Dragon Fantasy: I Become the Yaomei of the Creation Dragon

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It's pretty good. In the second chapter, Lant met the master, discovered the elemental talent, and gave him a spine staff to start the process of transforming into a dragon. Different from other articles, the experience is about fighting monsters and upgrading. This article is more about depicting the interaction between Lant, the master and the master's friends. The climax of the article begins with two three-year units. In the first three-year period, Lant takes on the task of protecting the students during their training. He activates the first dragon transformation due to the accidental awakening of the mountain dragon, which will be hidden. Things were exposed, and it started from this (transformation). In the second three years, due to the identity change, he had been squatting at home. The master was approaching death. He could have died in bed for several months, but he chose to hold a coming of age ceremony on Lant's birthday, which was also the day they first met six years ago. He condensed the last magic gem as a gift. Another year, Lant completely mastered the power and did not need to hide it. He showed it to the world and called the master Dragon Guide to let the world remember him forever. By this point I was done in my mind. After watching the whole movie, there is very little content, you can jump to watch, the first encounter, meeting the heroine on the boat (no role), arriving at Longze, the battle between the three dragons three years later, the coming-of-age ceremony three years later, and the complete dragon one year later.

It took me about a day to read it. Generally speaking, the authors are in line with the ideal type in my concept. They are willing to spend time to shape the characters and develop towards group portraits. The expansion of combat power is also quite restrained. There is no feeling of making a wave of fast traffic. I have some suggestions here (I am also writing a book. On other platforms, the results are not good, but I have a lot of experience): First of all, it is the foreshadowing that the author attaches great importance to. Since I read it, I feel that the foreshadowing seems to have too much space. I know that foreshadowing plays a very important role in the perception of the future, but for today's readers, few readers will read it carefully word for word, most of them are one sentence at a time. After ten lines of the title, even if the foreshadowing corresponds, it will still feel abrupt to the reader. If the foreshadowing is shortened, or simply put into a compressed package, and the name of the compressed package appears repeatedly, and then taken out when needed, not only will it repeatedly create a sense of presence in front of the reader, but it will also be smoother in hindsight (such as the protagonist suddenly having an epiphany), and it will also reduce the overall length and present more of what the reader wants to see. Secondly, in terms of shaping, my reading experience is that the positive feedback brought by the protagonist is not enough. Simply speaking: "Become a dragon", "Master Mage", "Defeat the mountain dragon", "Others marvel at the legend" are far from enough. In the current Internet environment, these will only become slow-paced links, because readers think that the protagonist will stand on the top of the mountain. Talking about these is like a close-up of the protagonist's fingernails. I suggest here Appropriately add some "showing the saint in front of others" plot, of course not the kind of killing across two levels, but the ability to show unique characteristics among the same level, such as leaving a message quietly, etc. Readers read the article to see the protagonist show off his power, rather than to see passers-by boasting. As a result, when they really fight, they not only have to care about this and that, but also cannot show the power of the real dragon (I believe this is what readers want to see most). Regarding the last paragraph, my next suggestion is to arrange some small turning points when encountering a crisis. On the surface, it is passive (the current passive is also the path of "growth" and "combat power suppression" that you, the author, take), but there is always a small opportunity to make a comeback. Of course, it is not to show all the power. The author yourself also believes that the protagonist cannot show too much power, so the turning point cannot be arranged on the last trump card of the protagonist. This is up to the author himself. Also in terms of pacing, there is too much space arranged in this third battle, and there is not much positive feedback. Many readers think that the protagonist is suppressed throughout the whole process, which is very frustrating. Therefore, I suggest that you pay attention to the arrangement of the next chapter. Try to put as little ink on the villain as possible, and shorten the description of others. What you need to focus on is how the protagonist makes a comeback in the face of adversity. Too much diverting attention will only distract from the main role. Finally, it's about shaping the character's personality. I think the character's personality in your work is not distinctive enough. Simply saying "good-looking with white hair" is too homogeneous. You can add some small hobbies, such as Pepe's gluttony in "I Came from the Abyss Destined to Save the World" and "Blood". Although Charlotte in "Sacred Code" is a vampire, she loves to drink milk, and Lorraine in "Not a Witch" loves to play cards. This is also an important condition to distinguish your work from other works of the same type. In terms of snobbery, it means competing with other online articles for readers' time and energy. After typing so many words, I hope the author can take some suggestions that he can use to attract more readers. After all, slow-paced articles like this are rare now, and articles that can maintain updates and love are even rarer. This is due to cultural changes on the one hand, and changes in readers' tastes on the other. Books are still the same books, but people are not the same people.

The content is very interesting, but the pace feels very fast. Several years have passed in the blink of an eye. The protagonist was well portrayed in the past, but after so many years in the city, my understanding of the protagonist is still the same as it was a few years ago, which feels unaccustomed. In fact, I could write more about magic levels and realms, there would be a lot of words, but now I feel that the different powers of each realm are not realistic and appropriate. I hope the author will write more daily posts [please update]

The details are in place, the emotions of the characters are very delicate, but the plot is not sluggish. At least I feel comfortable watching it. All aspects are handled just right and the details are very good. Except for some slightly acceptable plot advancement, this book is perfect. Come on, author. I have a hunch that once more people read this book, the rating will definitely not be low. At least 8.5 Is guaranteed. Come on (ง •̀_•́)ง

The world view follows Granblue Fantasy, the relationship between humans and nature, and weapons and equipment to create a monster hunter. The talent and skills have a ff-like feeling [face covering] [OK]. When I watched it, I felt a sense of déjà vu. Now that the team of the Sky Riders has been formed, I wonder if there will be characters based on the Blue Star or Claude Tifa templates to join in the future [laughing]

This book is really good, and the Western fantasy novel is refreshing. The last time I read a novel of this type was the one called The Pale Witch's Final Journey. The author said that it will be updated again in November, and it is already the 18th [crying]. Overall, this novel contains everything I want to read. I have always wanted to read a novel in which the protagonist is a white-haired girl, wearing a robe and a hood, and it is best to be a Western fantasy type [laughing]

There's not much to say, the writing is pretty good, but I'm early😭. But I don't know why when I see the three words "Creation Dragon", I can think of Baha from gbf, Baha from Wrath of Bahamut and various Baha stones from gbf [laughing and crying] [laughing and crying] [laughing and crying]

I think Reincarnation in Another World is one of the best books. I hope it's not bad.

Tomato is one of the best Western fantasy novels. It has that kind of epic feeling. I only had this feeling in the book The Star Beastmaster and Evolving Angels from Eagle Man. Good Western fantasy novels are so rare.

Recommended reading index: Outstanding! The work has a strong flavor of Japanese light novels, but this is what I like. What comments are you looking for? Come and read them for me!

Many good books are fragmented in Tomato, but the journey never ends.

Come on, the content looks very attractive, but I don't know if I can see a perfect ending [I learned]. After all, the books on Tomato are either unfinished or cut in half [eat melon]

Judging from the current plot, it is very well written. Coupled with your huge world view, as long as you write it well, it is expected to exceed 1.5 Million words. Come on!

It is a modern light novel setting, but it is an excellent Western fantasy work that you will never see on the light novel platform. Some of the supporting characters are easily better than the protagonists of Xiaobai. It is a novel worth reading.

I can't sleep at night, is this a book I can read on Tomato [crying]

The writing is a bit stiff, but the book is quite nice.

Very nice. It's just that Lan changed his gender a little late, and there was no change before and after the gender change. The evaluation is that it is better to appear as a woman at the beginning.

It's quite interesting and suits my personal taste. Kudos to the author.

It's quite exciting. You can see a special world unfolding in front of you. It's said to be slow but actually the growth rate is very fast. Many places have the feeling of reading comics, which I think is quite good and has a good sense of immersion. I look forward to the follow-up development.

It's a relatively good light novel. It's a rare book that doesn't have any poisonous points. The protagonist is gentle and polite, and there is no stereotyped villain who comes out as a stepping stone. It's just that the author has a few typos and a lot of bad sentences, but it doesn't affect the viewing.

Although it is said at the beginning that it is closer to a Japanese-style Western fantasy, the actual reading of it has the flavor of a female fantasy group favorite. But I like the subject matter very much and give it good reviews

All in all, meow, it's interesting to see the boss playing as a dragon in the new world, meow, but when the boss formed a new team, he seemed to have forgotten about Dollycat and aibo, meow. It doesn't matter if aibo forgets, but it doesn't matter if he forgets about Dollycat. Meow, when the boss flew over and took Dollycat with him, Meowcat has built a strong body and carries the boss's favorite wife's sword, waiting for the boss to come to see meow [cry][cry][cry][cry][cry] XDM After seeing the latest chapter, I can only say that it is amazing. It is worth watching. It really brought back a lot of memories for me when I formed an adventure group. Without further ado, I will just add this. May the blue star that guides the way shine forever for you. [Laughing out loud]

It feels pretty good. It's considered relatively good in FQ. I can stand up as one of them. I don't know how to put it, but I couldn't stand being a nanny later on. The first 30 chapters are still very good and worth watching.

The writing is very good. The characterization is relatively good in Tomato. Maybe it's because the tear ducts are relatively low. I cried while reading the last two pages of the first volume [face covering]

It's okay, but hurry up. It's not enough. I still want it.

Who said there is little content? This content is great.

It's pretty cool, but I didn't see much of the dragon.

Author, please don't die, come back soon

I really shouldn't only have this score, I believe it will be higher later [adoration][adoration][adoration][adoration] I suggest you do some emotional drama, of course I'm just talking about it [thinking]