Heroine: I Feel Something Is Wrong at the Beginning

The plot should not be too "jumpy", and the description of the characters and dialogues should be more skillful (you can learn from the dialogue methods and punctuation paragraphs of some great writers), it will be an excellent work. The most critical problem now is that the development of your story is too fast. One second you may be in the palace or confronting others, and the next second you suddenly switch to another story line. The transfer point of the story is a bit too rigid, without a good buffer. At least it should not be too fast. One point can lead to another point, and then another point can lead to the change of the story. The protagonist's journey should be gradual, and the characters should not suddenly appear one after another. Keep in mind the main theme of maintaining a good female protagonist, and the female protagonist dotes on the male protagonist. In this way, whether it is a single female protagonist or multiple female protagonists, whether it is mostly daily life or mostly entrepreneurial development, I am very optimistic about this work, and I will become proficient in the description of the writing and the development of the characters and plots. I really like this kind of character setting where the male protagonist is very cute and the female protagonist dotes on him. As long as the author is not a supervisor and doesn't give up halfway, I believe this work will definitely be the first brick on the author's ladder to become a great god!

What can I say, the first five chapters are okay? Even after I lost my memory, I personally didn't like it very much, but I still watched it. I thought it would be better to keep the character I had before I lost my memory.