Two-way redemption + campus + sweet pet + childhood sweetheart
Sentimental girl next door x gentle crybaby brother next door
Ning Chuiyun, who has been lacking love since she was a child, doesn't know how to treat other people's feelings, because no one has ever taken her seriously and naturally she doesn't know how to love.
The atmosphere in high school is always inexplicably oppressive. The wind blew through her hair, her native family always gave her pain, and she was suppressed again. With tears in her eyes, she sat holding her arms and crying under the street lamp.
Who is it that feels a touch on the head? When he raised his head, he saw He Hu awkwardly touching his head, his mouth slightly open, but he didn't know what to say.
Her lips were slightly open, her voice was hoarse, and she was crying so hard that she couldn't breathe. "Why are you... Here?"
"I'm worried about you..."
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Between a person who cannot love others and another person who cannot love others, who will become enlightened first?
Later, she had already become accustomed to the young man's comfort. She was used to leaning on his shoulder every time she shed tears, and she felt at ease when she breathed in the familiar breath at the tip of her nose. Perhaps as early as that time when the wind in the park blew past them, they had already become the closest people to each other.
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"Don't cry...."
"Why... What?"
"My... Heart... Aches"
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"I... Like you"
"Huh?"
"Do you... Like me?" Ning Chuiyun's shy voice sounded in the air. She looked at the face of the person in front of her and blushed, unable to restrain herself anymore, she stood on tiptoes and kissed his lips. The imagination that I had imagined countless times in my dreams finally came true.
He Hu was stunned, but made no move to push away and acquiesced. With a hint of smile in his eyes, he spoke vaguely
"I.. Like
Reader comments
The wording is very beautiful, more like prose than a novel. Although the introduction says that the heroine has a freewheeling character, the first impression she gives is that of sentimentality. Both the male protagonist and the female protagonist are perfect artistic images that combine truth, goodness and beauty (perhaps the female protagonist has psychological flaws, but she is very kind in nature and is unwilling to trouble others or harm others), so that it is difficult for people to shine. If you look at this novel from a step-by-step perspective that celebrates kindness, friendship, and growth, it's actually pretty good. But from a plot perspective, it's not exciting at all. Try to enrich the characteristics of the heroine. If there are problems in the heroine's native family, it should be used as a clue in the novel. In the first six chapters, there is no hint of this aspect, which results in the image of the heroine not being three-dimensional enough. How to set up the conflict, it is not a conflict that the male protagonist discovers that the female protagonist is worried, because the probability is 100%. Please think of the protagonist as a flesh-and-blood person, with greed and desire, who should be slowly overcome on the road to growth, so that there is conflict. So do others. The teacher's portrayal is good, with both a stern side and a considerate side. The heroine's love for the hero is ignorant and can become stronger and stronger. After a series of conflicts, it gradually weakens and becomes more rational. At this time, the "do whatever you want" character is definitely a key point (it must be reflected in specific examples). Scenery description, appearance description, psychological description, etc. Are only tools to serve the plot. It is important not to declare the plot to be the master. Only when the plot is implemented, readers will love to watch it. If high school life is hard and you can't write about sweet love, then boldly write about hard high school life! The pain of answering questions, declining grades, and confused future are all intertwined with love! If there is no way back, is there no way forward? Finally, the theme of the novel returns to the difficulty of growing up. The male protagonist and the female protagonist finally get admitted to a university. They look back on the three years of high school and look at each other with a smile. During this period, the protagonist can be confused, anxious or depressed, and the key is two-way redemption. To describe the specific cases that lead to confusion, anxiety and depression, it is impossible to achieve the resonance effect by merely relying on hazy dreams, humid rainy seasons, and confused inner renderings. Of course, the author's wording is very beautiful. If you make good use of this advantage, you can definitely gain a wave of readers. The future is promising, come on! 😘
The plot of the story is very exciting. It is a good youth campus novel. The author's writing is very youthful. I am looking forward to the development of the plot in the future. Keep up the good work!
The wording is very beautiful, more like prose than a novel. Although the introduction says that the heroine has a freewheeling character, the first impression she gives is that of sentimentality. Both the male protagonist and the female protagonist are perfect artistic images that combine truth, goodness and beauty (perhaps the female protagonist has psychological flaws, but she is very kind in nature and is unwilling to trouble others or harm others), so that it is difficult for people to shine. If you look at this novel from a step-by-step perspective that celebrates kindness, friendship, and growth, it's actually pretty good. But from a plot perspective, it's not exciting at all. Try to enrich the characteristics of the heroine. If there are problems in the heroine's native family, it should be used as a clue in the novel. In the first six chapters, there is no hint of this aspect, which results in the image of the heroine not being three-dimensional enough. How to set up the conflict, it is not a conflict that the male protagonist discovers that the female protagonist is worried, because the probability is 100%. Please think of the protagonist as a flesh-and-blood person, with greed and desire, who should be slowly overcome on the road to growth, so that there is conflict. So do others. The teacher's portrayal is good, with both a stern side and a considerate side. The heroine's love for the hero is ignorant and can become stronger and stronger. After a series of conflicts, it gradually weakens and becomes more rational. At this time, the "do whatever you want" character is definitely a key point (it must be reflected in specific examples). Scenery description, appearance description, psychological description, etc. Are only tools to serve the plot. It is important not to declare the plot to be the master. Only when the plot is implemented, readers will love to watch it. If high school life is hard and you can't write about sweet love, then boldly write about hard high school life! The pain of answering questions, declining grades, and confused future are all intertwined with love! If there is no way back, is there no way forward? Finally, the theme of the novel returns to the difficulty of growing up. The male protagonist and the female protagonist finally get admitted to a university. They look back on the three years of high school and look at each other with a smile. During this period, the protagonist can be confused, anxious or depressed, and the key is two-way redemption. To describe the specific cases that lead to confusion, anxiety and depression, it is impossible to achieve the resonance effect by merely relying on hazy dreams, humid rainy seasons, and confused inner renderings. Of course, the author's wording is very beautiful. If you make good use of this advantage, you can definitely gain a wave of readers. The future is promising, come on! 😘
The plot of the story is very exciting. It is a good youth campus novel. The author's writing is very youthful. I am looking forward to the development of the plot in the future. Keep up the good work!