An Otherworldly Cultivator: The Fox Aims for Immortality

You're already a demon, so you better not go to people's places all the time. After all, demons are full of treasures, right?

Give yourself a five-star review to encourage yourself, come on!

How can I put it, it feels very messy. Chapters 1 and 2 are actually okay, but the following chapters are a bit, how should I put it, not a strong sense of continuity. Generally speaking, he neglected to write. Take the monk who chased him, who went out of his way to write about his fiancée, but what did he do? I didn't write it down, but just brushed it off. The transition was like a joke It doesn't matter if you skip the transition. You can just write about them destroying the village or leaving after killing the people. It can be summarized in a few sentences. But I still have to write a few more paragraphs to describe it, and then the narrative is not detailed, the transition and the ending are not much to remember. It can be said that the writing really doesn't make much sense. Also, the monk asked what was going on. I really didn't understand the meaning of his appearance. In order to elicit a laugh, a person appeared specially, and then wrote a laugh and a few dialogues. If you can describe these two people later, it would not be so abrupt, but if you don't use it, it will make people feel that the joke is inexplicable. At present, I feel that it is a transition problem. The meaning of transition is narrative or expression. It can either be introduced in one or two sentences or focus on a brief description. But don't say that it has no beginning or end, otherwise it will be really confusing. I felt a little strange when those monks were struck by thunder. Of course, this is not really strange. It was purely because the chaos in front gave me a feeling of being covered. Finally, it's the process of the protagonist getting the lotus lantern. It went so smoothly. The family members. Finally, it's the process of the protagonist getting the lotus lantern. It's really ridiculous. My family won't say it's too ridiculous. Okay, it's so smooth. I'm sorry. How can I put it? It's not exciting at all. Then I wrote a few more paragraphs. I think the biggest problem with this book is the transition, really. Not long after I wrote it, I changed scenes again. This scene changed and then this one, and it became very confusing.

To be honest, I quite like it. How can I put it this way? It's not very similar to the other fox cultivating immortal novels I've read. It's quite unique. I think it's quite interesting to read, and some of the plots are also very good. I also like the appearance of the protagonist and his growth experience. The above is just my personal opinion and does not represent everyone else's opinion.

The writing is very good and the article is beautiful. Although after reading the whole article, it is too complicated. I will reward the moon worship method + weapon refining + fragrant pill miscellaneous article. But when he turned around, he immediately gave him the Nine-tailed Yin-Yang Cave Virtual Sutra, which he hadn't even practiced yet. There was also a whole Jade Void Yin and Yang Cave Xu Jing. As soon as I started practicing, I met the treasure giver and gave him a fly whisk + a sword. Non-stop encountering new treasures, followed by life and death, destroying enemies, and then moving to a new world. The story is well written, but it keeps going back and forth, as if it said something, but it seems like it didn't say anything. All I can say is that I have been busy and busy, but in vain.

It's messy, a bit inexplicable, and has no main line. And the source of all this is the author's constant efforts to expand the worldview. I have only been practicing the exercises for two days and I got another one, and each one is more harmful than the last. But have you ever thought that the protagonist's cultivation level cannot be used at all, or that he cannot withstand the harm of this skill? Secondly, in order to expand the world view, you keep trying to create a plot to teach the protagonist the exercises. However, your article has just begun, and the plot you have written cannot serve as the basis for your plot to teach the exercises. This will only make the protagonist look arrogant and naive. Secondly, other novels wait until the middle or later stages to understand the root of the problems in the world you live in, or to find the true path of the protagonist. But you kept digging holes in the beginning, figuring out the protagonist's future path and responsibilities, and directly missing an important feature. In summary, the author is too hasty. Everything else was fine, except that the early digging was too harsh. If your plot points are scattered and arranged later, it will be much more reasonable. It will not feel like an invincible novel at the beginning, but the protagonist's cultivation is not up to par, which makes it a bit boring to watch.

The plot connection is not very smooth, it's weird

In just sixty chapters, the author dug countless holes, but none of them were filled.

It's okay🤔

A bit messy. The pace is steady and the writing is good.