The Card World: Raising Angels from Scratch

The writing is still very good, but the dialogue feels weird. For example, when they were talking, Chen Ling: Such-and-such words... If you write them like this, I feel like they are talking like robots. You should write the content of their conversation, and then write down their tone of voice, and describe their mood at the time. I listen to books, and I feel weird when I listen to them.

These two stars are for Wang Xue, my scalp goes numb when I see the school beauty🤦

I still don't understand how the protagonist would take the initiative to sell purple cards, make friends, and help others. I was so confused when I saw it. Anyway, I have no desire to continue watching.

Inexplicably, he got an extra girlfriend, and it was only after he showed off his purple talent, and the main character is like a silly sweetheart.

Praise for the subject matter, but the author, I hope you will correct your typos and some wrong sentences, otherwise many people will be discouraged from the beginning and during the reading process. ❤️

Where are Chen Yan's parents? Don't you call your parents to tell them you're safe?

This is still a time travel. Even the natives will not have sex with others just because they are asked to go out for a walk. They have no vigilance at all as a time traveler. In summary, this should be the author's first book. It seems very green. Try your best. Five stars for newcomers.

Time travelers are settings, but they are actually ordinary people.

Okay, after thinking about it for a long time, I feel that either the will of the world has affected the protagonist's subconscious, or the protagonist's so-called "friends" have teamed up to create an emotional cocoon for the protagonist😡

I thought it was for a single female protagonist, but looking at the development up to now, it seems that there are multiple female protagonists. The plot and story are good, but the dialogue is a bit awkward, but I still give five stars to encourage the author 😄