[Slow Burn] [Reborn Without a System] [Slice of Life] [Healing]
Character dynamic: A gloomy, adorable little old soul x a mature, gentle big kid
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Synopsis:
After being struck by lightning, You Yun is reborn as a red-haired little girl and appears right in the arms of a black-haired beauty...
The beauty is a scheming girl who has a thing for little girls. With a few clever tricks, she lures You Yun home, and then...
Later, the black-haired beauty dyes her hair blue. Since red and blue have always made a perfect couple, she doesn't care whether You Yun is afraid of her. She grabs her and gives her a good...
Simply put, this book could also be called The Perverted Love Affair.
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What to expect:
It's mostly everyday life, with a fairly humorous and engaging tone. There is some emotional conflict too, but the story can feel a bit like a chronicle, with quite a lot of detail. For example...
1. The protagonist plays games, quite a few of them, and there are plenty of details about the games.
2. The protagonist livestreams and shares opinions, such as reviews of anime and songs...
3. The protagonist writes web novels, and the story discusses that in detail.
4. Some sections are stream of consciousness and rather ambiguous, so readers will have to guess.
5. The protagonist is slow to warm up, and the plot may drag at times.
After reading your arrogant evaluation of the early stage of Tokaichi no Yan, and then looking at the books you wrote, I have to say that you are capable, but the level of what you wrote is not on the same level as Toka no no Yan. Essay Pen, your writing style is considered good among the books I have read. If Ten Days End has a score of 85 and Dream of Red Mansions has a score of 99.9, Then you have at least a 70 score. Although you are crazy, you have some strength. Although not much, it is more than a hundred times better than a pure keyboard warrior. In terms of genre, your type is not what I like. Although Lily Dafa is good, it is limited to pornographic stories, Lily emmmmm on emotions. What's more, all I met were beauties and beautiful women, all with good and good-to-good-better personalities, which made me feel disconnected (of course, it's just a novel, so store it in your mind before reading). But this is not my field, so I can't comment too much. In terms of portrayal, You Yun went from a man being struck by lightning to turning into a lolita, and then fell down and was picked up by that one, and that one (let's call her Beauty No. 1) Made a wish to the sky for a cute lolita. As a result, he turned into a character who is world-weary and has a Jade Syndrome (perhaps he was caught in the rain when he was struck by lightning because he went out to relax because of the Jade Syndrome), which is the adjective that the author said at the end of the first chapter: [crumb]. How should I put it, I don't quite understand this operation, but considering it's Lily, it's a bit strange, right? I can understand that too. As for the plot, it's a bit monotonous. There is no obvious conflict or fluctuation in the first two chapters. The introduction of the characters is very sloppy at the beginning, but gradually becomes fuller later on. This is very rare in novels. Finally, the author is a very strong person with a bit of a devilish attitude, which is what others have said: "It's hard to see good things in others" and "it's hard to admit excellence in others". But I think being strong is not a bad thing. Don't be devilish, don't be mean, be broad-minded, open to all rivers, [don't kill when you are born], [give but don't take], [reward but don't punish], this can go further. "If you are mean and start a family, you won't be able to enjoy it for a long time. If you have a bad relationship, you will soon perish." Pretty much, that's it. If you don't like it, just pretend I didn't say it.
I killed my bad self, put on a good look, met a gentleman, started a long and beautiful dream, and buried it in my bones. ——You Yun
Yes, it feels like there is a lot of foreshadowing. Although it is written about healing, I am afraid that the ending will be Be, and it feels very heavy. The plot is like a dream, the appearance at the beginning, the title of the first picture, the prologue of a sweet dream... Etc., The prologue always ends...
The protagonist is cute, the little details are heart-stoppingly adorable, and it's so beautiful. Why don't you continue writing? I still want to read it.
So proud, so sad, so happy, so sad
With deep empathy, you will discover the rich emotions in the writing🤔🤔🤔