fortunately, he didn't pester the heroine in the end but let him go.

The heroine rarely gets along but is very warm overall. Weng Qinghe is closed-minded but strong and gentle. Xu Zhiqiu respects others + is positive + loves to laugh + is gentle and strong + has his own thoughts and will not be influenced by others. She is worthy of Bai Yueguang level. If it were me, I would also treat her as Bai Yueguang. The character creation is very good, the plot is reasonable and smooth, and every supporting character has a soul, especially Corn Town. I like her very much.

The author writes Xu Qiu's struggle because he doesn't want to occupy other people's bodies to enjoy each other's lives very well. I cried when I read it😭Xu Qiu and Qing He also got together after going through various things. It's so good, thank you Xiao System

Thank you to the author for writing such a good novel, it is really good to read. However, I still feel very sorry that the people Xu Qiu met and the feelings she felt during those three years did not recognize her as she was later.