After Meeting My Online Lover in Person, I Found Out They're My Ex

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The chosen subject matter is novel and gives people a sense of freshness 👍. In this aspect, the score can be fully improved. The novice's efforts in writing the story are also very praiseworthy 👍, but some details and plots of the story could be handled a little better. The following are some personal opinions and suggestions (try to analyze the suggestions rationally, some with personal opinions) The starting point and discovery of the story is the main line of the ex: the reason for the breakup and how to discover that the "net friend" was her trap. It may be a little vague 😅, but at least a clearer explanation must be given. In terms of the portrayal of the heroine: the tsundere is too far-fetched 🤦, and she showed impatience many times after being discovered. Although it is consistent with the attitude of the "ex-girlfriend" after meeting the male protagonist, it will reduce the impression of the heroine on the readers (but running back to take care of her later makes this setting a little rounder). Secondly, the heroine's angry talk with Xie to piss off the hero is a bit poisonous (it may lead to direct loss of readers 🤦). From the foreshadowing in the previous article, it seems that Xie is scheming, and judging from his deliberate destruction of the snowman, Xie has a bad image for people. Even if Xie is a positive image character, it is quite alien to be used to piss off the male protagonist. Isn't this pure deception, although Xie is a negative image character. (If the reader has mental mysophobia, why don't you, the author, just crash [cover your face][cover your face][cover your face][cover your face][cover your face][cover your face][cover your face][cover your face]) The image of the male protagonist is pretty good, but he has lost a bit of realism towards the female protagonist (too good, too tolerant, but the author is okay in this aspect 👍, more smoky than the perfect and all-powerful male protagonist in other novels) Guo Qianya's portrayal is very good, but the conflict is that the male protagonist's senior brother Lin Xiao also likes her, which is a bit estranged (personal opinion). Lin Xiao had one or two small misunderstandings with the male protagonist because of her in the story. Although it is realistic, it also reduces the fullness of Lin Xiao's character as the male protagonist's brother. Overall, the subject matter is very good, most of the characters are perfectly created, the male and female protagonists are slightly lacking (but this is normal, the novice author may have completely burned out 👍), the plot is okay, but a little bit poisonous. The ending is in line with a happy ending, but it is written in one stroke. There is little sugar in the previous plot, and in the end there is only a little sugar the size of sand 🤦 (In the ending, all CP lines are basically written in one stroke. For such a three-dimensional character as Guo Qianya, the result is also written in one stroke) Although this book has many small shortcomings, this book can still surpass the 👍👍👍👍👍 of many novels. The author is also very potential 👍👍👍👍👍. If you persist for a long time (you should have time to read back the works you write to find improvements), you can become a master of writing novels. I hope to write high-scoring and high-quality novels in the near future.

How can I put it, I finished reading it in one go, and the feelings are still very real. I was quite touched by what I read, and of course I may be envious... In fact, I think this book retains the main emotional line and polishes it, and slightly deletes some of the poisonous points of the knife. I will post more after finishing it. This book should be considered top-notch among tomato romance novels. It is a pity, but overall it is not bad. I would like to encourage the new author with five stars. I look forward to a sequel.

The writing is great, but the pace is a bit slow. Gu Qingze's character could be improved a bit.

Very beautiful, I hope Lin Xiao and Guo Qianya are a couple

A little sweet, a little sharp

Not bad, not bad. The author still has a conscience. The ending is good.

What a great book, no one is there