Azure: the New Donghuang Jinan Ship at the Beginning

The writing is good, but starting from Chapter 350, I felt that the author started to let himself go. I don't know what happened at that time, but I think the author must have his own thoughts in doing so. And before reading this book, I thought that the rating was indeed a bit low, because Because I have been reading other fanfics before, including Jiang Linya and Jiang Mengyue in Bilan. I will not compare them with other fanfics. Each has its own advantages and disadvantages. Each author started with a young writing style. I won't say more. Good luck, author. After watching too many star battleships and shipgirls or other ship types, I came back to see the normal ones and found that it was really "announced"! Edible

I have now read Chapter 16, which contains a lot of content. The most important thing is that this is not just an ordinary Bilan article. Regardless of the writing style, the article describes the glorious rise of New Donghuang and its tragic history.

I have read more than 260 chapters so far. I just read the Spring Festival extra. Let's talk about this book. First of all, if you feel uncomfortable at the beginning, don't rush to quit. It is obvious that the author's writing style is improving in the book. It is recommended to consider quitting after about 100 chapters. This book is generally good as a leisure article. What I have seen so far is that the protagonist participates in various activities. The dynamic storyline is constantly about breaking knives (I really like this, I just love watching this kind of knife breaking). In addition, the military and historical related parts are well written, and some famous historical scenes are restored. Overall, it is not particularly outstanding, but it is pretty good, with four stars. Considering that the author is a newbie, I will give it a five-star rating~ Let's talk about the problems. First of all, I am currently confused about the main plot. I don't know why the protagonist has completed the first world (Little Blue World), why there is a second one (Cangsteel World), and why he has to go to the third one (Azure Main World). It feels a bit confusing. It is said that the protagonist is required to save the world, but he still doesn't understand what to save [face covering] The second one is in a multi-line advancement state for a long time. Here is what I see There are three main lines, and there are some minor short lines scattered here and there. It feels very messy and jumps around. I feel that the author also uses this to make a point, which is a bit unsatisfactory. The third is a small problem in the writing style. A lot of modifiers are deliberately added. This is a problem faced by many new authors. It is particularly prominent in the first few dozen chapters of this book, but it is much better in the later chapters. In short, it can be used as a casual article about ship girls, as well as a military article, and is worth reading.

The author can send some sweets. I just came out of the last book with a similar theme. It's like touching the ears of a fox or something as long as it doesn't involve H. After all, Bilan has a touch system. Of course, the most important thing is to intersperse a little bit of the harem on fire. It doesn't take a lot. After all, we are Dadonghuang. I don't know if it can be done?

I like what the author wrote very much

It looks great, I love watching it, but I just want to know if modern ship girls can be as powerful as MEAT ship girls (Rodney MEAT has the ability to explode), Siren is also very popular in the plot [Thinking][Thinking][Thinking]

Well written, please keep up the good work.

Newcomer, is the Nanchang Fleet the commander's sharpest sword? [Laughing]

You can write anything, but sails are often forgotten [face-covering] [face-covering] I have read several stories about ship girls, but there is no sign of sailing [face-covering]

Good book, the author will speed it up a lot so that A001 can come quickly.

The writing is okay, but it feels like it's rushed.

It's good to read. It's the second one I like among the Kanniyo stories I've read. The first one was blocked. I hope this one can be finished.

YY is a bit heavy, but Tomato doesn't have any books of this type, so this issue can be tolerated. There are too many lyrics and it's a bit embarrassing to watch.

... Cause of death: I didn't read the group messages while doing my homework, didn't post screenshots, and was kicked out of the group chat [grievance]

Yes, that's true, but there is no Donghuang in the world view, right, then? Uh... What's it like over there in China? Well, is it possible that there is no such thing in the land of China? Is the whole area a sea? Those blockbusters?

Come on, catch up to the end

My evaluation is a masterpiece

Long live Donghuang, China will live forever

It is recommended not to write that META wrongly I hope to join the Four King Kongs of Donghuang in the future.

Five stars, please give the author a big boost, please update soon! Not enough [sending my heart] [sending my heart] [sending my heart] [sending my heart]

It's not bad. It's a beautiful Azur Lane book. I hope the author will update it soon.

Yes, it would be nice if the dialogue and daily life were more vivid.

There is less eroticism in writing about shipgirls, and I always feel that there is a little bit of flavor missing [face covering]

It is said to be Donghuang, but the composition of this fleet is complex. I also want to travel through time and become a commander [Sparrow Food Masterpiece]

Pretty good, that's all

This book is very beautiful.

So beautiful, it makes my blood boil.

OK, OK, OK, OK, another chapter

Personal impression is very good, but a small part of it feels a bit watery [blowing kiss]

Great job, please give more five stars ꉂ ᳐˶ᵒ ᵕ ˂˶ ᳐ฅ