Accidentally Became Bai Yueguang in the World of Immortality

The overall content is pretty good, but the plot feels a little too fast, the writing is okay, and the characters are OK. However, the plot has major problems. If the plot is changed, I think it will be perfect. The plot connection should be more natural. After reading some parts of the plot, I'm still a little confused. I hope I can understand it more clearly.

It's quite good to watch, but it would be nice if the main plot is clearer. There are too many hidden plots in the front. If it weren't for the main character in the previous article, I would have suspected that it was too much 1v. I suggest book friends to read it patiently, as the plot behind it will be more interesting.

It's not bad, but the section about memories in the secret realm is too long. You can try to write more emotional lines for the protagonist. Overall, it's pretty good. Keep up the good work, author! ! ! [Sending Hearts]

Yes, it's good-looking, the ideas are clear, and the language is fluent and natural. I really recommend this novel, especially the male protagonist has a very distinctive character.