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Reader comments
Let's not talk about whether your writing is good or bad, but is the word "ah" used appropriately?
The writing is smoother, and the plot advances more naturally. The protagonist's abilities are not shown enough, and the purpose of the struggle is unclear. It is necessary to make plans early on which path to take in the future, whether to develop in the military or become a rich man (hiding the devils with a dark scarf). Is it in the Fruit Army or the Eighth Route and New Fourth Army? Or go it alone? Anyway, decide early. In addition, it is necessary to strengthen the reader's sense of involvement, so that the protagonist can turn danger into good fortune and be full of luck.
Let's not talk about whether your writing is good or bad, but is the word "ah" used appropriately?
The writing is smoother, and the plot advances more naturally. The protagonist's abilities are not shown enough, and the purpose of the struggle is unclear. It is necessary to make plans early on which path to take in the future, whether to develop in the military or become a rich man (hiding the devils with a dark scarf). Is it in the Fruit Army or the Eighth Route and New Fourth Army? Or go it alone? Anyway, decide early. In addition, it is necessary to strengthen the reader's sense of involvement, so that the protagonist can turn danger into good fortune and be full of luck.
Good, good, very good, very good