A World Out of Control

It's a very good book. I enjoyed reading it. The background setting is quite novel and the character settings stand up. It's beautiful. 😄 Go crazy When Nott redeems all four people, and then the "shot that rings the world" happens, and then all four people become demons, the order's combat power will be even higher (laughs, escape at the speed of light (boring, I want to see rivers of blood) Greatness is a curse, built on corpses. ——Heinrich Himmler For Isreal, Nott is everything to her, and she can only protect Nott's heart until death; she forcibly takes Nott's goal of saving the world (for the protagonist, it may be atonement for the world) on herself, but because Nott is too weak and the protagonist's guilt, she It reflects the temporary breakdown of the relationship between the two and Isreal's continuous development of feminization (laughs, for Isreal, this world is not one ten thousandth as good as Nott. I hope that the person who saves everything can also save her. I also hope that when the two meet again, Isreal and Nott can hug each other and cry. Scholar Liang Ji asked his son Liang Shuming: "Will the world be good?" Liang Shuming replied: "I believe the world is getting better day by day." Three days later, Liang Ji threw himself into a lake (I don't know why I added the last paragraph, but I just wanted to add it)

It's good-looking, and the characterization is very vivid from what I've seen so far. Isa chose the protagonist's dignity and life. This is the best result in my opinion. Compared with letting the protagonist insist on staying in the team, the consequence is that the protagonist is too weak and dies on the road, causing the backbone of the team to collapse, or others or even Isa sacrifices to save the protagonist, making the dreams and ideas of the entire team a joke. Isa knows the meaning of her choice. To be honest, the reason why she took the risk is to realize the dream of the protagonist. She also said that she will always wait for him in that village after she succeeds. I personally can't hate this character. The character of the protagonist is also very real. His contradiction lies in his lack of strength and his dream of salvation. This is caused by his arrogance as a former creator. Especially meeting the part he understands will only deepen this arrogance. This arrogance itself is also the charm of the protagonist, which is reflected in the word struggle. If he can practice this kind of arrogance to save the world, it will not be a bright spot.

In terms of emotional description in the author's writing style, the part where Isreal was questioned three times in a row is most vivid and vivid. ""Then can you accept that when you end everything and see him again, there is a strange woman standing next to him? Can you accept..." (Please see the original text of Chapter 3 for details) After the previous foreshadowing, coupled with the heroine's answers, it makes people feel very vivid and makes them feel like a real person. After all, it's the Golden Three Chapters! ! ! And the proud and easy-going Rebecca (I join the Beka Party!) In terms of fighting at White Lion, the fighting is great! \The part where Rebecca was worried that the protagonist would die but still couldn't open the secret treasure made her heartache when she suddenly stabbed me (*´I`*)/ (Becca, you must seize this opportunity and step forward bravely! Successfully become the heroine!) I suggest you read that part where Isreal is angry and read it carefully. Is it red and warm, Lao Yi? (I love, love, love) After I watched it, auv is called authentic~ Damn Isreal, just wait to be surpassed by Rebecca! Other aspects are also clearly prioritized, and the minor ones are mentioned in one stroke, which makes your brain feel refreshed (cough, I would like to write more about Becca's tongue kiss [laughter])

It's broken [crying] Why is it broken [almost crying]. I've been keeping it for so long and I didn't dare to check the account to see how many updates there were, but it's gone! Why are there no books in this genre that I like anymore? [Crying][Crying][Crying][Crying][Crying] I have to start looking for books again. I don't know how long it will take this time. The book is really good-looking, with good plot structure, character creation, and environment creation.

The book is very beautiful, the characters in it are quite interesting to me, and the characters are well developed. The emotions of the characters are delicate and abundant. It can be said that the characters are really described and come to life. The plot also has ups and downs, with ups and downs that make people want to watch it in one sitting. The descriptions in some places really poked me, and the writing is pretty good. I really like this novel you wrote! The bad thing is that the writing is a bit not smooth. For example, I understand that the author wants to describe in detail in some places, but detailed description should try to avoid providing repeated information. Sometimes the author writes two sentences with somewhat overlapping meanings, which gives people a strange feeling (hhh), just like Cheluolian. For example, the author likes to repeat some words used to express turning points twice. I understand that this represents a certain stuttering and the emotional excitement of the characters. However, it appears too many times, especially when describing psychology, which greatly affects the perception. The last point is that the author likes to put a comma after these turning words, but, which greatly affects the reading experience. For example: "But you did not explain the reason for your point of view" and "But, you did not give the reason for this point of view", which look and feel very different. It is true that separation will enhance the tone and reflect the character's emotions and personality, but it doesn't look very good. The above are some of my thoughts, and I hope the author can continue to create wonderful stories!

This year's college entrance examination, I still stayed up late watching [Pause][Pause][Pause]. The plot of this book is beyond words. Everyone's character is great. The conflict between the heroines has not yet broken out. I guess it will be very interesting later. But, I still want to see the normal plot development. If it is too deliberate because some plots may be more interesting, it is very good to set the stage. And I believe the author can do it. I hope to polish it well and I can start with 5 million. I believe the data will get better and better. Then, I think that in emotional dramas, the psychology of the characters must be consistent with the background. I hope that every character will not be ignored. I have not found any poisonous points now. I hope to maintain it and speed up the update. Damn it, you give the data this way and that. The front of this book is uncomfortable and slow-paced. In the end, I may have to keep the book. I hope the author will insist on it. If the book has not been updated in June and there are no major poisonous points, a master certification will be sent first (if I pass the exam). If I don't pass the exam, I will get a big health care [Top post] [Top post] [Top post] [Top post] [Top post]

This Japanese-style Western fantasy novel has the same feeling as staying up late to watch The Dark Lord and the Yandere Sister. Come on, author! My suggestion is that the current plot feels a bit like being oppressed by danger. Although the world view is set in such a dangerous world, it is still a bit depressing to watch. This will also make readers feel that the male protagonist is "weak" and always feels that he is in a "sense of loss of control." The best thing is to arrange more daily plots of traveling or resting, or for the female protagonists to become stronger under the guidance of the male protagonist, and to give the female protagonists more performances to improve their combat power, which can also reduce the feeling of losing control. Then push the emotional line a little more. Have more sweet interactions with the heroines, and write more about the twisted psychology of the heroines. How the heroines changed from innocent girls to psychologically twisted patriarchs. The biggest highlight of the yandere novel is the twisted soul! This process of change caused by the male protagonist is a great point The shaping of the male protagonist is also very important. It can be weak, but the arc of the male protagonist's character must be shown. Don't be afraid of people saying that you are too procrastinating for not promoting the main plot. You must know that most people actually focus on this type of article for yandere fighting and distorted literature. Writing these two points well is the most important. The shaping of the world view and combat effectiveness is the icing on the cake.

It's a very good book. Although it seems to be a relatively old-fashioned book as can be seen in the introduction, the actual content is quite interesting. It can be seen that the author is trying to break out of this framework. The combination of first-person and third-person is a great touch, and the transition is smooth. There is more than one male protagonist in the team that I like very much, which makes it more reasonable. The purpose of driving the male protagonist out of the team is for the male protagonist's good, and the reasons are sufficient and reasonable. This kind of plot is slightly different from books with a similar theme, and the differences are added up little by little. But there are still some shortcomings. I think there are some problems with the progressive transition of emotions. The most prominent one is the scene where the male protagonist and the knight were quarreling. They were clearly talking and laughing before. Although it touches the male protagonist's pain points, the male protagonist should only explode after trying to stop the knight for once but to no avail... The knight was already on top so he didn't listen to the male protagonist. This is normal. Also, I hope that the male protagonist can have a little gauntlet to strengthen his strength. It doesn't have to be too strong. The male protagonist is too weak now and the gauntlet is almost useless. Finally, I feel that it is a bit difficult for the author's book to become popular, and I hope the author can persevere. The author can try to change the writing style to a lighter style, and it will feel very suitable. Come on, author, I will support your words! ! !

It's really good to read, but the score may be low because of the small number of chapters. Sure enough, I can't believe the Tomato score. The author shouldn't be discouraged, he will definitely get better and better as he writes! I can't stand Tomato's "Shuangwen" anymore. I'm not interested in the flat and single-faced male protagonist's character, the pursuit of revenge, and the retribution of flaws, which seem to be "realistic" and in line with human nature. I'm not interested at all•ᴗ•💧. It's been a long time since I've seen a male protagonist with a kind heart, big ambitions and small wishes like this article (I think of Emiya Shirou for no reason! But there are definitely many people with bad personalities). I think it's good for an article that can make readers think. Originally I didn't want to write a short composition, but the author's updates are too slow! ! ! The winter vacation is so slow (of course, slowness is not a problem, as long as you can stick to it once a day, it's pretty good). The main reason is that I am really afraid that the author will become a eunuch halfway through the writing! ! ! So I wrote a short composition to encourage you o(^▽^)o Come on, it's so beautiful. I really like the portrayal of the characters in it, and the plot development is very solid (I don't think the development is slow, it's good to be steady and steady like this), but I feel that the emotional portrayal is too fast and a little anxious. In fact, it could be more delicate. Even if the author's explanation and description are logically reasonable, there is a saying that liking someone in two or three days is still not realistic (ah, how can I put it, it's not that it's impossible to like someone in two or three days, but the portrayal is still not very good in this aspect) qwq), I don't know if the author is a newbie, but if you keep writing like this, it will definitely pay off! Come on ٩(๑^o^๑)۶

The author's writing style is relatively good, but the beginning feels a bit too strong and very abrupt. This feeling will not get better until the sixth chapter, and the perception will continue to get better from the sixth chapter. Previously, you would have thought that the protagonist was just an aggrieved ghost who kept internal friction because his ideals were too lofty. It was myself who caused the suffering, so I resented myself, and because I saved the hero, I had support and the motivation to live. However, because I was not strong enough, I began to distrust and become afraid. I didn't think about it from the perspective of my teammates at all. It can be said that he is a completely unlikable character. But it is from the sixth chapter that the protagonist has a new understanding of his situation with the brave and the rescue team, and strengthens his belief that he wants to go on and do something. This is the growth of the protagonist. I believe the author wants to shape the protagonist into a character who cannot be liked by others at the beginning, who is hated by others, and who often Such an epic story about going through a series of difficulties and twists and becoming a hero with the help of his own beliefs and companions can only be said to be the most touching novel I have read on Tomato recently, but I also hope that the author will really put his heart into creating a protagonist who has firm beliefs and can be called a hero. To sum up, it is not a fast food, but a novel that you need to use your brain and energy to read. It is totally worth watching in your free time.

You are one of the few good books nowadays. The writing style is natural, and the description of the emotional aspects of battle is very detailed and delicate. It can also be seen that the characterization has taken a lot of thought. The main characters are relatively three-dimensional, especially the shaping of the male protagonist, which gave me the feeling of 486 in RE0. The character of limited ability but eager to change the world, longing for power but holding the bottom line in the end really gives people a real sense of youth. The story line and narrative structure of the article are excellent, and the multi-line narrative is also relatively successful. The basic writing skills of the article are excellent. I have not seen the first-person narrative in the previous part of the Internet in almost half my life. When I read it, it was really refreshing😋😋. The settings and background stories interspersed in the main plot are all relatively successful in my opinion. They don't appear to be abrupt and the world view can be established. However, my personal suggestion is to learn from the Western fantasy novels next door and make some maps. The text description is still a bit unintuitive. I still have a few questions that I hope the author can answer. Will they accept them all? I feel like there is no hope at all with the strength of the male protagonist. Also, will Isreal be accepted in the future? I feel like this little girl is just a little awkward, not as bad as other female protagonists who have quit the team. I don't want to see Xiao Tongran regret it for the rest of her life... I hope she can be accepted, or at least give the male and female protagonists a plot to untie their knots, please. Team withdrawal is also an old theme in online articles, but there are few that can make my eyes shine as much as this book. I hope the author can keep writing and don't let the eunuch end unfinished. Come on, I hope to see the plot of the yandere Shura field, I want to see blood flowing into the mouth of the river.

Ahhhhhhhhhh, so beautiful Why should I discover this book the day before school? I originally planned to go to bed early, meow, but this time I stayed up late again I'm really going to sleep, I'm going to sleep, Come on author, I will always support you

The subject matter and character settings are very good, and the ups and downs and developments of the plot can arouse the heartstrings, but it looks uncomfortable. Not to mention the Wangbang opening in the first chapter, the long inner description and verbal description that follow look uncomfortable, and the reason why the protagonist has mental illness seems understandable, but uncomfortable... Looking forward to a first-hand plug-in for the protagonist In the future, will the protagonist give up his childhood sweetheart, or will he be bound to him for a long time? This setting will make him lose everything once he hears the news about her.

The plot in the early stage felt very abrupt, maybe because the author didn't write much, and a lot of the shaping felt a bit messy, but in the middle period, the author began to mature, and the highlight of this book came out, which is hope, hope in different environments. I believe that writing a book is a reflection of the author's own thoughts. I believe that the author is also looking for his own hope. Maybe my feelings are wrong, but this is my feeling. Come on, author.

Advice for those who read the reviews first: The beginning is a little bit toxic, because the male protagonist is a growth type, and his stubborn performance at the beginning is a bit annoying, but in the follow-up, the male protagonist continues to grow through his experiences with the female protagonists. This is a book that starts low and ends high. If you can't stand the poison, you can skip the first two chapters. (It's actually quite addictive. It took me a week to read it.)

The world view is quite large, and I feel like I could write a lot about it, but the description is a bit lacking. I will use my own way to explain it to everyone. The quitting stream is not as pure and refreshing as the quitting stream at the beginning, but is due to the conflict between ideals and reality, and the withdrawal caused by misunderstandings. However, the plot is not well reflected. The time of two chapters directly creates a very strong conflict. Communication does not often exist in this world view. Many times, it is a forced conflict like the plot of Seer, and the old teammates do not appear as villains. However, at the beginning of the two chapters, the emotional foreshadowing is not enough, and it feels that it is not easy to make dumplings later. It feels like it can be like the Legend of Sword and Wind. It can first shape the relationship between the protagonist and teammates, sort out the world view, and then add twists. Otherwise, it will seem really difficult to go deep, but the first two chapters are very confusing. As for the character creation, it feels like the author wanted to create it well, but it went too far. The tsundere turned into a stutter, and one sentence turned into two sentences. It was really too much. Typos seem to be less important. After all, you can basically correct them if you att them. Even if you don't change them, you can generally understand them in the comment area. To sum it up, what I think sounds better than what I say sounds better, which is a pity

The writing is really good, and the inner description of the characters is very delicate. Not only the heroine, but also the paladin and the little girl are also very well written. I hope the author can stick to it [I learned it]

The writing is great, and the emotional line is also very delicate. It is different from the traditional quit-team novels. The supporting characters are not obtrusive and brainless. It is very innovative and more logical and authentic. Personally, I feel that it is one of the best among the quit-team novels I have read.

It is a very good novel, with enough foreshadowing. Except for the beginning (the first chapter), there are no very abrupt parts, and there is an explanation of the first chapter at the end. If you want to read this book, it is recommended to turn off the comments in the first chapter, otherwise it will be easily affected by the comments (I was, but I persisted). The quality of a book is defined by ourselves. This book is very nice [sending my heart]

Yes, it's a pretty good light novel. It's the kind of novel about struggling in a painful world. It's a very refreshing novel. It made me fantasize about the gray and fantasy Grimgar for no reason. This novel seems to focus on the psychological growth of the protagonist, but it may not be very suitable for people who are used to reading cool novels. The protagonist currently feels that there is no strength and no direction of growth. I hope the author can lay out some foreshadowing of becoming stronger in advance. At the same time, I feel that the perspective and psychological switching between the characters are a bit strange, but it is okay. I hope the author can continue to write more.

It can be seen that the world view is very large, and some environmental descriptions can very well reflect the pursuit of details. Maybe in a place like Tomato, where there are so many cool articles, the plot seems slow. Character dialogues are generally simplified. Commas are never used when periods can be used. It's just one sentence in a row. It's rare to see long dialogues like this in this book. Although the image is still a bit classic, at least it is fully reflected, and it can be seen that there is still power in it.

The official description of the world is okay, relatively new, and the female protagonists are a bit quick to comment. The male protagonist feels that he has succubus blood, special attacks on specific women, and more detailed descriptions of psychological activities. This is a bit slow, which means there will be less struggles and fights. I feel that the world view is more grand. Four of the five people in the introduction have appeared. I don't know how to write them after they are all released.

The world view is great and the characters have distinct characteristics. Some suggestions for the author: It's best to divide it into more paragraphs. Sometimes it's really frustrating to see a whole page of unparagraphed content suddenly appear. There is also a bit too much psychological description of the characters. I feel like it would be enough to just write a little side description and let the readers experience it for themselves. Big cheers for the author!

This book has always been recommended on the recommendation list. I thought I wouldn't like it because the title sounded like a light novel. But after I tried reading it, I felt it was particularly friendly. It was written in a very familiar way, like "Jobless Reincarnation". The inner thoughts and experiences of each character are delicacies worth savoring. They are all people like us, and their emotions are the best gifts.

Overall, it feels okay to read, but I feel that the length of each paragraph is too long and looks a bit trivial. It can be streamlined and each paragraph is slightly shortened, which will give a better look and feel.

The more I watch it, the more excited I become. I have been looking for a protagonist who slowly becomes stronger from a weak point without a huge leap in his adventures. He can get along with women in a humorous and reasonable manner, and at the same time, he can think calmly. I've been looking for a starting point for a long time but can't find it. I really didn't expect to see a book that suits my needs in Tomato. What's more important is that there are so many words. I just don't know why the score is so low.

After reading it for a while, I found that the sentences are too long, there are too many parallels, and there are complicated psychological descriptions. However, the subject matter is good, the plot is reasonable, and the characters are vivid. However, the transition is a bit sudden. I feel that the author may be immersed in his own world when writing. This theme has been around for a long time. It is cliché, but it is also classic. It is a good theme that has been tested for a long time.

The plot is really good, and the writing technique is a bit like RE0 (of course, the plot is different, I'm just saying the writing technique is somewhat similar). Each character's mental journey is described in detail.

It's very beautiful. This kind of Western fantasy with an epic feel is really my favorite genre. Although there are a lot of memories and psychological writing, it is consistent with the slow-burn and the characters are very well created and deeply rooted in the hearts of the people. Every character is very vivid, but it is not enough to read, very not enough to read. Thinking about the plot behind it every day makes people feel itchy and uncomfortable. I hope the author can persevere. I really hope to see the final perfect ending. [Love]

Good-looking meow, but not good-looking meow. The harem ending is a must. I originally thought it was a novel with a heavy plot and constant storylines, so I almost didn't read it. Seeing that it's okay now, no 🔪, and no 🔪 meow, no 🔪 meow in the future.